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Well like the title suggests i'm entering my avi into the arena for the first time. I pretty much have my story all thought out (just letting Robin and others help me polish my description for it). The hardest thing is coming up w/ a title for it. At first i was thinking something like "Unprecedented Matrimony" but then i realized not everyone would understand what that first word meant...so i'm trying to think of something else.

Well i finally sat down with a pencil and a piece of paper and put a ton of thought into my description/story. So here it is. (and heart the title...thanks Stormy biggrin ) Hopefully it is not too long...i just got really into it and had to make myself stop writing. xd

"Forbidden Matrimony"

Heaven and Hell have been waging wars against each other for the souls of mankind since the dawning of time. If one were to see an angel and a devil together, you would not see them having a leisurely cup of tea or conversing like close friends. Instead, you would see them fighting. However, this is not case for this high ranking angel in Heaven's army who has fallen for a high ranking devil in Hell's army that loves her just as much. How and why this happened? No one can truly say except that when it comes to matters of the heart, anything is possible. They first met in one of many battles fought up in the skies above Earth and have been seeing each other in secret ever since. As time passed, they came to realize they wanted to marry and live on Earth, pretending to live normal lives as humans, somewhere they could be together openly and away from all the fighting. This is her, up on a cloud high above Earth, waiting for him at the spot where they first met.

Well there it is but i'm not sure if it is finished editing wise lol. I might switch a few sentences around and really check for grammar and such when the screen is not as blurry lol. My eyes are so tired atm. sweatdrop lol. Plus i'll have Robin and anyone who likes to edit take a look at this and help me out with that but yeah. biggrin Can't wait to enter this into the arena. 3nodding

If you have any suggestions for the description or title, then i would love to hear (well read lol) them. Just please keep it to constructive criticism. Thanks! ^_^

And yes i will up this once i get my overall rating and such. Even if it is really low...i'll also try to include all the comments. ^_^
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Title: Forbidden Matrimony
Score: 7.8406
Total Ratings: 628
Total Comments: 207
Rank: 188

Comments you received

Blue_Princess184
lovely and beautiful FIRST@!

Bleeding Euphoria
That's very pretty! <3

ophidianyvette
Fantastic description and your avi looks great. =]
10'd.

_Lemon sex_
WAHHAH 4rth

suzakuphoenix
love the avei

kikoshi109
OMG this is so nice! Its so elegant and awesome.
The description is awesome too! 10/10

Bloomgirl1
nice

amy_aka
Very nice.=]

gothofrock
thats the best avi i seen in a long time nice
10/10

virtuous_suicide
Best of luck to you in the arena

Black_Swallow
Nice

Canpa
nice

Master-Rouge
sdfg

Ares Grim
Awsome Sis !!!
10000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000
000000000000000000000000000000000000 lol

fire.saya-chan
3

IwaKakusu
Interesting story and cool avitar. As for the
story, I already know that Heaven wins ~_^.

DemonSabbath
thats actually pretty good

naruto-uzumaki64
nice

imXsavage
awsome sister-in-law!!!!!*ish ares husband*

natzu08
Thats a pretty cool avatar

Kisa Hariato
OH...it's a pet peeve, but i hate it when the
whites are all different types of white! sorry but
5

TheFlyingWarrior
wooow very sweet smile

Precious Bleeding Rose
^^ good one~~ mayb add something in background 8.

Cloud The Bushido Master
nice

Strawwbarry
very very beautiful

XxLiLxBexZxX
[-Omg this avitar is brilliant well done -] 10 =]

Black_Bunny_Death
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Trent Valentine
truly beautiful 10/10

8 of Orochi
I AM GETTING REALLY SICK OF ALL OF THESE BRIDE
AVATARS....ITS BEEN DONE A MILLION TIMES ,
ESPECIALLY WITH THE NEW MCs. AND THEY
ALL.....suck.

nikdogers
nice 10/10

beena92
i love it!!!!! 10/10

Lauralant
ohhh your avatar is very sweet... 10/10

Sippy-Cupps
Wow cool avi 10'd

MastroSanta
Seems Romantic yet sad that they are
forbidden...Ill give you a 10!

Levi05990
Love the description. 10.

phantomhaven
i like it. i tried to do somethin of the same
kind...using the white rose as a dress and the
virgo veil...i hope it goes better for you then it
did for me. i might recomend not using those eyes
though...otherwise i love it!

Chibi-Punk747
lovely... 9/10

Evanescence Vampire
ur like an angel and im a fallen one

Luismah
I love it.... 10/10

Peffers Mule
Love the veil!

Halyi
so sweet. smile

rduvb2045
Thats a pretty cool avatar

hianta hyyuga
cool

xI Set My Friends OnFirex
Cute and cute FIRST@!

Vladimir Harkonnen
yet another maiden, waiting for that one soul of a
saviour yes? 10'd rate back?

conducter
Hats off to you, this is by fare the most cool and
best looking avi that I have seen in a while. Good
job ^^

keishou_san
looks very pretty

xcaff3in3x
awesome!!! 10/10

NASCAR9Girl
Not bad, love the look, but the forbidden part..I
dont see it in the Avi. Flowers?

baby_tenshi211
awesome story. 10

celestial midnight fox
fantastic, tragic yet...not unheard of, famillias,
thats the word im looking for,i love the avi,
she's beautiful, nice use of the cloud
representing heaven, although i know you cant fix
this but GAIA needs to produce bigger wings, or
wings period, because thats just an angelbow, you
have a great vocabulary and an exquisite sense of
creativity, dont no if i can do this but 11/10

Aine Yukimura1
cool

Asuka Minerva
Just for you Rayne! Hope you win girl! -Asuka

laramccabe
beautiful

mohawkz
seen it.

hells_nightwish
pretty 10

jovianne
nice^^

Maryenize
Its so beautiful! 10'd

Xxkahoko chanxX
beautiful 10/10

I SHALL NOT TELL
twas e4ntered last week

x_xchitsuki
beautiful!!! you look like an Angel biggrin

elgato_lover
awsome a total 10!

iamcoolerthanu
kool you look like a angel bride

warflame001
That is sooo pretty.

painismark14
i like it. its edgy and pretty. 10

` M A C A B R E [teacup]
Pretty.

Sky Aburame
pretty!

Black cristole
awww it looks just like a angle......XD 10/10

`Squeek
Good luck!

Zinam
Luff it <3 here's your 10!

Evita98
lovely and gentle!9

Sw33t_Lolli3pop
Kewl! Hope u win! 10

coileddeath_7
10

Hyuuga Hinata_N2V
Meh, it's okay, that hair doesn't fit very well.
It keeps bothering me...

Sayuu
Sweety!! 9/10 ^^

miss belldandy
beautiful. lovely. 10 heart

lonelypanda90
wow im a dude and i still think this is the
greatest one ive seen today,good work

Kittenine
Kul, I like it

ikke-joyce
soooo beautiful me heart it

Jhaybz_Rockz02
pretty..

Nigerbaby
nine avi 10/10

vox905
Interesting idea

KyuDeiku
Pretty neat ^^

Erb123
UGLY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! joking i luv it...

Hitsugaya1337
hot and beutiful 10/10

froggy_love510
really....white

Daifuku_mochi
nice

kAwaii=^.^=_NekoChan
great

remki
cool, 10/10

dragonprincess_bloom
ok

ashecure
cute

SakuraKyoyama
pretty!

XXSparkxterXX
cool avi

tromell-unleashed
nice

AzureFlame
It's quite beautiful and ever so elegant. XD
Nicely done indeed.

Vincent Little
9

kitoga
^^ Nice story

Agele Nine
While lovely, this would work better if you had a
male demonic avatar also in the arena as a
compliment.

Susanne_x
nice 3nodding

Dawnfrost
Pretty. <3 9'd

clarisse13
awesome

kikomeru2
i love it!!!!! u've got a great story too u should
totally win!!!!!!10/10 blaugh

Sakika29
cool 10/10

Starry_Sara
Winter rose is used so many times and put some
more angelic stuff in like a collar >.>

0Konnyaku_Yuna0
well..God WON'T ALLOW evil and angel be
lovers..lolz go read the Holy Bible 9/10

i am mr emo
what are you going to a weding??

xgacktsan
beautiful biggrin

angelalostsoul
beutifull 3nodding

That Emo Girl
*in awe* amazing. this one truly deserves to win.
i hope you get the 50000g grand prize.

Crimson_Dragon95
Thats cute

Brian the Cannibal
YAAAAY! 10/10. ^_^

Tima Beauregarde
pretty

outlawspimpage
Ahh!... extremely cool.

in love with ash
i love ur outfit i give it a 10

Jose_Kun101
awsome

sillygurlz1789
it so cute 4laugh

Whore Colon
4/10

Sakura die Kirsche Blute
awesome

Blurple-Berri
It's been done...

Kekyo
beautiful! 10/10

RockOnEmoKid
Interesting

Zachtbell
ok

)(blue moon at midnight)(
lovel & beautiful

xxsabahxx
this avi is so cute i wish i had soemthing like
that it is so cute !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

omaru blackheart
8

Duskstormrose
Absolutely beautiful! The description only adds to
the lovely effect. ^_^

LilxBabiCrystal
Cute xD

Chemist_Dropout
nice i luv u 10/10

LilSw33tBabii
Perty

)(blue moon at midnight)(
lovely & beautiful <3

kiemthuat
r u a bride?

polin_btx
soo cute avi nicee and
pretty!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

grumpy soccer girl94
kewl avi and story

Jayleena
lovely and beautiful...very cool....I LOVE IT!

obeytheflower
story is pretty good. Avatar is a bit too
cluttered fo my taste. 6/10

drac0L0ver
Oh wow! The description is accurate on your avi
and it's very elegant and beautiful! Hope you win!

yumipower23
cute! 10

j-mac34
sexy beutiful and hot.bow wow wow yipee yo yippe
yay where my cloud at float with me now.

Odalisque3
Just 10/ 10

DragonBoy 1
fghjkghjkghj

ScarletSakura
I love it!

xXxSK8terboixXx
this stuff in gaia is awsome dudes its gnarly
people!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lil_User85
nice avi,9/10

Kitsuneaku_Rene
Wow, she's beautiful! I like the story!

bartzo
Thats a pretty cool avatar

DragonQueen5493
beautiful avi, beautiful story

phantom_creepo
Thats a pretty cool avatar

odoine
awsome 10 out of 10

Eunice_rocks
really pretty.1st

xPuffyx
It's so pretty. It was be awesome if she could
carry the Staff of Angels but umm..it's pretty
hard to get yeh? 8.

sport_79
10101010101010101010!

Rachellezorz
this has been done so many times over. it's too
old now; drop the 'perfect angel bride' deal.[[no
vote]]

saiyuri_sama
Lovely an beautiful. You are a very promised
writer! 10/10. Please vote back!

yo_mamas_daddy
very nice ill give you a 7

Andres3055
9

justin my name
very nice wow i wish had all that lol well good
luck i hope you win

pro-kon
bride or bridesmaid anyway10/10

Tsukira Reitaki
AWWW! I love the storyline behind it!

Raine_Amara
Wow it's heavenly cool and it's pretty too!!

Chadoc55
Wow. Very pretty. This is very creative and
beautiful. 10

i have a secret
pretty

aPoLo_MaRtE
is very cool and cute 10

IchigoSohma
oh!... quite nice! :]

SnOw~ang~GEL
beautiful

icefire1995
10

Beautiful Wishes
cool!

Foxxe
aw

Nar1217
A 10!

kikki 9
i like it very creative! ^^

IceAir-Dragon
wow i like it!!! smile biggrin it is sooo nice and
pretty! blaugh 4laugh rofl i like the white and
the cloud!

Wispery
cute

marjory100
A little angel! biggrin It's very beautiful! I love
the style! I give you a 8

cassy_123_45
kool

Armond_Lamia
10'd

Ruki15
5/10

Mitsuki_Amaya
AWESUM!!!! 100/10!!!!![/color:acae8203b3]

heavens_outcast
very pretty! eek 10!

samantha ikumi
that's a good avatar.

[0angel-eye0]
O.O! Pretty! I like the combination! 9/10

samantha ikumi
luv it

slipnieco
beautiful 9

Haruka-Uchiha
Cool Avi! 10/10.

Gubdub
nice job

jeu_de_sang
5/10

King Nalfein
Nice.

TwilightEagle
I like the elegant simplicity of this avatar,
the matching colors of it, and the amazing
description. A 10 from a random stranger you do
not know.

SuzukiAyumi92
cool~~!

kenkao27
its very pretty!

Oxis
Pretty nice. Like the story!

~karaboshi~
Nice.

Loscann
pretty

foreversaber
Love the avi and story

Shrineknite
krkme

glue499245
Hmm... extremely cute!!!!

anjool123
pretty

insisted_556552
omg this is astonishing

actions by inpulse823
perrty

XxKittahxX
lovely..amazingly lovely. 10

-T!nk3r_B3ll-
Gaii name, but pretty avi.

breast-etes
this is colorful!!!

Tracelor
beatifull !

lalalala0009
Thats a pretty cool avatar

kureshii
love the beauty! You look like an angel bride!

Raven of Mitternacht
beautiful

xCandix123
CUTE ^-^

minniemouse61793
aw cute story!! and she is very beautiful!! nice
job!!! biggrin

sugar light stars
It's awsome but maybe you could have done with out
the veil.