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 Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 11:17 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 11:52 am
Those are beautiful. <333
For some reason I imagine a band like Evanescence singing them, especially the ones on the first section.
My favorite are Dark Veil, Braking Away, and Deserted Realms.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 11:59 am
Thanks!
And that's the kind of bands I imagine too. xd
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 6:12 pm
Since you broke it down so nicely for us I thought I'd follow suit. :]
1st Category
I'm going to quote you from Dark Veil with only praise.
"A thousand words die on my lips"
I loved this line. Such a powerful start to a very lyrical poem.
Actually, all three poems are dying to be put to music, or at least I think they'd work perfectly as songs.
I'll post this now and read the others.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 6:16 pm
Oh my gosh.
I think I was a little ambitious to think I could read all of your poems in one sitting.
There are quite a few... xD
It would be a shame, and an insult, to just skim them so I'll get back to you later. Heh.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 6:26 pm
Origami Wings Since you broke it down so nicely for us I thought I'd follow suit. :] 1st CategoryI'm going to quote you from Dark Veil with only praise. "A thousand words die on my lips" I loved this line. Such a powerful start to a very lyrical poem. Actually, all three poems are dying to be put to music, or at least I think they'd work perfectly as songs. I'll post this now and read the others. That reminds me of Jack Off Jill,
"Your mouth is like a funeral,
where words go to die."
lol
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 4:33 pm
2nd Category
A few things.
Mischievous Paradise had two lines that really stuck out for me.
"How could a paradise be a new wall?"
"In a valley fed by the moonlight."
The first is such a paradox; just reading the line makes me smile.
The second is powerful imagery. Fed... the perfect way to describe it, I can really see a valley being filled with moonlight.
I read Paths before I read the paragraph above it and when you said it was mainly religous I agreed, but it wasn't the only topic I had on my mind when I read the poem. This poem could be interpreted in so many ways and that's what I love about it.
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 7:18 pm
I'm going to come back and read when I'm not so busy mulit-tasking 4laugh
The reviews are great so I'll be sure to come back and read them all 3nodding
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Anxious Conversationalist
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Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 10:37 am
Ok ok, I just read all of your poetry that you had posted 4laugh
I have to admit that I am impressed! That's some wonderful stuff you have there! The way the lines moved made them very easy to connect with, left impressions in my mind after I had read them.
And I can't quite say that I could pick a favorite smile That good.
Besides a few grammatical errors, lol. Just great.
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Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2007 10:23 pm
@ Origami Wings: Thank you for your comments! I liked the way you quoted the parts you liked. It's great to see what you liked the most.
@ Zombii: I don't know Jack Off Jill at all, but it's true that they look a bit alike.
@ Faith: Thanks! I must admit I'm not really surprised about the grammatical errors xd But do you think you could tell me some, so that I can correct them?
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 5:16 pm
Yes, I could do that, no problem!
Although it would have to be a little at a time seeing as I can't stay on the computer for more than little bits at a time 4laugh When I have the opportunity I will!
Oh, and thank you for the comment on my poetry 3nodding I appreciate it!
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Posted: Sat Jul 21, 2007 3:11 pm
I like them... ALL ... do more and I will read away! AHAHAHAHA!...hm...
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Posted: Sun Jul 22, 2007 9:55 pm
 Look for me by the moonlight.
Thanks!
And I'll certainly write more and I'll post them once they're done.
Watch for me by the moonlight.
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