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wow I A~D~O~R~E this poem! <333

This...makes no sense.
It's just a bunch of similar words bunched together, there's no point to it.

hummmmm... i accually like it! ur friend was right it is good! but it seems somewhat forced. poetry is the ultimate freedom for writers. you dont have to have anything. you dont neccarilly have to fallow a rhyme scheme if it doesnt fit. it doesnt have to rhyme at all for that matter. there doesnt have to be a set rythem or structure or anything! you can do what ever you want when ever you want to. thats the true beauty of poetry and art in general. theres no rules. not even real guidelines. try rewriting it but this time jus write fragments or whatever comes to mind when you think about whatever it was that inspired your poem. the dart thing was what really gave it the forced feeling. why a dart? darts dont really run.... they speed. so lets see how that would sound.... "and speed off like a dart"...eh... yes? no?.... maybe sence the title was "rip my heart and watch me fly" you could do something about flying off like the raven or being whipped around by the wind like a torn letter. idk i cant tell you how to write your emotions down but just say whatever comes to your head then write it down. dont think about it dont second guess it- just move the pen across the paper and youll be happy with what youve done no matter what anyone else says about it.

it makes perfect sense to me... I love it. Very well done.

makes all the scence in the world biggrin
you are a good poet
good job i love it!

...What is the poem about? I have no idea where you're going with it, what it means, or who it's directed towards.

Also, it's an amateur move to rhyme every line. It isn't a good idea.

It was just some stuff I was randomly writing...And poetry doesn't always have to rhyme, so long as it has a certain scheme.