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This is a poem I wrote. Tell me what you think.

Sue sits alone
on a cold winter's night
frighted to
because there is nothing in sight

She cries
but her tears don't reach the ground
they freeze on her face
because it's cold all around

She has been here for hours, but it seems like days
the night is slowly going away
Her body is going numb
her lips are turning blue

The sun begins to rise
something comes into veiw
and there stands a lone wolf
staring straight at Sue

The wolf slowly walks foreward
with its pericing blue eyes
Sue's heart is beating fast
hoping the wolf will just pass by

I will add more later, if you have any ideas on what to add to it please tell me.