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 Posted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 10:01 am
Niahm Try new things, change them if you don't like them or keep them if you think they fit. We are here to help. Help with what? You know those tiny details that are most difficult to make realistic? The additions, or removal, of odd bits of information to complete a story's realism? That's what we're here to help with. We will not hand you a plot. We will not hand you the basis for a world. We want to help iron these things out, to help you reach a point you're comfortable with. All plots and worlds set forth are copyrighted to the authors, and authors only; except in the case of fanfiction, where the author should note. The advice you give is offered knowingly to the one you're advising, who may use the advice in any way they see fit. In short the services we provide are:
Naming characters, because this is so important to realism.
Minor story elements, fixing possible plot holes ((Obvious ones.))
Fleshing out characters. ((Q&A/Pressconference for character))
Fanfiction will be looked at as openly as original work!
If you're not sure if we can help you with something, just ask, we'll be glad to help! On Topic Posts:
Requesting help hammering out details for a specific fiction.
Asking if a particular plot has any inconsistencies. ((Please post a synopsis.))
Responding to a help request.
Offering ideas to better this thread.
Off Topic Posts:
Debate that does not have to do directly with a plot or story idea being discussed.
Bumps. This is a sticky, bumps are not necessary.
Flames. Yes, I, for once, am declaring flames despicable.
Anything that does not do with writing.
If you can, don't be vague in your plot lines when asking for advice. The more vague you are, the less help we can give. Announcements!6-10-2007 Alright, I need to add one more thing to this. Why? Because it's my personal pet peeve, take it as you will. Use proper grammar or die. Simple as that. It helps those trying to help you and makes you look a lot more intelligent than you really are.
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Posted: Mon Jun 11, 2007 7:16 am
Ohohoh!
Fleshing out my characters is always fun!
They have plenty of flesh, but I love doing it, so let's do that! Hmmm... let's go with... Jarab, Keisho, Hoshi, Vertis, Azad, or Natsu. Pick one of them.
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Posted: Mon Jun 11, 2007 9:02 am
Keisho--has the best name ^.^
Vertis sounds too Latin--much like "Veritas," or "truth" in Latin ...I think O.o
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Posted: Mon Jun 11, 2007 11:11 am
Shinigami Lawliet Keisho--has the best name ^.^ Vertis sounds too Latin--much like "Veritas," or "truth" in Latin ...I think O.o Origin is Japanese- "He who knows his own mind". So... give Keisho whatever questions you want. He'll answer them... possibly. Depends if you piss him off. Vertis... is supposed to sounds Latin. Despite the character being Arabic.
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Posted: Mon Jun 11, 2007 12:09 pm
Rather, why not provide a synopsis of the character and his biography and we'll help hammer out the details.
(topic isn't a Q & A razz )
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Posted: Mon Jun 11, 2007 6:20 pm
Damn... maybe later. He's waaaay too hard to sum up. And telling about him requires telling about his story... which Ngure and I plan to make a profit off of, and that means not posting for free on the internet. However, I do have a bio already written for Jarab. You'll like him, he's gay. xd But he's the seme, so you may not relate. blaugh This was for a HP RP board that I ultimately got bored with because it has no plot: Quote: Birth Name: Jarab Hirsi Archer Nickname : None
Gender: Male
Age: 11 [This was RPing his first year. I normally put him at 17 and sixth year, and his personality differs slightly as such. All changes since age 11 are in brackets.]
Birth date: March 12th
Personality: Jarab is generally shy and doesn't have too much skill with other people. In general, he's a loner and spends his time alone in his dorm with books from the library. He knows a lot of things, and understands quickly, but finds himself at a loss when it comes to tasks of nerve and courage. He's generally a nice person and will do favors for people, though not if the person has earlier been a total jerk to him. (He's nice, but not stupid) He possesses a good deal of pride, but will drop it if someone needs his help, since the worst thing to him is someone getting hurt because of an accident. People who do stupid things and get themselves hurt because of it make him angry. (like the show Jackass) [When he becomes angry, he takes a more active role instead of his usual passive, even going so far as to give orders. This is possibly due to the fact that injured people are his area of expertise, and he can sort of push aside his fear and run on adrenaline. However, he tend to be much more rash in this state, even going as far as cursing sometimes, which he generally doesn't do.]
He's pretty good in most of his subjects, but that has a good deal to do with how much time he spends on his homework, as he literally has no life. Jarab's favorite spare-time activity is catching up on his sleep (from pulling an all-nigher for some essay or another) and he would likely wet himself if he got a detention. In general, he's pretty straight-laced. He shows little interest in girls, and if he ever got a girlfriend, she would come second after his studies. His studies are so important to him because he wants to become a healer, which is hard.
On a side note, he has a pet Jarvey (a ferret-like creature that can only swear) that is lovingly named "Shithead". This was the first thing it said when he received it for Christmas when he was eight, and it refuses to respond to anything else. Shithead is a huge trouble and an escape artist that blatantly refuses to remain in the dorms during the day, and instead runs all over the castle. Jarab has even locked him inside his trunk, and the creature was running loose by noon.
Appearance: Jarab has ear-long black hair and blue-gray eyes. His hair is mostly straight, but does have a bit of wave. It's not shiny at all, but rather a dull matte sort of black, and is slightly thinker than average. He has tan skin, attributing to the fact that his mother was a Moor. [For the reference, a Moor is not a magical creature. It is a Muslim living in Spain.] His build is a little heaver than average, and he does have a bit of muscle on his, but more in the sinewy sense than the bodybuilder sense.
His face shape is more chiseled than round, and he has think eyebrows and a fairly large nose. Jarab has no notable scars of any sort, and also sports large ears.
History: Jarab was born to Radley Archer, a wizard, and his muggle wife Kalila. (she has joined the magical world instead of rejecting her husband) He was more or less raised as a wizard. He didn't have a particularly traumatic childhood, unless one counts spending far too much time inside reading books, and being forced outside by his mother, in which case he read outside.
[In his past few years at Hogwarts, he has excelled, having grades nearly equal to the famed Hermione Granger. His teachers generally like him because he sits at the front and only speaks to ask questions about the material. He takes nearly every subject with the exception of astronomy, which is not needed for his aspired profession- healing. In his spare time, he also works as an aide in the hospital wing, and as a result has developed a close friendship with Madam Pomfrey. However, his social skills leave something to be desired, as he considers the school nurse his best friend, and his next best friend is a book, although he tends to have a positive opinion of people in general.]
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Posted: Mon Jun 11, 2007 6:35 pm
Eh, he's a seme? Well, at the very least he can screw me ^.^
Well, the main thing that I noticed off the bat is that he has an apparently Arab-influenced first and middle name with an Anglo-Saxon last name. Other than that; "Shithead" the Jarvey suffering from Turret's Syndrome? And the healing thing--you kind of screw that up; if you're pumped up on adrenaline, you are going to be an irrational, irritable, piss-off in little shape to do any reliable magic, let alone something at delicate as healing. Finally, the best friends with the nurse thing... yeah... that's just screaming "sexual relations" to me.
Other than that, looks pretty much sound ^.^
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Posted: Tue Jun 12, 2007 9:00 am
Shinigami Lawliet Eh, he's a seme? Well, at the very least he can screw me ^.^ Well, the main thing that I noticed off the bat is that he has an apparently Arab-influenced first and middle name with an Anglo-Saxon last name. Other than that; "Shithead" the Jarvey suffering from Turret's Syndrome? And the healing thing--you kind of screw that up; if you're pumped up on adrenaline, you are going to be an irrational, irritable, piss-off in little shape to do any reliable magic, let alone something at delicate as healing. Finally, the best friends with the nurse thing... yeah... that's just screaming "sexual relations" to me. Other than that, looks pretty much sound ^.^ No... all Jarveys are like that. The only thing that the entire species can say is swearwords. Yes, that was on purpose. It's true, he's not as good of a healer. But he starts ordering people around. xd Eew. Just eew. And she's with Filch, anyway, so... (let's not go into that...)
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Posted: Tue Jun 12, 2007 9:07 am
Hmm... okays, well, then that just leaves the mystery of the Arab/Anglo-Saxon name ^.^
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Posted: Wed Jun 13, 2007 9:13 pm
Shinigami Lawliet Hmm... okays, well, then that just leaves the mystery of the Arab/Anglo-Saxon name ^.^ Did I mention in the bio that his mother is a Moor, and his father is British? Thought I did. O_O Maybe I forgot.
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Posted: Thu Jun 14, 2007 7:57 am
Ah... dammit--missed that whole sentence <_<
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Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 6:14 am
Woho! A writer's thread! ^_^
And...your character is 11? Well, we all know of your perversions. mrgreen
I don't have much time to write anymore. I wrote my first and last fanfic a few years back (LOL). It was a Draco/Harry story. whee I'm so proud that I didn't do a n00bish fangirl story about Hermione giving Harry a make-over to appear in a fashion-show to look good for Draco. gonk
Title: I Never Told You
Author: Beezlebub
Disclaimer: None of these characters belong to me
Rating: pg-13
Pairing: Harry/Draco
Warnings: Contains slash and major character death. If this isn’t your thing, then don’t read it.
Summary: Draco reflects on mistakes made in his past. Slash. Draco’s viewpoint. One-Shot.
whee whee whee
Nostalgia. I was quite young when I wrote this. And er...the username. O_O I was going through my Lord of the Flies phase. xD I was also a bit emo at the time. xd Or so it seems. ._.
It's a drabble really and when I read it now it's awful. gonk Draco is completely OOC. o___O The writing sucks too.
I must improve! And I know I have improved already. I just need time to write. I may post for help in the future. ^_^
I just noticed that I have comments! O_O
Silwen Aurdomiel
2004-08-12
ch 1, reply wow. touching. very in character for malfoy.
o___o I think the world is full of the fangirls. That was not in character. gonk But I'm glad someone liked it. whee Fanfiction.net is the place to post if you want your crap appreciated. xD I hate when that happens though and I should probably remove the drabble - or at least edit it. .__.
I made a fanfic journal when I was 12 and my sister requested a fic. xD It was a LuciusxDraco bonding story. That'll be a challenge for me since I ship them as a couple. xD And I have no clue how a father and son bond. gonk
Help? ._.
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 11:19 am
Hmm....
Not sure.
Freud is wrong, though, Don't listen to him.
(Hey, he was 11 in the innocent RP, and 17 in the yaoi one.)
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Posted: Sun Jun 24, 2007 1:32 pm
Ruingaraf Hmm.... Not sure. Freud is wrong, though, Don't listen to him. (Hey, he was 11 in the innocent RP, and 17 in the yaoi one.) No one? No one knows how a father and son bond non-sexually? mrgreen And I like Freud. crying He appreciates my perversions. ._. And he was 17 was he? That's terribly fortunate for you. mrgreen Hmmm...I still have my suspicions about you and your perverted ways.... 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2007 1:03 pm
Kaethar Ruingaraf Hmm.... Not sure. Freud is wrong, though, Don't listen to him. (Hey, he was 11 in the innocent RP, and 17 in the yaoi one.) No one? No one knows how a father and son bond non-sexually? mrgreen And I like Freud. crying He appreciates my perversions. ._. And he was 17 was he? That's terribly fortunate for you. mrgreen Hmmm...I still have my suspicions about you and your perverted ways.... 3nodding I'm a daughter. I wouldn't know. xd Though I do write some stuff with father figures, but it's difficult to explain. I am perverted. But I'm not a *****. xd
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