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 Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:03 pm
StrawberryZ0mbie Hello! There are some problems with your character that will need to be fixed before you can begin RPing. First of all, unfortunately, the picture you want to use is already in use by another player so you will need to choose something else. As far as his flaws go...suffering from a mental disorder is not a flaw, per se. If he is violent or out of touch with reality though, those qualities can be flaws. Is he medicated for his schizophrenia? If not...why? Being over protective is not really a flaw as you describe it. Defending people and being self sacrificing are not vices--they are virtues. Please work out the issues and quote me when you have fixed it. =3 I have changed the appearence, and I have also changed both flaws,I hope it is enough for me to start RPing
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:15 pm
I'm a little confused about the "judgemental" flaw. Most people worry about the decisions they make so that's fairly normal. Being judgemental usually means that you unfairly judge the people and situations around you but it doesn't seem like that's what you mean?
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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:25 pm
StrawberryZ0mbie Could i replace it with Precarious? seeming as it somewhat matches who i want my character to be?
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:35 pm
Xxknight-of-shadowsxX StrawberryZ0mbie Could i replace it with Precarious? seeming as it somewhat matches who i want my character to be? What do you mean by precarious? =3 We just tend to be a little cautious with making sure characters have real flaws that make sense. ^^
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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:54 pm
lol, Like you know, depending on the circumstance beyond his control he becomes unstable, insecure and uncertain of what he should do
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 2:57 pm
Xxknight-of-shadowsxX lol, Like you know, depending on the circumstance beyond his control he becomes unstable, insecure and uncertain of what he should do Okay, that would work. I'm not sure "precarious" is the word you're looking for. but you can put that he easily becomes unstable and insecure in unfamiliar circumstances or situations. I believe that would work.
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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 12:32 pm
 Character Information:
Student
Name: Kai Kevolluse
Species: Vampire/ Human
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Appearance description: His eyes are usually pink, which is uncommon for a vampire like him. When Kai's emotions get in his ways, his eyes can usually match his mood.
Personality: Shy, quiet, gets used to people once he opens up, has his insane moments. When feeling alarmed, interrogated, or threaten he shows his fangs, his eyes change color to a bloodshot red. Once in awhile he tends to day dream , or be unaware of his surroundings.
Bio: Kai grew up to be a very unusal boy. He lived in a small town in the middle of no where, isolated from society. Never has Kai been to school before or seen humans except for his mother. His parents now thinks he's ready to adapt to his new lifestyle and school.
Skills and Abilities: Marital Arts, Hand to Hand combat. Has no use for weapons, just his fist. Also quick on his feet.
Character Flaws:
- Overprotective
- Easily led: For example, if his friends are drinking, he would do the same.
- Lazy
-Absentminded: Preoccupied to the extent of being unaware of one's immediate surroundings. Abstracted, daydreaming, inattentive, oblivious, forgetful.
Sexual Orientation: Straight
Status: Single
Likes:
-Sleeping
-Eatting
-Night
Dislikes:
-School work but does it anyways
-Being woken up early
- Being half vampire, because most of the time people are afraid of him.
Extra Information: Kai is a daywalker. He can survive the sunlight without burning. Thanks to his human mother, and Vampire Father, he has the traits of a human boy and vampire mixed together.
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 12:49 pm
If by defensive, you mean that he's very concerned about criticism and pretty much takes to heart of what is said about his friends and himself and it usually ties into being overprotective, then that would be considered a flaw. Now if you mean that when his friends are in danger, he will do whatever it takes to protect them, it wouldn't be so much as a flaw but more of a virtue since that demonstrates courage. You also need one more flaw. Timid usually is a valid character flaw, but we've seen so many people put it down and then chuck it when they RPed with the character or the moment their characters make friends, the shyness tends to disappear. You can keep it, but I want to ask you to put down one more. Other than that, everything is good! Once you've edited, quote me and I'll take another look. ^^
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 1:02 pm
xLieselotte If by defensive, you mean that he's very concerned about criticism and pretty much takes to heart of what is said about his friends and himself and it usually ties into being overprotective, then that would be considered a flaw. Now if you mean that when his friends are in danger, he will do whatever it takes to protect them, it wouldn't be so much as a flaw but more of a virtue since that demonstrates courage. You also need one more flaw. Timid usually is a valid character flaw, but we've seen so many people put it down and then chuck it when they RPed with the character or the moment their characters make friends, the shyness tends to disappear. You can keep it, but I want to ask you to put down one more. Other than that, everything is good! Once you've edited, quote me and I'll take another look. ^^ Hm. How about now?
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 1:15 pm
Infinite Adrenaline xLieselotte If by defensive, you mean that he's very concerned about criticism and pretty much takes to heart of what is said about his friends and himself and it usually ties into being overprotective, then that would be considered a flaw. Now if you mean that when his friends are in danger, he will do whatever it takes to protect them, it wouldn't be so much as a flaw but more of a virtue since that demonstrates courage. You also need one more flaw. Timid usually is a valid character flaw, but we've seen so many people put it down and then chuck it when they RPed with the character or the moment their characters make friends, the shyness tends to disappear. You can keep it, but I want to ask you to put down one more. Other than that, everything is good! Once you've edited, quote me and I'll take another look. ^^ Hm. How about now? Accepted! He'll be staying in the Malachite Dorm. I don't think there'll be anyone in the dorms since everyone's preoccupied with the ball but you could have him enter and just start talking to other people, but I would suggest you quote them to get their attention if you want your character interacting with theirs since there are a lot of different groups interacting. ^^
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 6:27 pm
Xxknight-of-shadowsxX lol, Like you know, depending on the circumstance beyond his control he becomes unstable, insecure and uncertain of what he should do The phrase you want is "emotionally unstable" wink Precarious is used only when one is discussing a situation. IE: "The rock sat on a precarious angle". Also, I think you mean "duelling" not "dualing". "Dual" means two of something, whereas "duel" means to fight one-on-one with another. When in doubt, grab a dictionary! heart
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 11:10 pm
  Character Information: angel-like creature that was found in a forest
Student Name: aesura Species: dark-winged angel Age: 17 Gender: female Personality: sweet,flirty,protective,funny,truthful Bio: is from unknown planet and found herself in a forest and as she searched this forest, she came upon the academy Skills and Abilities: can fly and see far distances Character Flaws: is a brainiac, gets easily distracted hense she falls into traps easily, is very stubburn Sexual Orientation: straight Status: single Likes: - cute things - good food - hanging out with friends -flying Dislikes: (at least 3) - rain - people that hurt friends - scary faces
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 11:19 pm
There are a number of things that you will need to fix before I can accept.
Abilities: I would advise against having the power to see other people's feelings since that kind of thing won't work in Rosentale as the storyline requires a lot of people to keep secrets and pretend to be nice when they're not nice at all.
Flaws: Not being able to resist cute things in danger or yummy food is not a flaw. Not liking the rain is also not a flaw and would belong in the dislikes section. What we mean by character flaw is what is it about your character that would make other characters not like your character. Nobody is perfect right? So what is it about her that isn't perfect? Is she too trusting or an idiot?
If you need help with flaws, please check and read Character Flaws - Doing it right to help you. ^^
Once you fix those, she will be accepted. =D
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2012 11:52 pm
You need a minimum of three flaws so you need to add one more.
But what do you mean she's a braniac? That means she's supposed to be intelligent to an annoying level right? But if she's so intelligent, then why does she fall into traps easily? Can you clarify it for me?
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