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- Posted: Sun, 27 May 2012 17:01:17 +0000
My favorite -- and in a way, least favorite -- aspect is actually what we hear about the lost crews. It's both chilling and tragic. (Hence the "in a way, least favorite"...it makes me have so much feelings crying Mage's journal omg I died.)
Part of this next chapter is about some survivors from lost crews. And it's going to lead to something eerie in the final chapters, when I get there.
Ooh. eek I think it's been eerie already, so this should be really good.
I also want to see more about the backgrounds of the crew, all of them, and on a related note I love what you do with flashbacks.
I'm going to try and give each character at least one chapter where they get their history told before the end.
Yay! biggrin I love character development. This crew came straight from the dysfunction junction. I wonder if that's why they've gotten so far when all the other crews, composed of ostensibly some of the top players in the game, have failed. Maybe they're just more resilient from it all. (Then again, Mikey did curbstomp Lux in single combat. So maybe they're just a bunch of undiscovered talents. razz And they do have a dev with them...)
And KJ, I actually didn't expect her to join the good guys -- I did think she would betray the Phantom, but only to continue the quest for domination her own way. Her of all people...but it works out.
Who says she isn't still a villain? Perhaps she's using the heroes to eliminate The Phantom for her.
I thought about that -- it would certainly be in character, and it's probably more likely than her switching sides all at once, but from what she says to the Phantom in her nightmare scenario, I get the feeling she'll eventually become the mask.
I'm just wondering though, what happened to the claw hands they mysteriously grew after arriving in Chapter 12? Also, what was with Penelope and that sickness? It disappeared as soon as they beat Frosti and somehow seemed to make her more powerful near the end.
Oh, if I told you the answers right now it would spoil the plot for another chapter, but I'll give you something to think about for the claws... It has to do with Ghi, both channeling it and the infusion process that causes things to become animated. The sickness, it made her more reckless and was caused by Frosti's evil. One mean snowman, right? But what's to say it won't resurface as a future plot point, The Phantom intends to take over the world by enslaving people in zOMG! and making them spread a disease in the real world, the plague of Thenedrana could have been a prototype.
Ahh, I always make the mistake of forgetting to assume the author has everything planned out. xd Then again, I've heard the old "this will all be explained later" line so many times it must have lost its meaning to me. Heh, just a little jab at the author of the other story I mentioned, don't mind me~
Also also, epic shock factor throughout chapter twelve. I hit the wham line and literally was just like, holy s**t. (I'm so glad I don't have a roommate to yell at me for bursting out like that at four in the morning.) Although I'm surprised they aren't/weren't more bothered by the revelation; if I were in their shoes, and found out that the enemy I was fighting wasn't just programming but other players, other people who had tried and failed to save the world before me...even if they were irrevocably corrupted, and even if I didn't know or like them personally...I'd be pretty shaken.
Oh they were bothered, that's actually something they get a chance to stop and talk about, writing that dialog as I type this response actually. But they were more focused on the mission, and given the urgency they pushed down the feelings until later.
I see, I see. One thing I think you forgot in that chapter was Mikey explaining the situation to the rest of the crew; Penelope asked which head was which right after the battle was over, even though up until that point Mikey was the only one who knew about the other crews, let alone who Tridra really was. Would have been interesting to see the initial shock, too.
(Get used to this; I get really excited about stories sometimes. Aelious can attest to that. Three years down the line and I haven't let him forget it. xd I am the quintessential obsessive fan...and you're stuck with me for life now.)
Again, glad you enjoy it. I hope you continue to enjoy it as I'm able to get more material out.
No problem! I'm just glad this exists. biggrin