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 Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 7:48 am
This is what I've worked on yesterday. I'll take whatever you can give me. ...and try not to cry. I want to get it the best it can be before I color it. ( Here's the editted version.)
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 9:37 am
The detail in this is awesome - there are a couple things that stand out, though. The girl's head, for one. Her face is drawn at the wrong angle, considering she's got her back to us. It doesn't really look like it's connected to the back of her head. It is a really well drawn face, but it doesn't line up with the rest of her.
Her foot looks a bit small (so do her hands, I think, but it's hard to tell since they're covered), and there's something about the bird-thing's raised foot that doesn't make it look like the underside of a foot (maybe just the angle it's at) - maybe it's not supposed to be the underside at all and the toes are folded in a bit? I don't know. You could probably do some tweaking there.
Otherwise it looks alright! It'll be interesting to see this colored, if you do post it.
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 6:15 pm
Okay, both their feet, hands, and angle of the neck, basically.
Could I just move her shoulder to a better angle? I really don't want to mess up the face. xDD
I editted it. D:
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Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 4:39 am
Moving the shoulder would help but there would also be a lot of redrawing of fabrics to do too.
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Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 7:14 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 5:46 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 7:04 pm
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Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 8:01 am
I think that "WTF" is like a "WTF bald spot" :/
I agree with fickle. My suggestion for the bird-thing's foot is to add a bit more shading to give the webbing a little more depth (so that it looks more like the underside of the foot)... but you don't really have a ton of pencil shading in this anyhow (likely because you'll add that in colouring), so it would just be weird sweatdrop
With the face/shoulders thing... you could try turning the torso more to face the viewer. As it is, it's pretty hard to turn your head that far around with that angle. The head would look closer to a profile view rather than a 3/4, if you were to keep the body like that.
If you turn the torso to comply with the position of the face, you will need to do a lot of redrawing on the fabric movements, and possibly shift the position of the hips a little bit.
So the torso would probably have to be at a semi-profile view, the arm position would change, the fabric movement would change, she MAY need to be sitting up a little more straight (which would change the position of the face)... are you SURE you don't want to just change the face position to save all that effort?
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