@[.Potemkin.]: Lol, well moi didn't even see the typo when moi first read it XD;, so I guess its all good.
That may be so ^-^;, but unless Velt City turns out to be some crazy poverty-stricken, war-torn place within the next page and you have no idea what the hell the dude was thinking moving back there, completely shocking the reader out of this kind of dreamy-predictable-shojo-esque kind of feel you have going right now, I'll admit I wouldn't be very interested in reading on. XD; But, hey, I'll wait until the next page before I make anymore judgments--you could prove me wrong! whee
@[DollMaster]: Hehehe, well your opening dream was interesting and sorta dragged me in a bit even though it was cliche'd, so I didn't say anything. xD; Crazy abstract dreams are fun, though, 'cause you hafta figure out how they connect to the character's thoughts. :3
That may be so ^-^;, but unless Velt City turns out to be some crazy poverty-stricken, war-torn place within the next page and you have no idea what the hell the dude was thinking moving back there, completely shocking the reader out of this kind of dreamy-predictable-shojo-esque kind of feel you have going right now, I'll admit I wouldn't be very interested in reading on. XD; But, hey, I'll wait until the next page before I make anymore judgments--you could prove me wrong! whee
@[DollMaster]: Hehehe, well your opening dream was interesting and sorta dragged me in a bit even though it was cliche'd, so I didn't say anything. xD; Crazy abstract dreams are fun, though, 'cause you hafta figure out how they connect to the character's thoughts. :3
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