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 Posted: Tue May 29, 2007 7:51 pm
Hey, I'm new here, but I've been writing for awhile. Just wrote this all of .. half an hour ago out of boredom .. If you're so inclined, let me know what you think.
The evening had an “anxious” air about it. Even the shadows appeared distraught, clawing at the dimly lit hovels, harassing the flickering torchlight with their phantom fingers. The breeze, which sifted languidly over the high walls of Arundell Keep, wielded a hint of uncertainty, mixed with the autumnal decay of a fading season.
Damien smirked at his revelation. The fallen leaves that blew about his feet were a reflection of what he had become … dead, abandoned, with elegance waned from both age and a blackened heart. His eyes, the same eyes that betrayed his lineage, his inhumanity, beheld the living world with disgust so deep-seeded, it choked his very desire to “live.”
Life had become a metaphor to him, a taunting metaphor that constantly reminded him of the soul he’d lacked for the past century. He was a creature, a malevolent monster of both his own creation, and his sire’s lack thereof.
Hell would have been a welcome embrace compared to the existence he’d been forced to lead. And more than likely, a welcome substitute for the whore that lay at his feet.
The blood that pooled about her lacerated throat left her body as silently as her final breath. Her face, a vivid outcome of the end she’d faced only moments earlier. The entire ordeal had been quick, delightfully painful, and as hushed as death itself.
Her body would be found at dawn, down by the docks, and her murderer would have long retired to walk among them another night.
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Posted: Tue May 29, 2007 8:51 pm
The writing is fine without the quotation marks. I love it.
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Posted: Tue May 29, 2007 9:34 pm
Izenteen The writing is fine without the quotation marks. I love it.
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Posted: Wed May 30, 2007 12:55 am
The latter may be excusable, but the former will retain its intended implication without the quotation marks.
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