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 Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 6:05 pm
I don't want my poems up anymore.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 6:10 pm
I don't write very good poems. . .
I mostly like to write novels/novellas.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 8:33 pm
I like it very much. It seems to flow nicely, and I can tell the subject of the poem easily. Now for the technical stuffs: All the imagery brings out the emotional appeal very well and the rhyme scheme adds a certain appeal.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 9:31 pm
Agghh D< you just reminded me I have to do AP English work.
Very nice poem. I like how you used the elements in the end. The only thing that I find wrong with it, appart from then lack of punctuation (which I'm not too great with myself), is this:Quote: Nothing left worse then death
And... post some of your novels! n.n
I would love to write a thriller. I don't think I am bad at all in the writing department, but I have writer's block. It is very difficult for me to come up with and develop a plot.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 11:01 pm
athena177 Agghh D< you just reminded me I have to do AP English work.
Very nice poem. I like how you used the elements in the end. The only thing that I find wrong with it, appart from then lack of punctuation (which I'm not too great with myself), is this:Quote: Nothing left worse then death
And... post some of your novels! n.n
I would love to write a thriller. I don't think I am bad at all in the writing department, but I have writer's block. It is very difficult for me to come up with and develop a plot. I fixed that.
Poems don't need punctuation, but I guess with this one I kind of threw it in at random places, eh?
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 11:16 pm
Gawd, I really loved that whole thing so much.
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 7:15 pm
I really liked the second one. It complimented its contradictions very well!
Very nice job 3nodding I can't really comment on the first one [I suppose it just didnt' appeal to me sweatdrop ] but it had a nice rhyme scheme.
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Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2007 10:02 pm
I really liked them, especially the first one.
I loved the part that said:
"One night when we are alone
I'll cry for you a lullaby
The saddest tune you'll ever know
My last chance to say good-bye. . ."
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Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 1:23 pm
i only read the 2nd 1 but its really good! i wish i could write like that.... emo
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