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Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 1:17 pm

Makairo The Hero Of Rhyme

coconut.man92

look, im not tryin to attack, ive seen your stuff, and i know youre good. what i was poiting out was not pity at all. but is some of your battle ive notice people seemed to vote for you because they simply did not want to vote against you. im not gonna name anybody.

Do so. I need these names to continue responding. I need to see proof for myself.

QFE!

but yeah...

My rhymes will put you in a hole/
and make sho' yo casket stays closed./
From the grave, he arose/
just to keep you on yo toes/
and he shall smite you like the rest of his foes,/
two shots in the head, no witnesses, case closed./

Were you tryna compliment Mak or something?

Jesus arose from the grave so I was about to assume that you were going for something like that... but the way that you did it after saying "he arose" by saying he shall smite you... you do know that "he" is now Mak because of a grammatical error.. and the two shots in the head... are him shooting you at this point...

so you killed yourself...

on mak's side

first bar... Nice imagery xp

second... meh

third... meh

forth... meh.. the kosher didn't have much of a bang to me...

fifth and last... that last line could have been done a bit better by maybe saying the fudge in a meta for s**t... rather than overtly stating that the fudge is s**t...

sadly...

because Coconut man spent about 3 of his 5 bars killin himself...

Vote: Mak

Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 1:48 pm

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Makairo The Hero Of Rhyme

coconut.man92

look, im not tryin to attack, ive seen your stuff, and i know youre good. what i was poiting out was not pity at all. but is some of your battle ive notice people seemed to vote for you because they simply did not want to vote against you. im not gonna name anybody.

Do so. I need these names to continue responding. I need to see proof for myself.

QFE!

but yeah...

My rhymes will put you in a hole/
and make sho' yo casket stays closed./
From the grave, he arose/
just to keep you on yo toes/
and he shall smite you like the rest of his foes,/
two shots in the head, no witnesses, case closed./

Were you tryna compliment Mak or something?

Jesus arose from the grave so I was about to assume that you were going for something like that... but the way that you did it after saying "he arose" by saying he shall smite you... you do know that "he" is now Mak because of a grammatical error.. and the two shots in the head... are him shooting you at this point...

so you killed yourself...

on mak's side

first bar... Nice imagery xp

second... meh

third... meh

forth... meh.. the kosher didn't have much of a bang to me...

fifth and last... that last line could have been done a bit better by maybe saying the fudge in a meta for s**t... rather than overtly stating that the fudge is s**t...

sadly...

because Coconut man spent about 3 of his 5 bars killin himself...

Vote: Mak

i was talking about myself in third person.

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Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 2:05 pm

Terrence Urameshi

lmao, whether either one of you tried, coconut was owned. Coconut man had two lines that could actually be considered punches. That alone hands it to Makairo, but to be more specific;

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Homo, slow your roll, I know you hope for sluts,
But niggas bust more white juices on your face than splittin' Coconuts

merked you. nameplay almost seemed unintentional.

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You know I'm so nice, you'd do anything to taste it.
You'd even eat fudge brownies that I made with my waste: s**t.

not hard hitting, but you can see where the concepts connected in the first and second line.

Coconut's whole verse seemed like some kinda story or he was just gloating about himself or what he'd do to Makairo, which in a battle=WACK.

vote: Makairo

You say its wack, but thats just my style. I don't feel the need to go around making clever rhymes on how everybody is gay and how im ******** everybody's mom. unorthodox? maybe. Unfortunately im surrounded by people who dont appreciate it. I like to take some raw violence and spit it on a smooth flow, and my verse was smooth.
But lets face it, most battle here sorround either how:
1: the other guy is gay
2: how you are having sexual relations with a direct family member.
I tried to go a different direction to show some variety. So its not the same battle over and over again just to show who is most convince of the other member's homosexuality.

Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 2:53 pm

coconut.man92

Terrence Urameshi

lmao, whether either one of you tried, coconut was owned. Coconut man had two lines that could actually be considered punches. That alone hands it to Makairo, but to be more specific;

Quote:

Homo, slow your roll, I know you hope for sluts,
But niggas bust more white juices on your face than splittin' Coconuts

merked you. nameplay almost seemed unintentional.

Quote:

You know I'm so nice, you'd do anything to taste it.
You'd even eat fudge brownies that I made with my waste: s**t.

not hard hitting, but you can see where the concepts connected in the first and second line.

Coconut's whole verse seemed like some kinda story or he was just gloating about himself or what he'd do to Makairo, which in a battle=WACK.

vote: Makairo

You say its wack, but thats just my style. I don't feel the need to go around making clever rhymes on how everybody is gay and how im ******** everybody's mom. unorthodox? maybe. Unfortunately im surrounded by people who dont appreciate it. I like to take some raw violence and spit it on a smooth flow, and my verse was smooth.
But lets face it, most battle here sorround either how:
1: the other guy is gay
2: how you are having sexual relations with a direct family member.
I tried to go a different direction to show some variety. So its not the same battle over and over again just to show who is most convince of the other member's homosexuality.

lol, no.......it isn't. In just about every battle i've seen from you, you've typically kept the focus on your opponent, rather than just some outlying topic. For example, your verse against Wolf Magic.

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Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 3:02 pm

well of course, you still have to focus on the other party, or its not really a battle. all im saying is that the Gay jokes are monotonous and frankly unfunny to the point where im tired of hearing about em. Moms and homos are the center of almost every single diss. and thats not very creative.
P.S. check out the verse i just dropped on Wolf Magic.

Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 4:00 pm

coconut.man92

well of course, you still have to focus on the other party, or its not really a battle. all im saying is that the Gay jokes are monotonous and frankly unfunny to the point where im tired of hearing about em. Moms and homos are the center of almost every single diss. and thats not very creative.
P.S. check out the verse i just dropped on Wolf Magic.

But coming from me, in comparison to the verse you dropped, it was more than enough to defeat you.

3-0
Young man...you got knocked the ******** out!

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Posted: Sat Jun 30, 2007 12:02 am

Do I have to? neutral

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I change up my Hoes/
like i change up my clothes/

Not at the opponent... FILLER
Waste of a bar. You say the gay jokes are used, the pimp banter is preschool at best man. So it definitely cancels that appeal out.

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My rhymes will put you in a hole/
and make sho' yo casket stays closed./

This is straight-foward. Nothing special. Nothing particularly humorous or demeaning. Just says... "My words will kill you with a lyrical gunshot."

Am I supposed to be... impressed by this? Are you the first to use this type of wording to describe what you plan to do to your opponent?
It just ain't good man.

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From the grave, he arose/
just to keep you on yo toes/

This begins what I was getting at...

Since you say that you will put your opponent, Mak, in a casket. Saying something coming back from the grave automatically means Mak. NOT YOU. Unless stated otherwise

so let's look at this again.

Quote:

My rhymes will put you in a hole/
and make sho' yo casket stays closed./
From the grave, he arose/
just to keep you on yo toes/

The bold is you, Coco
The underline is Mak
The italics is the audience...

that is how the words appear... and it is not stated otherwise.

which is why the following is basically just putting the nail IN YOUR coffin...

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and he shall smite you like the rest of his foes,/
two shots in the head, no witnesses, case closed./

Yes, Coco. This case is indeed closed. A simple grammatical error that went way, WAY, outta control.

With the way you said the last 4 lines coming up to this.. Mak shall smite you like the rest of HIS foes...

See?

Quote:

See, i am a thorn with no rose/
and that is how i pose./

okay?
Not directed at the opponent and like the first bar, is not used again...
FILLER!

Quote:

You're supposed to be a god, but your just a man/

Okay... we JUST seen DatsexyMC use the whole god thing WAY better than this line... so it gets overshadowed

DatsexyMC

Good going genius gaining gold. Your skills similar to GOD NO PROOF

you didn't get close to that... so that's a negative

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it will be evident when i bust a cap or two in yo head,/
burying you and any dreams you might have possibly had./

head and had don't rhyme..

way to end pal...

and

it's the second time you said "two shots to the head"

so another negative... overall. This is why the verse sucked. there wasn't a single thing that I can say that you did good.

Posted: Sat Jun 30, 2007 7:16 am

I destroyed both of those ********.

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