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 Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 12:03 pm
StrawberryZ0mbie Heh. He and Angela share a hatred of being called midgets! They can unite together on this matter. emotion_awesome Bwahahahahaha! Hurray for the *cough* midgets emotion_awesome
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 12:07 pm
Angel Mhai StrawberryZ0mbie Heh. He and Angela share a hatred of being called midgets! They can unite together on this matter. emotion_awesome Bwahahahahaha! Hurray for the *cough* midgets emotion_awesome They need a "vertically challenged" club! Hehe
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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 12:12 pm
StrawberryZ0mbie Angel Mhai StrawberryZ0mbie Heh. He and Angela share a hatred of being called midgets! They can unite together on this matter. emotion_awesome Bwahahahahaha! Hurray for the *cough* midgets emotion_awesome They need a "vertically challenged" club! Hehe Indeed xD emotion_dowant LOLLL
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 12:13 pm
Before I can accept her, I can only find two flaws when we asked for at least three.
1. Her PTSD and the freezing up and freaking out and not making many friends is all due to that.
2. Panic attacks. Um, I'm not quite sure what you mean by causing her to start talking to those around her like her fellow test subject. Can you be a little more specific about this because I'm having a hard time imagining her in a panic attack.
Chronic nightmares are an inconvenience, but I don't think it's classified as a character flaw. You could, however, list traits about her that result from her chronic nightmares because normal nightmares also causes people to wake up drenched in sweat. For example, due to her chronic nightmares she is unstable in the mind... or something like that.
Once you fix those, she will be accepted. ^^
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 12:21 pm
There are a few things I want to ask about your character before I can accept her.
Bio: Why was she kidnapped and why did her kidnappers send her to Rosentale Academy? Unless they're "good" kidnappers that wanted to save her from her parents and are sending her to Rosentale Academy so she can learn to accept other races, I'm having a hard time imagining kidnappers sending off their victim to a private school.
Character Flaws: So far, I can only see two flaws. You may need to add a few more. If she's clumsy, how can she be good at fighting? Also, clumsy is an often used flaw for people to make their characters cute and out of all the clumsy people in the school, I have yet to see one of them trip or accidentally drop things. So I'm afraid I can't count clumsy as a valid flaw. Also, other often used flaws that you want to avoid are trust issues, short temper, and shyness.
If you need help with character flaws, you can check the Mary Sues 101 thread.
Once you fix those, I'll be able to accept her. ^^
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 12:53 pm
xLieselotte There are a few things I want to ask about your character before I can accept her.
Bio: Why was she kidnapped and why did her kidnappers send her to Rosentale Academy? Unless they're "good" kidnappers that wanted to save her from her parents and are sending her to Rosentale Academy so she can learn to accept other races, I'm having a hard time imagining kidnappers sending off their victim to a private school.
Character Flaws: So far, I can only see two flaws. You may need to add a few more. If she's clumsy, how can she be good at fighting? Also, clumsy is an often used flaw for people to make their characters cute and out of all the clumsy people in the school, I have yet to see one of them trip or accidentally drop things. So I'm afraid I can't count clumsy as a valid flaw. Also, other often used flaws that you want to avoid are trust issues, short temper, and shyness.
If you need help with character flaws, you can check the Mary Sues 101 thread.
Once you fix those, I'll be able to accept her. ^^
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:09 pm
I added a little and changed it up a little. Is it better now?
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:11 pm
x_Lucky_Panda_x okay i fix it i hope its good now 3nodding
I did mention that shyness is a flaw that you want to avoid. Friendliness and shyness kind of contradict. And unless this school was all about swimming, I don't think your character has to worry about swimming in water so I can't count that as a flaw.
Fortunately one of the moderators made a more detail clarification of flaws. So you can check Character Flaws - Doing it right for reference. I hope it helps!
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:15 pm
CoolQueerLeader I added a little and changed it up a little. Is it better now?
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:35 pm
xLieselotte x_Lucky_Panda_x okay i fix it i hope its good now 3nodding
I did mention that shyness is a flaw that you want to avoid. Friendliness and shyness kind of contradict. And unless this school was all about swimming, I don't think your character has to worry about swimming in water so I can't count that as a flaw.
Fortunately one of the moderators made a more detail clarification of flaws. So you can check Character Flaws - Doing it right for reference. I hope it helps! i fix it again ,i hope that will be fine... sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:01 pm
x_Lucky_Panda_x xLieselotte x_Lucky_Panda_x okay i fix it i hope its good now 3nodding
I did mention that shyness is a flaw that you want to avoid. Friendliness and shyness kind of contradict. And unless this school was all about swimming, I don't think your character has to worry about swimming in water so I can't count that as a flaw.
Fortunately one of the moderators made a more detail clarification of flaws. So you can check Character Flaws - Doing it right for reference. I hope it helps! i fix it again ,i hope that will be fine... sweatdrop
I'm sorry but I don't think those will work. Shyness and friendliness clash with each other. She can't be running up and chatting with people if she's too shy. No magic ability is not considered a flaw but a lot of people like to add it in as extra information in the flaws section when they've met the at least three flaws criteria. There are a lot of characters that sleep a lot in the academy and they don't have it even listed as a flaw. It's just a normal habit. Not a flaw.
I'm think I'll list some possible flaws that might work for your character. That way, I hope I can give you some ideas.
- Naive: Way too trusting and doesn't understand the evils of the world. She is easily tricked and doesn't notice details easily.
- Childish/Immature: She is silly and acts like a child. She has trouble understanding things unless it's spelled out to her. It's annoying for some people to deal with a childish character.
- Idiotic: She's not very smart and will do silly things that just gets her and the people around her into trouble.
- Distracted: Can't stay on one subject and often goes off to random tangents which makes it impossible for her to get her work done.
- Always wishes to please others: This causes her to get taken advantage of all the time.
Hopefully the examples above work for your character and if not, I hope they gave you good ideas for flaws for her. ^^
Thank you for your hard work! And I'm sorry for being so picky!
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:25 pm
 Character Information:
Student Name: Cyril Alexander
Species: Robot
Age: 470 years
Gender: Male
Appearance description: I can't think of anything I need to address.
Personality: Usually Cyril has a youthful personality He's not too energetic and he's not overly friendly. He only talks to people when he's bored and when he's not in the mood to deal with people, he tends to be a bit distant or distracted with his mind somewhere else. He doesn't have much of a personality since it mostly stems from the databanks inside him. The personality he usually takes up is his impression of a typical teenage boy.
Bio: Cyril was created by scientists that far exceeded their time in an underground lab. He was formerly known as Model A1. Sick and tired of being tampered with, Cyril massacred all the scientists in the lab and went out into the world where Ichirou's parents took him in and he became Ichirou's playmate.
They grew up together and Cyril considers himself as Ichirou's best friend. After graduating from Rosentale, Cyril worked as a technician in the school. When Mafuyu became principal, Ichirou left to travel the world, leaving Cyril behind. Believing that perhaps it was better they left to live their own lives, Cyril also left to travel the world and ended up studying up on human experiments because he wanted to find a way to make himself mortal. He is still searching for his answers.
He finally returns to Rosentale just to see if anything changed and he found that Ichirou has settled into a mansion and he learned of Ichirou's plans. Wanting to aid Ichirou, Cyril decides to be a student again in Rosentale using the growing technology of the world as an excuse to take classes again.
Skills and Abilities: As a robot, he has enhanced abilities such as inhuman speed, strength, and sight. He can do crazy math calculations in his head since he programmed a calculator in his head.
Character Flaws:
- Emotionless: As a robot, he can't understand feelings and can only use the data he gathered from observing people to make it appear he has emotions but he can do the most horrible things without batting an eyelash.
- Aloof: Friendly enough to get along with others, but he will never let people get to close to him.
- Superficial: Will never look too deep into people and is only concerned about their outward appearance and how they present themselves.
- Unimaginative: He can only process facts and cares little for art and writing and creativity.
- Rebellious: Usually he follows the flow, but if he feels that someone's being too pushy, he tends to get rebellious. Often times he pretends to misinterpret what people say just to ruin what they wanted him to do.
Sexual Orientation: As a robot, he deems this completely unnecessary.
Status: Single, but he thinks this is also unnecessary information.
Likes: (at least 3)
- Science
- Experimenting
- Math
- Technology
- Analyzing facts
- Batteries
- Electrical Outlets (so he can charge his batteries)
- Oil (not the cooking kind! XD )
Dislikes: (at least 3)
- Art
- Creative writing
- Literature
- People who poke to much into his personal business
- Deep conversations
- Water and most liquids
Extra Information:
- When he's dosed in water, he won't die, but he won't be able to move and will require someone to carry him out to fix him. If in water for too long, he will die (or break in his case).
- As a robot, his appearance never changes throughout the years.
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:36 pm
Young Master Oz Vessalius
He looks like a younger version of Sylth with blue hair. 8D
Okay! He's accepted. As Ichirou's best friend, do you want him in the dorms? Or living with Ichirou?
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:46 pm
xLieselotte Young Master Oz Vessalius
He looks like a younger version of Sylth with blue hair. 8D
Okay! He's accepted. As Ichirou's best friend, do you want him in the dorms? Or living with Ichirou?Living with Ichirou! >D
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Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2012 3:07 pm
 Character Information:
Student Name: Mary Lovelace
Species: Angel
Age: Endless
Gender: Female
Personality: Mary is a very rude person evan though shes an angel. she believes that living endless is the most horrible thing ever! Worse then death, she only opens up to people she can really trust and truly dislikes those around her whos not special like her.
Bio: It took her years and years to find out that she is truly a subject to heaven. How she figured it out was her older sister who was fully into madness, though the 'daughter' most wanted. She was the most loved one and Mary was the child that was kicked away and not most wanted. One day Mary got sick of what they've done to her so she began to study, learned knew things got higher levels didn't have to take middle school. When she did that she then bumped her sister out of the way and went into the most loved daughter of all. She enjoyed it but her sister was angered most of all. One day when Mary was walked back from school she was shot at the heart but that didn't kill her somthing else happened. A holy light from the sky itself shined down onto Mary and healed her. It was impossable yet she didn't care. Mary herself turned to see who shot her and found her sister holding the gun. Her sister was shocked by not the fact that holy light came down on her but by another fact. Her sister shook as she tried to say somthing and finally said it "Y-y-your an angel!" Mary shook her head and grinned "Impossible, foolish one" but when she turned around and looked at the window a reflection apeared and there stood tall and proud was an angel.
Skills and Abilities:
- She has wings, so she can fly
- Shapeshift
- Healing
- The power of light
Character Flaws:
- Rudness, she tends to say things she dosn't know that it will hurt the other person
- short tempered
- Can get distracted fast
Sexual Orientation: Unneccessary since she believes that dating is pathetic
Status: Singel
Likes: (at least 3)
- Food
- Kawaii things
- Animals
- Plants
- Life
- Math
- Technology
- Fluffy things
- Plushies
Dislikes: (at least 3)
- Robots, she dosn't really know the meaning for them and why do they live
- Love
- Long conversation
- People talk alot
- people who get into others peoples business
- Caring
Extra Information: Angels do not feel in the sense that we do. They have no sense of touch, smell, or taste. Others coming soon
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