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Lyrics--i need help

ChaoticMusicIsLove

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Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 9:13 am

i dont usually write songs--my outlet is poetry, but this wouldnt get out of my head! so im writing it down...and i need people to tell me what needs fixed::

[ChorusX]
All these untold stories
swimming through my memories
trickling to my heart
wishing we'd never been apart
[ChorusX]

im walking around my brain
time and time again
looking for those stories untold
those that never had a chance to unfold

[ChorusX]

im sorry ive never had a chance to tell
those pieces of me from my brainstorming well
well im sorry,
im sorry
for those things untold!

[ChorusX]

((and this is all i have, see my problem? its just repeating over and over in my head!))

Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 11:18 am

not to be mean or anything but I feel like you lost your momentum with the whole walking round my brain thing sry. For the most part it was really good.

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ChaoticMusicIsLove

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Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 2:15 pm

yes, i know *sighs*
like i said, i wasnt
really thinking about
it like i do when i
write poetry. it just
wouldn't get out of
my head, so i typed
it all up. thank you.

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