The Story of Star and Lune - 13 pages

[Kersian]

utopiansky

I love manga so I've been working on my own story for about a year now. It's about a girl who is your average high school girl, but then she meets this boy who actually is transported from another world! After they meet, the girl discovers that she is actually from his world and has special new abilities to see the world in ways that no one else can see!

The girl is named Star (which is her nickname). She has black hair and light blue eyes. Her personality is kind but a little spunky
Star

The boy is named Lune and he has blond hair and silver eyes. He is vey mysterious
Lune

What do you think? heart

I will have the first pages of my manga up soon, so you can understand better. whee

yay

Now if you plan on doing a manga, then I want to know what kind of style of manga with this be, well I mean genre really.
Cause these names, Star and Lune, make me think of chibi, comedy.These names are just so well yeah cliche. I mean it sounds like any girl would do or guy.
There are so many names you could choose from, it's like a sundae bar.
Now Lune, you just said mysterious, now the name Lune to me in my opinion does not sound like a male name. Well if he was maybe a little boy in elementary then perhaps I would accept it, but in your pic I see a teen.
But if you really want to keep those names then it's your choice.

[utopiansky]

I don't know sweatdrop to me, Lune sounds manly.

My story is not that serious...it's going to be a light comedy romance.

[Kersian]

utopiansky

I don't know sweatdrop to me, Lune sounds manly.

My story is not that serious...it's going to be a light comedy romance.

Oh I see, but in any good story there must be a plot

[Kersian]

utopiansky

I don't know sweatdrop to me, Lune sounds manly.

My story is not that serious...it's going to be a light comedy romance.

Well I never really have heard any guy with a name like Lune. You might get a urge to just change it in the future.

[utopiansky]

it means moon in french! mrgreen

[Kersian]

utopiansky

it means moon in french! mrgreen

Okay that's what I mean right there.The writer, will usually give the character's name a name that has a special meaning.

[utopiansky]

uhh aren't those the point of names?

[Kersian]

utopiansky

uhh aren't those the point of names?

No you have to be careful around those at times
I remember that basically Mary Sues, or perfect characters, are given by the writer a name that contains a special meaning and I see usually that character with the special name acting in a way or be described as by the writer as the meaning of the name given to them

[Kersian]

utopiansky

uhh aren't those the point of names?

I mean look at the people around you again and look at their personalities. Now look at the meaning of their name and see if their a perfect match. Names do not always have to match with that person.

Do the parents naming them know how they will turn out in the future?

[constant_hat]

If you make this, I hope you're content with no one ever reading your tripe.

A mystical gerbil finds out it has prostate cancer and goes on a magic quest to resurrect Hitler and give him his own talk show.

Now that's a plot.

[utopiansky]

well I guess you'll see when I put my manga up surprised

[Kersian]

constant_hat

If you make this, I hope you're content with no one ever reading your tripe.

A mystical gerbil finds out it has prostate cancer and goes on a magic quest to resurrect Hitler and give him his own talk show.

Now that's a plot.

Lol maybe for a small random webcomic

[The Starling]

constant_hat

If you make this, I hope you're content with no one ever reading your tripe.

A mystical gerbil finds out it has prostate cancer and goes on a magic quest to resurrect Hitler and give him his own talk show.

Now that's a plot.

s**t yeah!

I'd read that alot faster than what sounds alot like a kiddie comic book

edit; okay, so I wasted my time looking at the pictures

hon, let's be realistic. Until you have at least a basic knowledge of the human anatomy and how to draw it, the manga will NOT happen

[utopiansky]

I think I have basic knowledge of human anatomy, thank you very much. I don't see any extra feet or anything. stare

[Kersian]

Okay Im pretty sure you do have the idea of anatomy, but not fully. You're proportions are all off again when I look at your sketches again. Guys and girls are different.
Do you see any girls with no curves, well maybe, but the average girl.
They have cuuurves.
Guys are different, the average guy, and your Lune is the mysterious type as you said.
So he should be more taller and muscular.