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[Ryuu_Keiji]

@sword of snow: Hmmm.... Have you thought about her leaving the original world entirely? How about the war causes the world mass chaos and destruction so she has to go to a different world. Or perhaps she is lead into a different dimension or something. Or time travel? She could go back in time before all of the advanced technology (or she could go into the future). Anyway, those are just suggestions. I hope you can fill in the blanks!
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I'm having a little... situation of my own. I have two stories (more like ideas....) that I want to put on paper, but I can't decide what to do with them. Both of the stories have very similar characters... (ok they're almost identical, but... I like my original characters...... cry ) so I would prefer to choose one over the other. Here are the plots:

The first story (takes place in a world with magic, but is similar to medieval times)

This story has a more complicated plot with many turns and twists. There is a prologue that explains how the world came to be (the gods/creators) and explains the past of the world.....
The story starts out with five people who inherit the power of the gods/creators and through a series of events, they loose their powers and have to get them back; meanwhile, there is a war going on. To get their individual powers back, they have to go through a temple/ maze thing (Indiana Jones style... not really) and defeat a huge monster. It actually is way more complicated than that.. but I didn't want to write anymore..

The main problems I have with the story are:
A. I'm going to have to make 4 temples with monster thingys and that will probably get old after the second time...
B. It reminds me of Legend of Zelda WAY too much...
C. If this goes the way I want it to, there will be five "books" and that sounds like I'm gonna end up like scream stressed

Second story (this is the nicer one. It takes place in Earth-- during current times, and in a different world, which is like medieval times and also has magic)

A human is taken from Earth and is brought to a different world. She is raised be a duke and his wife with their two other children-- a boy, who is the oldest, and a girl who is in the middle. The boy is sent off to become a knight and the girl is learning to become the next duchess. The parents are later murdered. And the Human girl has to choose whether to move far away or stay near her family and either become a knight or a duchess like her sister; she chooses to become a knight like her father and brother.
The story involves her going through many hardships like trying to hide her true identity. She makes two friends and later finds out that one of her friends has a terrible past and is related to the person who murdered her parents.

Problems:
A. I have no idea where to go with this story; I think I now what to do with the middle, but I haven't quite figured out the ending or climax yet...
B. I also use three of the characters that I used in the above story.
C. It sounds like it could become the stereotypical "girl tries to become a knight, but she almost fails and then she miraculously becomes better than all of the guys" story...

eek Sorry about the humongous post... any thoughts/ideas/suggestions/complaints?

[CurseofDark]

`Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe:

Ryuu_Keiji, with the first one, maybe if you made the temples radically different from each other, like they each held their own little self contained reality? And you could have them go through some sort of trials or tribulations for the monster to reveal itself to be defeated (like they've hidden themselves as a person from their past or a thought that's haunting them or a lizard or something D: *rambles* )

And in the second one, maybe she becomes the equal of all the guys instead of their better? And everyone accepts her as a valiant warrior worthy of their respect? *puts on my rose colored glasses* And a couple of questions (that may help you with your climax/ending *eyebrow wiggle*) Is she ever going to come to terms with her parents' deaths? And does she know she's from another planet/ever return?

Hope that helps D: I can be a little incoherent at times

All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe!

[Ryuu_Keiji]

@CurseofDark
I was thinking about giving her the choice to kill him, but have her do "the right thing", whatever that may be.
And yes, she did know that she came from Earth. Here's a little more detail:
Her father always wanted another daughter but the wife became incapable of having another child. He goes to the forbidden planet, Earth, to find a child and he brings the main character back.

I... hehe...haven't quite figured out why he couldn't adopt a child in his own world yet... I think I might make it a law, or perhaps he had yet to find the perfect child. That will probably need a little thinking.

Sorry if some things are unclear, this is pretty much the first time I've written down my ideas in a clear, understandable matter whee (not including character or plot diagrams, of course)

Wow, It feels so good to let these trapped details out of my head!!

[CurseofDark]

`Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe:

The right thing could be forgiving him, orrr putting him out of his misery so to speak? (if you wanted to go in that direction, killing him out of mercy cause he can't bare the guilt, that is if he does feel bad about it)
Maybe there's a shortage of girls? Like a genetic abnormality that cropped up in the last 15-20 years, causing a second x chromosome to be virtually nonexistent (of course you don't have to have anything anywhere near as science-y )
It makes pretty good sense, I'm sure it would be even more so if I knew all the details 3nodding

Sometimes that's all you need to do to get a story to function

All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe!

[Ryuu_Keiji]

whee Well, thanks for the advice! It was very helpful! Now I just have to decide which one to start first... I think I'll go with the second and stick to the easier concept.

[CurseofDark]

`Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe:

You're very welcome And that sounds like a good idea

All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe!

[BlueDragonX]

@Ryuu_keiji
Your advice to Sword of Snow sounds pretty much like Asura Cryin'. If you don't know what Asura Cryin' is, it is a japanese light novel series turned anime.

[Tapil]

Hehaku Tokuo

Well, in the past I've tried to explain who a character of mine was. The character, Judgment, was created after I saw a picture of a demon that a friend had made out. (Shown below) Well thing had come down to that he was a demon and was in some kind of group. Eventually in a story that I'm working on people find out that he was the last survivor of this group. The story itself isn't being worked on so I do not need assistance on it at this time, though opinions and ideas are gladly put into consideration.

Well, I finally came up with what the group could have been. Once I came up with an idea of the group I soon came to think of a story behind it. "The Legend of the Court." Basically think of it as a court of demons that remain in their own universe. Other worlds, planets, etc travel to this universe and have people put into the court. For an idea of the time era, simply think of it as a giant world where each planet, galaxy, universe is in its own time.

So what I'm asking is that I need help with the remaining characters, and even some guidance to make the currently made characters better. And before I continue ranting on I'll simply have you guys read up on who the Court members are. Thank you heart


The Court:


Capture: The demon that "holds," in other words the one who keeps the subject in a form of a prison to prevent escaping. The idea of this demon was taken into the real world by people creating so called 'jails' or 'prisons.' Another part about the demon is that he is def. This is to prevent of any reasoning from his target to change his mind.

-For this demon I've imagined a very bulky, dark skinned, male with; chains, hooks, needles, nails, spikes, etc. inserted and coming out of his body all over. I also picture several piercing on his body with silver jewelry, mainly studs, loops, and spikes.

Inquisitor: The demon that "questions." He is the one who finds the evidence needed to get a ruling on the subject. He is also the most disliked demon among the Court due to him constantly questioning everything. With his ways of questioning, not a single person has gotten out of this court unless you consider death a way out of the court.

-I picture this demon as a scrawny demon that is kind of a 'rebel' for lack of a better term. I see him kind of like a skinny, green skinned goblin-like man, with long ears, bright yellow eyes, and comes off as professional but revolting at the same time....think of lawyers XD

Overseer: The demon that "watches/sees." He is the demon that makes sure the others don't go out of line. If he was to see any, mainly the Inquisitor he either has Capture or Judgment put him in their place. People had taken this legend to life by having a system where in a court there is a judge who "runs things."

-As for this demon I can't come up with an original look. I don't want to have him look like an old guy that is large in size. Basically I don't want him to look like a judge as well, so I'm kinda of having trouble on what he should look like.

Judgment: The demon that "acts." He is the one who executes what has been the ruling of the subject. The demon is also blind. This is to prevent him from being affected by who or what he is killing. In the past people had taken the legend to life by taking the idea of killing those who were sent to death with an axe. The demon is also blind. This is to prevent him from being affected by who or what he is killing. They had kept a similar idea of blinding the executioner. Though by simply putting on a mask without eye sockets didn't work due to them missing their targets. So the keep a similarity of the legend they had a black mask with eye sockets.

-Overall appearance is a tall, ripped(muscles), and intimidating person. His body is wrapped in a form of tape due to burns, he also has no skin but what appears to be dried muscle. As for clothing he wears a metal neck piece that protects his only weak spot, the mouth. The rest of the body is covered by a black cloak, in a way resembling the grim reaper. The reason for the piece is because he screams and sees like a bat. The picture that started this entire idea of The Court XD

Juror: The demon that "hears." This is the demon that will listen to everyone and eventually give her decision to _______. Not much is known of the demon due to her actually not every being visible. Though it is known that the demon is a female. Only there are rumors of Juror being multiple people in one body.

-Appearance doesn't matter because she is never seen >.<

*As for the blank in the description; the blank is one of the demons that is the "voice" of the court. Basically the one who announces the judgment/final word of the subject.*

I'm way open for hearing new ideas of new Court members!!! I'm really shooting to have a total of 7 members but I haven't gotten there just yet, obviously. So please give you opinions on the current members, or suggestions towards their character, or just anything to help me out! I really wanna get this thing completed. After all I may make this legend into a story.

It sounds really cool so far! I really liked the idea of making the "jail" death so as not to be persuaded, and making the murder blind for the same reasons. But in a court of law they also have a guard? maybe add one of those? How does this court tie in to the story? im sure your story goes deeper then just a book of like "judge judy" xD

[sword of snow]

Ryuu_Keiji: I did think of leaving the original world. Her set of powers is such that she could and I think she probably does from time to time. I think that might be why her side of the war has such fantastic technological advances such as planes capable of escape velocity (flying into space) and the other side seems to have none of these things.
I thought it might be a last attempt by the enemy side to fight back, in the way that many sci-fi movies have humanity fire a nuclear weapon at the alien mothership, and it's also possible that a spy brought back incomplete or old documents on a large-scale weapon.

I would have to agree about the temples. I've come to find that it is very difficult to make a bunch of temples radically different without using elemental things to do it. It does sound very LoZ but that may just be because I've played the game.

It's probable that your main character was adopted because the duke needed to be able to claim that she was related to him and if he adopted from another world then there would be no one in his own to say that he was not blood related. This would be especially true if people didn't know his wife couldn't conceive.

I've never heard of Asura Cryin' but it sounds interesting.

[Tiffa the cat]

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[Hehaku Tokuo]

Tapil

Hehaku Tokuo

Well, in the past I've tried to explain who a character of mine was. The character, Judgment, was created after I saw a picture of a demon that a friend had made out. (Shown below) Well thing had come down to that he was a demon and was in some kind of group. Eventually in a story that I'm working on people find out that he was the last survivor of this group. The story itself isn't being worked on so I do not need assistance on it at this time, though opinions and ideas are gladly put into consideration.

Well, I finally came up with what the group could have been. Once I came up with an idea of the group I soon came to think of a story behind it. "The Legend of the Court." Basically think of it as a court of demons that remain in their own universe. Other worlds, planets, etc travel to this universe and have people put into the court. For an idea of the time era, simply think of it as a giant world where each planet, galaxy, universe is in its own time.

So what I'm asking is that I need help with the remaining characters, and even some guidance to make the currently made characters better. And before I continue ranting on I'll simply have you guys read up on who the Court members are. Thank you heart


The Court:


Capture: The demon that "holds," in other words the one who keeps the subject in a form of a prison to prevent escaping. The idea of this demon was taken into the real world by people creating so called 'jails' or 'prisons.' Another part about the demon is that he is def. This is to prevent of any reasoning from his target to change his mind.

-For this demon I've imagined a very bulky, dark skinned, male with; chains, hooks, needles, nails, spikes, etc. inserted and coming out of his body all over. I also picture several piercing on his body with silver jewelry, mainly studs, loops, and spikes.

Inquisitor: The demon that "questions." He is the one who finds the evidence needed to get a ruling on the subject. He is also the most disliked demon among the Court due to him constantly questioning everything. With his ways of questioning, not a single person has gotten out of this court unless you consider death a way out of the court.

-I picture this demon as a scrawny demon that is kind of a 'rebel' for lack of a better term. I see him kind of like a skinny, green skinned goblin-like man, with long ears, bright yellow eyes, and comes off as professional but revolting at the same time....think of lawyers XD

Overseer: The demon that "watches/sees." He is the demon that makes sure the others don't go out of line. If he was to see any, mainly the Inquisitor he either has Capture or Judgment put him in their place. People had taken this legend to life by having a system where in a court there is a judge who "runs things."

-As for this demon I can't come up with an original look. I don't want to have him look like an old guy that is large in size. Basically I don't want him to look like a judge as well, so I'm kinda of having trouble on what he should look like.

Judgment: The demon that "acts." He is the one who executes what has been the ruling of the subject. The demon is also blind. This is to prevent him from being affected by who or what he is killing. In the past people had taken the legend to life by taking the idea of killing those who were sent to death with an axe. The demon is also blind. This is to prevent him from being affected by who or what he is killing. They had kept a similar idea of blinding the executioner. Though by simply putting on a mask without eye sockets didn't work due to them missing their targets. So the keep a similarity of the legend they had a black mask with eye sockets.

-Overall appearance is a tall, ripped(muscles), and intimidating person. His body is wrapped in a form of tape due to burns, he also has no skin but what appears to be dried muscle. As for clothing he wears a metal neck piece that protects his only weak spot, the mouth. The rest of the body is covered by a black cloak, in a way resembling the grim reaper. The reason for the piece is because he screams and sees like a bat. The picture that started this entire idea of The Court XD

Juror: The demon that "hears." This is the demon that will listen to everyone and eventually give her decision to _______. Not much is known of the demon due to her actually not every being visible. Though it is known that the demon is a female. Only there are rumors of Juror being multiple people in one body.

-Appearance doesn't matter because she is never seen >.<

*As for the blank in the description; the blank is one of the demons that is the "voice" of the court. Basically the one who announces the judgment/final word of the subject.*

I'm way open for hearing new ideas of new Court members!!! I'm really shooting to have a total of 7 members but I haven't gotten there just yet, obviously. So please give you opinions on the current members, or suggestions towards their character, or just anything to help me out! I really wanna get this thing completed. After all I may make this legend into a story.

It sounds really cool so far! I really liked the idea of making the "jail" death so as not to be persuaded, and making the murder blind for the same reasons. But in a court of law they also have a guard? maybe add one of those? How does this court tie in to the story? im sure your story goes deeper then just a book of like "judge judy" xD

Thank you for helpin out >.< I've considered a form of guard, but Judgement and Capture can do that...but I may just make another character doing so since I'm wanting 7 members. 3nodding

Anyways, the story part is going to be interesting. It is that the story will half way be from the perspective of a defendant. Then the other half is through each demon, so in a way think of each perspective as a chapter when it comes to the demons. But in the story the demons will be ambushed by an army or strong warriors/demons/holy monks/ something. All of them will be fighting, hiding, fighting some more and eventually all of them are going to be killed off one by one. Except there will be one survivor, Judgment.

The story would most likely end with him ending up on the planet Earth. There he would continue his purpose, only now he would be casting his own judgment onto anything that he came across. And thanks to the Inquisitor's ways of questioning and persuasion, Judgment only knows the way of killing.

From there his story ties into the next story of mine, Age of the Paranormal. He ends up becoming trapped in a little boy's body who eventually becomes his master and friend. Since he is trapped in the body he ends up seeing Baku, the boy, as the Overseer. Anyways that story isn't fully about Baku or Judgment, its about other character but the two of them do have large roles.

[Desdamona_the_beautiful]

okay, I'm writing a sci fi story and I'm trying to flesh it out a little by adding in some extra scenes, but I'm having some trouble
I have a character that I wanna give a few extra scenes, but I can't think of a good scene to put her in
the character is a teenage girl who's kind of L-ish
so what kind of scenes would you like to see?