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I am going to give you a choice here; one you might not have realized you had. I will approve this talent if you promise never to submit any enfeebling custom skills. The reason being that Dark Avengers enfeebling skills are very few for a reason; they are powerful and their rank is a testament to that. If you honor the skills that will be added to the class and the ones that are currently in existence and do not make any of your own, than you're clear to proceed with this. If your intention was to make skills of your own, then this talent is approved EXCEPT for all clauses pertaining to enfeebling abilities. How's this sound?.

Rpc Name: Allysa

Rpc Profile Link: Here

Your Customs Thread: Here

Rpc Rank: Student

Combative Talent or Non Combative: Consumes both spots!

Talent Name: Brandings

Description: Through no wish of her own, Allysa has been branded with several tattoos, each allowing her a power when activated. Though this is beneficial to her, there are drawbacks that cause her immense pain.

Strengths
Special temporary boosts to skills or power.
Stronger fighting capabilities.
Grant an innate boost to speed. (+1 Speed)

Weaknesses
Strength has been diminished to pay for gains. (-1 Strength)
If Allysa uses more than one tattoo per battle, a bleed effect is initiated. With each passing post after the activation of a second tattoo, Allysa loses 20 energy.




I realize that this may need work! XD

Alex! I'm very sorry I never got this - I'll be reviewing it and give oyu some concrete feedback before monday. First, please answer a this question:
- Under talent strengths and weaknesses, it says she gets and innate boost to strength and a penalty to speeds. Are these passive effects?

Alright. Looking at the stats Alyssa has, I've no problem with the minor passives 3nodding
Drop Last Resort to 1/1 at the end of its effects, and this talent will be approved biggrin

Rpc Name: Krona Jones

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Custom's Thread

Rpc Rank: Student

Combative Talent or Non Combative: Comative

Talent Name: Shadow Spawn

Description:

The main purpose of this talent is to create shadow where there is none.



Krona summons shadow-gangers: mindless, blind minions formed from the shadow, and infused with the element of their summoner, which, in this case, is air. Krona can command these creatures to attack mindlessly, or can dispel their shape and use their shadow for other attacks.



Attacks by shadow gangers cause minor damage that mostly affects speed. The gangers either hand-to-hand melee attack, or do a ranged attack in which they swing their arms like a sword and create blades of air that can slice through light armor, and skin. When destroyed, their shadow energy is tranferred to Krona, and she recieves a one point boost for each one in play for the stat of her choice for three posts.

Energy Costs

•5 cost in energy, with a maximum of three gangers at Rank E-Rank B, and Five at Rank A and above. At Rank SSS Krona can summon more than five, but with double the energy cost for each additional one (10 Energy). The Number of Gangers cannot exceed 10. Gangers summoned after 10 cost a ridiculous 100 energy.

•5 energy per post for as long as the gangers are in play, both in ganger and in shadow form

Rules

•Maximum of three gangers at Rank E-Rank B, and Five at Rank A and above. At Rank SSS Krona can summon more than five, but with double the energy cost for each additional one (10 Energy). The Number of Gangers cannot exceed 10. Gangers summoned after 10 cost a ridiculous 100 energy.

•Gangers can be dispelled with three strikes. In shadow form, they are bit harder to dispel: they can be dispelled instantly with an elemental attack, or with an light attack.

Shadow-Weres

Unlike Shadow-Gangers, shadow-Weres are strictly for attack purposes; they cannot be dispelled to create shadow. However, they can be used as a shield, forming a wall between Krona and her opponent. They are smarter than Shadow-Gangers, attacking with purpose and technique, or according to Krona's command, but they are still blind, and rely on other senses to fight.

Attack Detail

Shadow-Weres can either melee attack with claws that can slice though light to medium armor and skin, or range attack with a roar that creates air waves that cause no damage, but can disorient or knock down the opponent, depending on his or her strength. When destroyed, they created a shadow shield that lowers the rank of attacks by one rank. The sheild lasts for two posts.

Energy Cost

•Shadow-Weres are 10 energy in cost

•10 energy per post as long as they are in play, both in attack and defense mode

Rules

•Maximum of three Weres in play at Rank E-Rank B, and Five at Rank A and above. At Rank SSS Krona can summon more than five, but with double the energy cost for each additional one (20 Energy). The Number of Gangers cannot exceed 10. Weres summoned after 10 cost a ridiculous 200 energy.

•Weres can be dispelled with fewer strikers than a ganger, two, but since weres are more intelligent than gangers, hitting them is tricky. In defense form, they take the same amount of strikes to dispel: three.



RPC Sample


Her fingers wrapped about her whip. As the guards raised their blades, she drew her whip and cracked it in an arc. With the silence of silk over skin, it cracked though the air. For a second nothing, then red. heads snapped back, gurgles tore from lips, and blood sprayed from throats sliced by her whips tail. Three bodies crumpled, amidst cries of pain and anger, three more rushed at her, now to close for her to wield her whip against them. A blade fell from the air. More red, her own blood, arched through the air from a cut on her arm. She saw he arm was cut, but could not feel the sting

Quickly she made use of it, hardening and tapering the liquid as it fell from the air, to form tiny spikes. She sent those spiraling toward her attacker. He dropped into a defensive stance, legs spread and bent at the knee sword-blade flat before his face. All the spikes but one crashed and splashed, harmless, against his blade. But one rang true, and drove through and exposed portion of his arm. The blade fell from his hand, a curse tore from his lips.
Robes whipping, she leapt back, once, twice ,again, pulling back as they pulled forward. As her feet moved, so did her lips, forming a chant, a summon. Energy drained from her, left her to form her command. The guards stopped briefly, as circles of black formed on the ground, contrasting harshly with the flowing green grass.

And from the ground, shadow was birthed. Inky black hands reached up from the circles of shadow, dark fingers dug into the ground, and from the spots of black, her shadow-gangers emerged. Mindless, blind minions formed from shadows, formed into vague representations of the human form one moment, pulsing and writhing in shapelessness the next.

A grin, wide, toothy, and recalling insanity, spread across Krona's face beneath the shadows of her cowl. The shadows, her friends, were here, and it was time to show the guards the same justice, she'd shown the woman.

Hey Velvon. This is a very interesting talent, and as it stands at reads it is going to be denied. The largest issues here are "The main purpose of this talent is to create shadow where there is none." Which is not permissible. Talents are not meant to allow a character or class to overcome their inherent weaknesses. In Rykros we seek to promote fair and balanced play at all times, and giving a Dark Avenger a talent or even a single skill in which they can create shadow where shadow is not promotes neither of those things, and gives Krona control over shadows that is not granted until the rank of Adept. Additionally, a Dark Avenger's secondary weakness is supposed to be group combat, making them valuable support and single combat character but making them vulnerable when their cover or tactics is blown.

The talent also uses a miniscule amount of energy for the benefits to be gained (Less than an E Ranked skill) until it gets into the higher areas,

I know that's not something anyone wants to hear, but I know you're a very creative and well versed RPer so you should have no problem coming up with something else.

Even after removing the shadow creation ability, you would have a talent that still operates on powers that KJ wouldn't acquire until Adept. A Dark Avenger's connection to The Void is something that grows with time and diligence, and doesn't grant anyone additional powers unless they are earned. It's for this same reason that I had to deny Verideathul's simple talent of creating a cloak and shelter out of shadow while he traveled. This is more of a summon skill than a talent, and still allows her to summon upwards of 20 different creatures with ease after Rank A. The fact that she can summon 6 creatures as a Trainee, especially given that each have special abilities to disorient, block and become shields upon death, is not balanced. I encourage you too pare things down and consider resubmitting this as a custom skill at a later date, but at this time it's not something feasible for Krona to have access to.

Im willing to accept this provided I can still do normal things such as drink water. Im assuming water based attacks will do one rank higher damage to my character? And yeah he definitely won't be swimming... I can accept this weakness, it seems like a fair tradeoff for a very powerful element.