basselope7
I know that it probably will not go over well with many people, but that's how it went in the dream. I was just wondering if telling that part exactly how it was in the dream (as everything up to the hiding in a cave part was exactly in the dream, and I thought up the rest of it a while after I woke up so that the story would be complete enough to enter in a contest, etc.), though sick and disgusting, would work in such a way that the pure audacity of including that detail would shock and horrify the readers enough to give it a reputation for being one of the creepiest/most sickening horror stories ever written. Because isn't that kind of what horror writers aim for?
razz
Your username is awesome btw.
Hmm...
I guess. Although I wasn't thinking of a horrific scene, I was thinking of how this scene seems to be unlikely to happen since babies seem to be straddled to strollers with belts nowadays. I keep thinking of baby battering rams when I read your story summary.
sweatdrop
f you want to keep the inflicting pain with small children ideas, may I suggest choosing dolls for the character to be hit with? Maybe some little girl is pushing strollers that day and some crazed man takes her dolls. Then he beats your main character with them?
Oh! Maybe you could make it unclear whether the father threw a child or a doll at the main character. It might make your main character a bit unreliable, but interesting.
Thanks for the username comment, by the way.