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It's pretty much the same story I've seen told one hundred times. It's not interesting, it's not original, and I wouldn't care to read it.

If there was a big list of comic plot cliches, this would be in the top five.

Well yes, but this sounds a bit reversed. Usually it is the main protagonist who gets transported into another world then meeting their love interest.

Okay don't get so hyped up yet okay, your characters to me have no depth. They don't seem like real people, how would you describe yourself, your family, your friends?
With 10 words? I don't think so.
Characters are people too,
And why only 2 characters I dare ask
In a year you came up with only "2" characters? Really you must of have really used your time wisely for these characters.
And don't describe your characters like, oh he has blond hair and silver eyes or black hair and blue eyes. That tells me nothing of any sort on their personality. Spunky and mysterious, nu-uh.
Those don't give me any clue on how these people are like.
Really look at the people around you and try thinking how you were describe them, then do the same with your characters.
Oh and don't make a mary sue or a gary stu. Those totally suck, I don't want any perfect characters, I'll sure laugh if I read anything with a real mary sue. Make your characters balanced.

sweatdrop maybe I should write out more details...then it wouldn't sound so cliche?
I'll explain more about where Lune is from in the manga, so it'll be a surprise



they took me so long though gonk

Yes that is the beauty in writing, I mean did you really think characters were made out of the blue, well perhaps, but they were thought out carefully. Did you think some of our great writers today and back then did it when they were in their teens? No, well Stephenie Meyer, well I don't count her, she is an example not to be followed.

Oh and also be sure, if you have inserted yourself into the book as another character do not make it perfect, that is what Stehenie Meyer did and she failed miserably and some people are still blind to that fact.

I never read twilight becasue I don't like vampires. xp so I don't know



I like my idea, I don't care if it's not too original i guess

Okay now as in any book there is the climax, the very peak of the story, where some really bad happens, well you know what I mean, there could some things pointed out in the book, secrets, that sort. This climax could also be the turning point of your story.

The falling action well lets say it is the aftermath of this climax, it will affect the main character, the rest of the characters, your setting, and it proceeds like that.

Then ta-da your resolution, this is the end of course, something could be solved or nnot, but some books do not have a resolution at all, so you can do that.