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My poetry
DEATH

I am the shadow that follows you
at night,

I am the dark figure that is not there,

I am the demon that haunts you in
your dreams,

I am the one that knows when it is your time,

I am the one that goes to war with you
but does not bring you back,

I am the one who makes your family mourn,

There is no stopping me no matter how
much you plee,

I will be the last thing you will
ever see,

For death has finally come for
thee.

Written By: PhantomX_13






User Comments: [6]
GaaGaatoNakimasuAhiru
Community Member





Mon Apr 23, 2007 @ 11:54pm


wow that rocked. very deep


Shining-Rain
Community Member





Fri May 04, 2007 @ 04:38am


eek eek im gonna go hide now
that was really good
and pretty freaky eek eek

*hides under a rock* bwahaha! you'll never catch me coppers!!

rofl rofl rofl sry, randomnesss i know

anyways awsome job! that was really good! mrgreen


unknownprincess
Community Member





Wed May 09, 2007 @ 08:39pm


I likethe poem and I could of sworn I wrote a comment on this yesterday. well I like it.


Miyuki_De_La_Luna
Community Member





Mon May 14, 2007 @ 10:25pm


Me likey great poem keep up the good work phantom 4laugh biggrin


PathlessOne
Community Member





Sun Jun 10, 2007 @ 08:01pm


There's no stopping you huh? well....well ninja I say I can. *Unsheaths katana* Bring It On!!! (lol XD)

But seriously, that was pretty good. The only thing I would suggest is that you blend yur lines a little more. Like, put mourn back int to the line before it so you don't have a one syllable line. This way it'll flow a little better.
But, over all, good. Very insightful. ^ ^


Amaya Soma
Community Member





Thu Jul 12, 2007 @ 07:40am


Oh wow. That was great. I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work.


User Comments: [6]
 
 
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