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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2012 9:10 pm
Since Lilly's on hiatus and Cobra's busy making the exams, I'll do what I can here.
1. Your character history will be in a separate post inside the Life of a Shinobi thread, therefore you should have a link to that topic, not an "edit later" clause.
2. You should include a summary of how your attributes affect your character's personality and fighting style where you put the [?].
3. You forgot to add the Create Poison ability to your list of class abilities.
4. Just because he has no intention of being in a relationship doesn't mean he has no sexuality.
Also, I urge you to consider if this sort of character is something you're going to be happy roleplaying with in the long term. In my experience, the anti-social "hurt and kill everyone" characters are the ones people become bored of roleplaying as the most often.
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 6:22 pm
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 1:26 am
The only thing you changed is that there is now a link to his background. You did not do the other three things.
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 1:35 am
1. You did not include [Create Poison] as one of your class abilities, which it is. 2. Your charka/stamina totals are incorrect. 3. Your character's physical description has absolutely no mention of the physical traits typical of the Enjin bloodline. 4. Keep in mind that the Sensor ability is a chakra skill, therefore you will not be able to use it while you are in [Stealth]. Just something to consider. This isn't something you have to change, but I needed to point that out.
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 4:56 pm
Deil Grist 2. You should include a summary of how your attributes affect your character's personality and fighting style where you put the [?]. look where the [?] use to be, it's right there3. You forgot to add the Create Poison ability to your list of class abilities. Didn't know where to put it x.x4. Just because he has no intention of being in a relationship doesn't mean he has no sexuality. I put it in ( here ) next to not interested xP
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 11:14 pm
little mintchan Deil Grist 2. You should include a summary of how your attributes affect your character's personality and fighting style where you put the [?]. look where the [?] use to be, it's right there3. You forgot to add the Create Poison ability to your list of class abilities. Didn't know where to put it x.x4. Just because he has no intention of being in a relationship doesn't mean he has no sexuality. I put it in ( here ) next to not interested xP 2. No, it's not. This is what it still says: little mintchan Tertiary Attribute: Sexy → (?) 3. It goes where you put class abilities. That would be where you currently have the [Stealth] description.
4. No, you still haven't made a declared sexuality. This is what's there:little mintchan Sexuality: Unknown Relationship Status: Not interested In addition, your chakra total is incorrect.
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Posted: Sun Feb 26, 2012 4:53 pm
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._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|._______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|_________RPC Description & History________________./|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#| Name: Akio Enjin Nickname(s):Monkey Boy Age: 17 Birthdate: Nov 17 Gender: Male Sexuality: Straight Relationship Status: Single/Interested Ethnicity: Japanese
Height: 1.829 m (6 Ft) Weight: 95.25 kg (210 lbs) Body Build: Muscular, Tall Eye Color: Blue Hair Color: White
Physical Description: Normally Akio were a black dress shirt which is unbuttoned with black pants on. His muscles are always showing. He has a tail that he keeps wrapped around his waist like a belt. He has fangs.
Personality: Very playful
Behavior: Very Curious. When in battle his is quiet and fast.
Nindo: Never Live with defeat Never Falter, I will not choke on Failure
Theme song: Chiron - All that Remains
Character History: Coming Soon I promise
Village: Suna
Rank: Genin ._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|._______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|______Ninja Characteristics & Shinobi Skills__________./|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#| Clan/Bloodline: Enjin Approval Stage: Only One Stage for it.
Cursemark: N/A
Bijuu: N/A Bijuu Stage Mastery: N/A
Bijuu Abilities: N/A
Ninja Class: Assassin
Special Ability: Stealth
Members of the Assassin Ninja Class can utilize [STEALTH]. Stealth enables an Assassin Class Ninja to wrap themselves in a cloak of chakra which makes them become invisible to all those around them. This can be done at any time of the day and there is no limitation on how long a character can stay in Stealth. All Assassins are capable of muting their footsteps and minimizing the sounds they make when they move. Only someone with well attuned senses would be able to detect their approach. When running, their footsteps are not muted, but still make only a quiet pitter-patter noise against the ground.
Craft Poison
Members of the Assassin Ninja Class are also the ONLY ninja who can [CRAFT POISON]. These ninja have the ability to submit custom Poisons in the [Custom Technology] thread. These ninja are immune to the poisons they create.
- Assassins can create up to 3 'Public' Poisons, which any other assassin can obtain in some way or another, and which ordinary ninja can access the antidotes for within their villages.
- Additionally, an Assassin can create 1 'Private' Poison, which only they have access to, and which only they have the antidote for. (Only Medical Class ninja can develop antidotes for these poisons, and it takes 10 posts to create ONE vial of Antidote, which cannot be mass produced.)
Tweak: Drop all ability of learning Genjutsu to learn that many more Ninjutsu.
From a young age Akio had always loved being hidden within the shadows. He was always fast and quiet. With his clan he could always get though the trees quicker then most. With being quiet he had to learn to be more of a Fighter in case he came face to face with a target.
Attributes:
Primary Attribute: Speed
Benefit: Speed Ninja receive a +1 rank bonus to their speed, but can even outperform those above their rank by a fair amount. As a Genin, they would be faster in their movements then even the average Chuunin, requiring somewhat of Sp. Jounin to keep up with or catch up to them. Their speed makes their movements blindingly fast, but it does not increase their reaction speed, and therefore does not increase their ability to evade incoming attacks. Higher level ninja with this attribute have been described as simply disappearing only to re-appear closer without showing any sign of movement in between.
However, not just movement speed is enhanced, but attack speed and tactile manipulation as well. With such an increase to the movement speed of their arms and hands, the deadliness of their strikes is enhanced, making such attacks difficult to keep up with as their movements seem like only a blur.
Combat Ability: Once per combat, a ninja with this attribute can utilize a 'Burst' technique, which enables them either to increase their speed by an additional rank (Putting a Genin's speed above that of a Sp. Jounin) for one post or perform an additional action for that round, enabling them to string together combo maneuvers. (Normally, most shinobi would only be able to use one jutsu per combat post.)
Secondary Attribute: Agility
Benefit: An Agility Ninja receives a +1 rank to their evasion, and enables them to more easily dodge techniques, effectively making them more reactive and quicker to respond to an attack then even the typical Chuunin . Projectiles thrown by an agility ninja very rarely miss, and therefore must be in some way deflected rather then dodged. Agility ninja also cannot be knocked off their feet and can balance quite naturally on even the thinnest of wires without requiring the use of chakra. Somehow these ninja always seem to land on their feet, just like cats.
Tertiary Attribute: Great Chakra Reserves
→ User receives an additional +1/10 chakra points. [For every 10 points of chakra a user has, they receive an additional 1 point of chakra]
With being an assassin Akio learned to be very quick and agile. Akio always loved using ninjutsu just in case he got to close to his target and they seen him.
Specialties:
Sensor: Sensor ninja have an innate bonus to detect the chakra signatures of those around them at all times. They are the only ninja who can intuit another shinobi's position or movement purely by detecting their chakra. In all situations regarding [Stealth], Sensor ninja act as if they were one rank higher then their actual rank. Sensor ninja can also innately detect any ninja that does not have the stealth specialty or the [stealth] ability active that is in topic as them. Information gathered by the sensor includes: 1. Rough direction of the target (you could point toward the target, but not directly at him/her). 2. Distance from you to the target. 3. Current general chakra reserve levels: (0-40 = low)(41-100 = medium)(101-150 = High)(151+ = Massive) Inactive cursemarks do not add to the passive total of your opponent, but you can sense the chakra of active cursemarks and classify that target as having "Evil Chakra." Jinchuuriki (bijuu hosts) and Konaga members always show up as having Massive reserves and are marked as having "Evil Chakra." 4. Sensors can tell when chakra is being manipulated. 5. Chakra signatures are like fingerprints that only exist inside the body. You can tell who someone is based off of their chakra signature if you have been with that person and sensed his/her chakra signature at the same time. Note: A chakra signature cannot be described like a person's body can. If another sensor were to feel a person's chakra and have heard what that signature feels like and who it belongs to, they would not know who it is based off that information. You HAVE to have been with the target before while sensing their chakra signature to be able to identify someone purely through the sensor ability.
Chakra Control: All Nin-/Gen-/Tai-/Ken-jutsu techniques are reduced in cost as if they were one rank lower (for Chakra only) at Genin, and at Special Jounin and above, they cost one rank lower (for Chakra only) minus an additional 1 chakra point. Use of chakra control techniques such as Wall/Water walking cost nothing. Also, ninjutsu 2 ranks below the user and below do not require hand seals to perform.
# Chakra Elements: 1
Primary --> Fuuton (Wind) - Genin
Chakra Color: White
Total Chakra: 27 Total Stamina:25 ._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|_______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|______Squad Information & Mission Logs____________./|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#| Squad Name/number: Sensei: Team Mate: Team Mate:
Completed Missions Log:
Total Mission Points (MP) acquired:
E-rank Missions: D-rank Missions: C-rank Missions: B-rank Missions: A-rank Missions: S-rank Missions:
._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|_______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|._______________Jutsu Information________________./|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#| Non-Elemental
Rank E - (Basic)
• Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique) • •
Rank D - (Genin)
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Rank C - (Chuunin)
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Rank B - (Special Jounin)
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Rank A - (Jounin)
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Rank S - (Sannin/Kage)
• Fuuton (Wind)
Rank E - (Basic)
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Rank D - (Genin)
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Rank C - (Chuunin)
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Rank B - (Special Jounin)
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Rank A - (Jounin)
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Rank S - (Sannin/Kage)
• Bloodline Abilities
• • • ._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|._______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|__________Taijutsu: Styles & Techniques____________./|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#| Taijutsu Styles Allowed: 1
Primary Style: N/A → Current level of Mastery:
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._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|._______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|___________Kenjutsu & Custom Weapons____________./|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#| Kenjutsu Styles Allowed: 1
Primary Style: N/A → Current level of Mastery:
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# Custom Weapons Allowed: 1
Custom Weapon 1: N/A (At the moment)
Weapon Type: N/A Weapon Range: N/A Weapon Location: N/A
Weapon Description: N/A
Special Properties: N/A
Associated Kenjutsu/Taijutsu Style: N/A ._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|_______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|____________Apparel & Ninja Tools_________________/|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#| Headband Location | Style | Color: Forehead | Normal | Black | Outfit | Style| Color: Black dress shirt unbuttoned, Black Pants Kunai Holster Location | Color: Left Thigh | Black Projectile Holster Location | Color: Left Thigh | Black Scroll Holster Location | Color: Right Thigh | Black
Kunai: 7 Shuriken: 10 Senbon: 0 Makibishi: 0 Smoke Bomb: 3 Flash Bombs: 0._._._._._._._._._._._._._._|_______________________________________________.|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|.____________Posting Format_____________________./|_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#_#|
I hope this is better.
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Posted: Sun Feb 26, 2012 5:00 pm
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