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 Posted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 2:28 pm
This is my first 'song' lyrics, and I would truly appreciate any kind of suggestions!
Lost dreams
The sounds of the night,
Such sweet music.
It’s a wonder that I feel so lost,
In my dreams.
A broken heart,
And lost dreams lies in my path.
Darkness greets,
Your parting words.
Chorus:
Parting is such sweet sorrow.
Sweet, sweet Sorrow.
My love is not what it seemed,
Now, I’m lost till I’m found.
My heart will never heal…
Chorus:
Parting is such sweet sorrow.
Sweet, sweet Sorrow.
Sweet, sweet sorrow…
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Posted: Tue Aug 07, 2007 7:30 pm
you seemed to have woven together diffrent phrases that people have allready come up with. it's ok to take a phrase thats allready been used sometimes, but making a whole song made up of them is not a smart thing to do.
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2007 7:12 am
i agree with luna_luv_manga
its gerat... but it seems really-- pre-made
intertwine some phrases that you hear in other poems that you like, and add some of you own and it can be a beautiful song!!
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