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That's really well-done. I love the smile! It's infectious biggrin


The eyes looks a little too high. I think that's the entire problem. Where your lash line is now is perfect if her eyes were open.

When the eyes close, the upper lashes go to meet the lower ones. I know it's obvious, but what I try to do is to imagine the person on the paper moving like a real person would. She closes her eyes. Here is where the lashes are, now.


If she weren't grinning like that, her cheeks wouldn't be pushing up the eyes, causing them to arch. The lash line would look more straight.
See how the change in one facial feature affects the others?


Now check this out:


The only change is that I drew in some eyes. I used the same lash line you had.


Keep in mind that these pics are only rough sketches, since I'm using a mouse to draw them.


Nose:
I don't have much of a suggestion about the nostrils, other than "draw them" rofl
Here are some tips: http://www.portrait-artist.org/face/nose.html