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 Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2007 2:59 pm
Another poem. Thought of it while it was thunderstorming outside. Hope you like it!
I'm Not Alone
The rain is
Pounding on the ground
Pouring on me
And all around
Hitting my face
Disguising my tears
But unfortunately
Not hiding my fears.
The thunder is
Booming in the sky
Being heard from
People passing by
Echoing in my mind
Drowning out my cries
But unfortunately
Not stopping the lies.
The lightning is
Flashing in the night
Bright strikes
That gives me frights
Blinking in my face
Blinding me
But unfortunately
Not permanently.
The storm is
Silent but also loud
With cool drops
That falls from clouds
Leaving me with shivers
After the wind has blown
But unfortunately
I’m not alone.
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Posted: Tue Aug 07, 2007 6:44 pm
ok, so i don't quite understand. in the two linesyour saying that unfortunately your not alone. so your saying you want to be alone? sorry, but most people would not want to be alone n a thunderstorm. sweatdrop i did like it though. the wourds just kind of drew me in. you have power in your writing. you could really change the way people think threw your poems. so keep writing!
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Posted: Wed Aug 08, 2007 3:02 pm
LOL! i get what you are saying and i see where it kinda doesnt make sense. but thats just how it turned out! And thank you very much! i think that is the best comment i ever got on any of my poems! mrgreen
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Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 2:38 pm
I love how after every verse you said
" but unfortunately ... "
It made the whole thing kind of ring with sorrow and a dash of despair and hopelessness.
It really is beautiful^^ ** hugs **
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