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 Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 12:30 pm
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Ever wanted to know what it was like to walk on clouds? To fly without wings and soar without anything to hold you back? To touch the stars and float through the midst of your wild imagination. To drink in the glistening sun that reflects off one’s eyes, filled with awe and beauty. To look up and see nothing but a deep blue blanket, never ending and distant. Where can you find this place you might ask? This dream where innocence is bliss? This little piece of heaven can be found in the eyes of a child…the one standing right beside you. ~*~*~*~*~*~ Welcome to my quest thread for Heaven, the Spirit of the sky, of Heaven itself. She’s a unique character in her own being, with special abilities and an amazing personality. After stumbling across this shop and reading all about it, I knew exactly what I wanted in my Spirit. This is what was unfolded and revealed.
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 12:32 pm
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Exploring the sky above can be enduring, especially when the limit is none. Check the Table of Contents below to figure out where your headed. 1. Introduction: In the Eyes of a Child 2. Table of Contents: Guidance 3. The Back Story: Heaven’s Gates Won’t Open Up for Me 4. The Spirit: A Rejected Angel 5. That Special Flare: Unique 6. The Caretaker: Heaven’s Guardian
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 12:34 pm
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 12:38 pm
(Banner Here) Name: Heaven Gender: FemaleSpirit: The skyGeneral Appearance: Heaven is a small girl, reaching the height of 5’5” as an adult. She keeps her childish appearance throughout her stages of life, mistaken for a younger age than what she actually is when an adult. Her form is tiny and her muscle tone is distant, you would never know her strength until she actually displayed it.Hair: Her hair is extremely long and tanish-gold. As a child, whenever she sits it rests against the ground. As an adult it reaches to her mid-thigh (little below the butt). Adding to her childish appearance, her hair is worn in two small pigtails on the top of her hair with the rest of it down. The pigtails are tied with sky blue ribbons that reach to about her ears. Eyes: The first thing everyone notices when looking at Heaven are her eyes. They are the deepest sky blue color every person wishes to see on warm summer days. They shine and sparkle as if the sun was pooling within them, reflecting her happiness and beauty. They are large, full of wonder, curiosity, and awe. Looking in them is a preview to heaven. Clothing: Heaven wouldn’t be caught dead in a dress or skirt, that and anything pink. Her favorite outfit consists of a long-sleeved plain white shirt that reaches to the middle of her palms, a sky blue short-sleeved shirt with a thin hood and a small white cloud in the middle of her chest. The little sky blue shirt ends before the long-sleeved shirt, so the end of the long-sleeved shirt continues on to a little below her wait. This leaves what looks like a white stripe around her waist.
For pants, she wears those of which belong to boys. They are baggy jeans, which bunch up at the end of her shoes and are dark blue in color....
Her shoes are skateboarding sneakers, sky blue and white with a small cloud on either outside....Skin: Heaven’s skin is a little darker than the normal pale; it’s a light peach. It’s flawless and soft to the touch Likes: The sky (day more so than night), wolves, animals, flying, light, shiny things, being outdoors, boys, cheese, water, sky blue, running...Neutral: Schoolwork, household tasks, vegetablesDislikes: Being alone, really loud noises, snobby girls, most girls in general, dresses, rainy days where she can’t see the sky, pizza, soda...Favorite Foods: Ice cream, chocolate, jawbreakers, sweet things, cookies, peanut butter, cheese, fruit...Favorite Colors: Sky blue, white, and blueFavorite Music: Country and rock like Rascal Flatts, Breaking Benjamin, Disturbed, Metallica, everything boys like. Theme Song: “Savin’ Me” by NickelbackDistinguishing Marks: As a newborn, Heaven had a few markings on her skin that looked something like tattoos of magical birthmarks. Around her belly-button was a sky blue cloud shape that had the tendency to glow during certain occasions. Whether or not it depended on her mood or the setting around her, no one could figure it out. One of the most distinguishing features lie on both her cheeks, Kaoru's favorite. Starting at her the corner of each eye is a large sky blue shining star, which descends to the ends of either side of her face. There are four stars in total and as they work their way down, they become smaller. It looks rather beautiful according to most of the people she comes across. Personality: For her girlish looks and beauty, you would think Heaven acted more like her gender, but she is the complete opposite. Heaven is quite the little tomboy and has absolutely no girls for friends. She enjoys hanging with the boys and doing everything they enjoy doing; this could include playing in the mud, fighting, video games, etc. She tougher than she looks, that’s for sure. Though in being one of the boys, she occasionally will have her girlish moments.
She has that sweet and innocent appeal in which she will go by to adults and other children she doesn’t quite know or feel as comfortable around. Heaven is energetic and bubbly, rarely without a smile on her face. She is optimistic and has a wonderful outlook on life, caring about others and their feelings as well as her own. Heaven is very creative and imaginative, always looking for an adventure or displaying everything that came to mind through art.Abilities and Talents: Because she is the spirit of the sky, she has one the most amazing powers; flying. The wings on her back and ankles, however, don’t play a large role in this ability. In fact, if she didn’t have the wings she could still fly. Its one of her most favorite things to do and it also gives her the power to move at great speeds (flying or running).
Along with flying, Heaven is able to create small clouds with her fingers and hands. They can be any size she can desire, using them to either sit on, play with, or for something useful. And with the clouds she makes she can also determine the weather, which usually depends on her mood. If she is unhappy or upset, a small little rain cloud might be over her head. However, Heaven is a happy child and is usually never found without a smile on her face, so if you’re looking for the sun just try and find her. This only affects the weather a few miles around her.
Because Heaven is connected to the sky, it also means she’s in unison with the night sky as well as the day. The stars, moon, and all the different gradients the sky might change to during the hours of darkness fascinate her. With the wisp of her finger she can make a shooting star flow across the night blue blanket, or create more to display a shimmer of light. One of the most magnificent phenomenon’s that occurs with her is her ability to take a step, and create a golden light in the spot where her foot touches the ground. This can become quite annoying, however, when she is trying to play manhunt at night, but she still has the ability to fly and cover herself.Overall: Though she can be a little terror, Heaven takes life in like a sponge. She is never one to follow the crowd and she enjoys most of the things girls her age dread. Her innocence is bliss. She truly is a little piece of heaven.
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 1:03 pm
(Banner Here) Why Heaven? So she can fly and change the weather, what’s the big deal?
Like any child, Heaven has her strengths and her weaknesses, but with her weaknesses usually comes an alternative in which she tries to turn the tables. She is somewhat of an oxymoron, where two of the most unlikely things make an incredible combination. She appears a sweet an innocent little girl with a smile that can turn one’s horrible day into something a little better. Her eyes reflect wonder and awe, a glimpse of what the world above truly looks like, proving that it exists. Her touches will either send shivers down your spine or warm your icy heart, a heart that could full of hatred and fear.
She has the energy like a little ray of sunshine, continuously going with set determination. When she wants something unselfish, she will travel to the ends of the Earth to accomplish that goal. She strives to make others happy with her positive words and outlook on situations; she tries to find the good in every bad.
How she became a tomboy? Your guess is as good as mine. In all honestly, she doesn’t like girls because of the way they tend to act, bossy and snobby. Heaven is a leader, not a follower. So for girls of any age, ranging close to hers, to tell her what to do and how to do it makes her unhappy and negative. Aside from those aspects, she just never had a taste or any small incline to liking the hobbies girls tend to have. She much rather be out getting dirty, playing rough, and having a good time.
As for her abilities, as all spirits have, Heaven is allowed to float or fly through the air and control certain weather patterns along with controlling the clouds and stars. Though she does have wings on her back and on her ankles, they don’t participate in her act of flying, her body does it on it’s own. Her wings can be used for fast turning, gliding, or crating wind when needed. Other than that, she floats just by pushing her body through the air (just like the Power Puff Girls). Heaven can fly at extremely high speeds, sometimes faster than your average small aircraft. She can also take this speed to the ground so when she runs, it’s almost as if she’s not even touching the Earth. With the motion of her fingers and hands she can create clouds or move stars from the sky for reasons she holds to her own.
Heaven is a mystical Spirit, able to change the moods of other with that of a simple smile. She is needed in this world just as much as any other spirit, to keep the sky blue and the sun shining. She may have been rejected from Heaven, but she won’t ever push it away.
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 1:42 pm
(Banner Here) Name: KaoruNicknames: KaoGender: FemaleAge: 18 General Appearance: Like Heaven, Kaoru has been a tomboy ever since she was a little girl, always being considered “one of the boys”. So with this lifestyle, she tends to dress in loose clothing and things that guys would rather wear more so than girls. You can often find her wearing polo shirts or long-sleeved shirts under short-sleeved one, with patterns that symbolize guy interests. For pants she enjoys baggy jeans found in the male sections of stores that bunch up at the ends, against her skateboarding shoes. She has what most guys consider a “perfect figure” and looks rather “cute” in the clothes she wears. Again like Heaven, she is often mistaken for a younger age than she actually is and has an innocent personality. Her hair is a long deep blue and her eyes resemble the sky.Personality: Kaoru is a pretty fun loving person. You be nice to her and she’ll be nice back, say something she don't like and expect a comment. Like said before, she is a tomboy and always has been. She enjoys playing video games rather than painting her nails, likes to go skateboarding every now and then and her favorite game is Manhunt. As a child, she grew up with 7 other guys who considered her as one of them and never held back because of her gender. She has been punched in the face, beaten up, thrown around, etc. For a girl her size, she’s pretty strong and will hardly ever shed tears when it comes to physical pain.
Though with her tough, tomboy attitude comes a softer side to Kaoru. She is an adult of 18 now and though she may seem immature, she is a really responsible and independent person. She loves children and animals of any kind and has a sensitive heart. She would give up anything for the ones closest to her and lives her days with a positive outlook on life.Likes: Halo Trilogy, wolves, animals, video games, Xbox and Xbox 360, anime, swimming and being outdoors, skateboarding, computers, owning her guy friends in Halo 2, drawing, children, guys, having fun.Dislikes: Girly-girls, snobs, illiterate people, being ignored at a certain degree, people that are just mean and ignorant, wise asses, gangsters, people who swear around Heaven, brats, pink, etc.Overall: Heaven is just like Kaoru because of how attached to her she is. Kaoru is unique and there is never/never will be anyone like her.
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 3:00 pm
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 5:06 pm
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Posted: Fri May 18, 2007 7:04 pm
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Posted: Fri May 18, 2007 8:21 pm
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Posted: Fri May 18, 2007 8:47 pm
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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 8:03 am
It's a good start. Here's what strikes me -
-She's a little bit cliché. Really, I understand the symbolism of the name, but is it necessary to repeatedly emphasize that she is "heavenly"? Saying it once or twice, or as a broad statement should take care of it.
-Don't express what other people think about her. After all, you can't guarantee how people will react, so focus more on how she behaves and less on how others react. If she has a calming effect, say it once and clearly rather than using the heavenly things again. I understand that in some cases it gets the point across (Describing her eyes, etc,) but after a while it gets frustrating.
-Also, you seem to get a little confused of if she is a sky spirit or a heaven spirit. Pick one, stick to it, and eliminate the ideas of the other from her. A sky spirit's eyes shouldn't be a preview of the afterlife, after all. And you've drawn her with wings and a halo, but don't mention them in the description. Does she have them, really, or is it just for the sake of the art?
-You don't have any information regarding why she manifested. You say she was "rejected from heaven". Is she an angel? Or some sort of sky guardian? Make it clearer. Again, this goes back to whether she's a heaven spirit or a sky spirit. Please pick one and stick to it! Heaven and the Sky are not the same thing, or if they are the same thing, say something about it.
-Her powers are nice, but moving the stars seems like a little much. Messing with atmospheric affects to make the stars look like they are in different places I could understand, but actually moving them just seems like too much power.
-I like her personality and her appearance. She looks fun. smile Just indicate room for personality growth and maturation and make her more of a dynamic character.
-For clothing, you might want to focus on a style and preference rather than a specific outfit. After all, is she going to wear the same clothes through her entire life?
Anyway, she looks like she will be really cool to play and to play with. Good luck!
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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 7:44 pm
Thank you for the critique! Much appreciated >w<
This is why its all still under construction XP! I tend to write things out first on how I see fit, then re-read it a zillion times and make changes. I do need to work on the opinion part, however. I wrote it more like a journal than a quest thread, but only because if she ever is created, its most likely what I'm going to make sure will happen when role playing (the whole not having any girls for things, etc.).
As for the wings on her back, I might just take those out because she doesn't really use them anyway xD. The Halo was for the art, but I'm still debating on it.
And the description of her eyes, it was more metaphorical than anything XP.
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