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Posted: Wed May 30, 2007 7:30 am
This is my first fanfic so be nice, I don’t own Naruto…;__;
Chapter 1
“So I thought we can go out sometime?”
“No”
“Maybe to your house?”
“NO”
“Or walk me home”
“WALK YOURSELF! And let go of me how many times do I have to tell you no!” Sasuke shoved the pink haired girl off his arm. As she landed on the ground with a thud she murmured a soft ‘ow’ then stood up.
“But SASUKE-KUN!!”
“Shut up Sakura! GET THE ******** OUT MY WAY!” Sasuke walked off in his usual cool manner as if nothing happened while scowling all the way to home.
(Somewhere off on the other side of town)
SLAP
“YOU USELESS CHILD!”
SLAP
“EVEN YOUR YOUNGER SISTER IS STRONGER THAN YOU!”
SLAP
Hinata didn’t even wince when each slap hit her. She was just too used to it. There was no point in answering back. He’ll just get in a bigger fit. So when he was done she just walked out the room and slowly walked to her room. Walking over to the closet and slipping into a white night gown that barely reached her thigh she quietly laid in her bed. She was fed up of being called weak. She would go out of town, train and get used to the strange power she obtained. She didn’t understand what it was or how she got it, she hasn’t told anyone yet. They will discover soon when she shows the Hyuuga’s why they should have treated her better. She would leave the village tonight. She’d train where no one knew where she was. Where no one would look for her. She’d leave without anyone knowing she’s gone. She narrowed her eyes, she’d dress differently and look the complete opposite of innocent little Hinata.
And oh will everyone Stare.
-Sometime later 3:00am- Now dressed in a tight fitting black shirt that ended at her hips with a split in the middle that was tied together with a red string zigzagging up the slit. A Blood red skirt that ended just under her knee that had a huge slit all the way up the middle, underneath wearing black tight shorts that stopped mid thigh. Her long midnight hair was loose framing her innocent face, a light coating of rose lip-gloss on her soft lips and in her eyes there was much more confidence and strength she had been hiding till this day. She no longer wore ninja sandals but instead wore black high heel mini boots that you could easily run in but the heel, oh so deadly.
She ran confidently and stealthy along the houses roof till she reached the gate and jumped down and walked the streets of konoha for the last time in a long time before leaving.
(With Sasuke)
Sasuke just wanted some alone time where no fan girls would bug him. You would of thought after betraying the village and joining orochimaru for a while would kill there ‘Undying love’ For him. But no they where exactly the same as before. So he decided at early (Very early or late?) to take a walk alone to have some peace.
That was until he sensed a vaguely familiar chakra near by, he looked in the direction the source was coming from until she/he came out. He nearly died of blood loss from his nose bleed. There walking in his direction was Hinata in a very sexy new style. She looked more confident and hot than normal. He remembered she was the weak stuttering girl in class and he never liked girls but it was something to do with the way the clothes and her body just shouted out ‘Don’t touch!!! Too hot for you !’ He continued to stare until she was right next to him. He felt her warm breath on his ear as she whispered, “It’s rude to stare” Then she continued walking off towards…wait she’s going to the konoha gates? He blinked twice trying to think if she was going on a mission or just going to walk that direction for no reason he hid behind a wall and continued to watch she was doing.
Only when she knocked out the guards in blink of an eyes did he knock the though that she was going on a mission. He was frozen when he saw what she could do. There on the ground the two guard where choking on the own blood. When he din’t even see her touch them. She turned round slowly then smirked at him and walked off he would of moved from the spot but found himself paralysed. But how did she? When did she? He tried to blink, to move to shout, anything but then he blacked out.
(back with Hinata)
Ha Idiot, he looked straight into my eyes, then again I can’t blame him he doesn’t know what I’m capable of doing she easily glided through the forest with ease to a speed that no one could possible follow. Landing gracefully in a deserted area she used a few hand seals then a small cosy looking cabin appeared that would most likely attract thieves just what she wanted real dummies to train on.
She walked inside and of course there was everything she need, this cabin she discovered in a mission her new power had let her see it and of course as soon as she found it she made sure that no byukagen or anyone could see it.
She went into the kitchen and made herself very early breakfast. Soon there was a knock, she casually walked over open the door and stepped out the way with ease as a giant sword was thrown in. She walked over picked the sword up and swung it on her back, In the doorway a gaping Shark like man and a passive Sasuke-look-alike-but-older with a raised eyebrow looking at her, she looked on with a deadly gaze.
“No one told you not to ruin someone’s house?” She asked sarcastically.
Now regaining his posture the shark like guy growled and said with a smirk “Give me my sword I was hardly trying when I thre-“ Before he could finish unexpectantly the handle of his sword whacked him square in the head. Hinata just looked at the guy who fell on the ground, the Sasuke-look-alike looked amused then spoke in a monotone, “Got some skill there” Inner Sasuke-look-alike-but-older shouted ‘YAY A HOTIE WITH SKILL! AKATSU NEED A WOMAN, maybe we can all have a threesome or a foursome…She can also cook.’ Itachi sweatdropped(mentally) ‘You perverted twit, yeah cooking and skill woul be useful but…’ ‘Shhh! Pretty lady is speaking!’
“You the first person to say” She smirked
“We where going to steal your food since we don’t have any but your skill could be useful for us…”
“And your bodie” Shark like guy smirked only to be hit by Sasuke-look-alike.
Hinata merely raised and eyebrow and looked at Sasuke-look-alike-but-older and smirked, “So who exactly are us?”
“Akatsuki”
To be continued...
So what do you think. I like fics making Hinata stronger, And you'll find out what power she obtained in later chapters and blah.
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Posted: Wed May 30, 2007 7:32 am
If you ask me it's a bit OOC But I like it mad D
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Posted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 1:45 pm
Susu-Momo If you ask me it's a bit OOC But I like it mad D Same here.
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Posted: Mon Aug 20, 2007 2:25 pm
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Posted: Tue Aug 21, 2007 6:53 am
I really like it. Detailed and I didn't see any mistakes. <3 But I agree that it was a bit OOC when it came to the dialogue. Still really good, though. xD
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