|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 4:06 pm
The wedding crashers
By: Rdog12
ps: please comment whether u like it or not, be honest this is my first ever, ENJOY! mrgreen
heart Chapter1 heart
Ravens POV
I love you Raven, gerard whispered gently into my ear.
I not only heard him say i love you i felt it on the inside and out, flowing
strongly, spreading throughout our bodies.
We have been together for five wonderful years, ever since the day
Mikey, gerards little brother, introduced us in highschool, we have been inceprebale ever since.
Our love for music and art really brought us closer. j
just as i thought life couldn't get any better gerard suddenly dropped to
one knee, took at a shiny metal box, opened it up, and there was a beautiful diamond ring as big as a paper clip.
i screamed real loud and threw my self on him,
knocking us to the ground, we kissed pasionately.
when we were done we layed in that spot holding eachother tightly.
We were getting married i couldn't believe it!!!!!
Gerards POV
Today is the day, the day i pop the question, i thought to myself.
God she looks so beautiful,
Her nice smile, her long black flowing hair.
she seems to be lost in her thoughts i whispered to her and told her i love her
then after a couple minutes of looking up at the stars i stared into her beautiful eyes
dropped down on one knee and took ou the ring.
she screamed and then knocked us to the ground we layed there for a while
kissing eachother violently
i knew i made the right choice on who i wanted to be with for all of my days.
but somewhere inside me i had a bad feeling that something bad was going to happen and real soon......
PLEASE COMMENT!!!!!!
want more?
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 5:13 pm
Okay. I think that first off, people have to stop writing Mary Sue-ish OFC/One of the guys, because it gets old after one fic. Second, I would consider to get someone to look over your story for you, cause there are some grammar and spelling mistakes, and personally I find stuff like that really annoying.
I don't really read anything else than slash fics (unless it's Mikey/Alicia), I just needed to get that off my chest, and it's not only pointed towards you, but to everyone who writes that kind of stuff.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 5:20 pm
I LIKE YOUR STORY SO FAR. I DON'T CAR ON HOW YOU WRITE AS LONG AS IT IS A GOOD STORY.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 7:05 pm
xXFrankieIerolover101Xx I LIKE YOUR STORY SO FAR. I DON'T CAR ON HOW YOU WRITE AS LONG AS IT IS A GOOD STORY. Thx! redface
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 7:06 pm
Meera Flame Okay. I think that first off, people have to stop writing Mary Sue-ish OFC/One of the guys, because it gets old after one fic. Second, I would consider to get someone to look over your story for you, cause there are some grammar and spelling mistakes, and personally I find stuff like that really annoying.
I don't really read anything else than slash fics (unless it's Mikey/Alicia), I just needed to get that off my chest, and it's not only pointed towards you, but to everyone who writes that kind of stuff. keep reading on........ it gets more intresting...... its not like other wedding stories
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 7:42 pm
Chapter 2
Ravens POV
We went home and told the band all about our wonderful evening, we decided to have a black and white wedding.
Mikey couldn't believe that gee didn't tell him he was going to propose to
me. i believe it though,
gee and I both know that Mikey can't keep a secret....
Frankie was kinda pissed though, because of Gerard being bestfriends with him and all.
through the next couple weeks we planned our special day,
i can't wait till we say our vows promising to be together always.
we've picked out white and black flowers, my wedding gown, and my little sis will be the flower girl.
the big day is coming in three days........... Gerard has been busy with plans lately I miss hanging out with,
but hopefully we'll get some alone time on the honeymoon
]Gerards POV
Things have been really hectic lately, i haven't found the perfect tux yet
I'm so nervous, i have to make the vows, hire caterers and so on....
I miss raven the sound of her voice,
her soft gentle touch,
her beautiful smile
the bad part is that frankie gave me a bunch of
s**t because i didn't tell him about the proposal
we finally made up when i said he was the best man.
well three more days till the big day.
Ravens POV
tommorow is the day.....
i'm so nervous yet excited at the same time.
I think i'm going to go out for a while..
Gerard.... do you wan't to come with me?
"Sorry i'm kinda busy with plans and i'm supposed to meet my mom in the front lobby in five minutes."
"Wanna come with me hun?"
"Umm.... no thanks i'll see you later tonight then Ok"
"Alright then see you"
He gave me a nice long kiss oh i missed his tender touch,
he extended the kiss so long,
he was trying to tell me he is sorry,
but i could never be mad at him...
I had half a mind to call up the band...
but it just wouldn't be the same hanging out with them without gee.
Especiallly the night before our wedding
Oh well...., i just really need to get out of this place right now.
Theres a bar across the street i'll stop for a quick beer..
just as i step out on the street i hear a lady behind me scream
at me?
I see a really bright light coming right at me
as soon as i realized it was a car,
it was already too late,..
my world went black and i fell into a deep sleep,
never to be woken up ever again.
PLEASE COMMENT
WANT MORE?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:01 am
OOOH more. Is Raven dead??? I need to know.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:47 am
This is good. Update soon.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 8:56 am
heart Chapter 3 heart
Gerards POV
Finally everythings set, all i have to do is go down and meet mom,
I can see why Raven didn't want to come, my mom can drive a person nuts,
but...., i need her help so...
i headed down to the lobby,
wait, what is that sound?
Sirens?
"GERARD!!!! COME QUICK!!!"
"Frankie what are you doing here? whats going on?"
"Dude I'm so sorry."
"About what, whats going on?!"
"Its Raven........,she got hit by a hit and run driver..."
"WHAT???"
MOVE!!! OUT OF THE WAY!!!!!! I have to get through!!!!!
there right in the middle of the road lie my precious Raven, sprawled
on the ground her hair wild over her face, she still looked like an angel to me, i saw no movement from her body.
I pushed everyone out of the way, they tried to stop me but i pushed them all out of the way.
i touched her cold body and gave her a gentle kiss hoping her body would warmen and come back to life.
But she still layed still not a breath in her body
My sweet, sweet Bride,..... dead.........gone.......forever.......
they rolled her away on a metalic gurney away from me and into the truck....
i could feel tears running down my cheeks...
shes gone......
i have no reason to live......
when her life was taken so is mine.....
I cannot go on without my precious Raven.....
~~~~~~~~~~~~~3 days later~~~~~~~~~~~
Her funeral is today..........
if fate hadn't taken her away we would have been on our honeymoon by now........
Happily married....
after the funeral i plan to kill myself, so i can be with her for the rest of my life.......
all the band came.. and Ravens family,
everyone paid their respects and left..... i was there alone
i gently layed beside my love.......
and i took out my vile of poison i slowly drank ......
I felt sick...
i turned cold......
i lost my breath ....
i choked on my own spit,
i fell into a deathly state and then my heart stopped permenently
Prologue
After Gerard poisoned himself Mikey came back to get gee and he found him dead next to his love Ravens body.
everyone mourned for their good friends death...
now they lie next to eachother in the new jersey graveyard near their old highschool, where they first met.
this is what there tombstone says
RIP
here lies Raven and Gerard,
young lovers
and good friends of many,
engaged to be married until fateful accidents,
will never be forgotten by others
Poem written by gerard before death
I'll love you today,
I'll love you tommorow,
You take away all my pain and sorrow,
you light my world when its dark,
and cold,
we'll stay together till we grow old,
i give you my heart to love and to hold.
PLEASE COMMENT!!!!!!!
THE END
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 9:39 am
Nice ending. Are you going to make a new fanfic?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 10:29 am
xXFrankieIerolover101Xx Nice ending. Are you going to make a new fanfic? i dunno, maybe
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 12:51 pm
Oooh, very Romeo and Juliet!
I liked it! heart
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 2:08 pm
um......... I guess nobody really liked this one! i think the other one i'm working on now is actually alot better wink heart blaugh mrgreen
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Aug 12, 2007 12:16 am
Hmmmm... that was an interesting ending... not very unexpected, but still a good story nonetheless. I'll have to read your new story too...
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
![[x] Natasha [x]'s avatar](https://a1cdn.gaiaonline.com/dress-up/avatar/ava/1e/8f/6f352f38458f1e_flip.png?t=1425601290_6.00_11)
