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Arenas (what it can be changed to ^^):

Classic: A flat field with no obstacle, a quite smooth hard surface. Its easy to get a grip on this floor but its very hard to hide in a course such as this. There are 4 statues at each of the corner. Each one has a statue of of a warrior on it. Tall and mighty. Breakable XD.

Grasslands: A large grassy scenario is used here. here everything is highly flammable. No trees, just tall rich green grass.

Jungle: A large jungle scenario with plenty of places to hide and duck about. Beware of some random marshes here. (yeah the Arena is HUGE) Everything is quite flammable too here, but not as much due to the plant life type.

Factory (Fire): The factory is a complete steel arena with fiery machines that constantly hiss and give off some flames from the top. In the center there is a huge furnace type machinery that is quite dangerous to be around O_o;; . this makes it so that battles aren't only limited to the ground. People can leap onto steel platforms and take their battles airborne ^^.

The Frozen Tundra(ice): A completely frozen battlefield with plenty of various frozen obstacles. There is a large ice creating machine frozen underneath the battlefield. Traction on this type of battlefield is almost impossible. (its ice.. duh x_x)

Lost Desert: A giant Sandy battlefield made with its own weather effect of sandstorms. Made to obscure fighters vision and add to the difficulty of moving around. The sand gives you a lil too much traction that is hard to start moving quickly and such.

Cave: Here a giant cave will be formed in the battlefield, darkening players visions and such and a heavy chilly moist cave feeling around them. The playing field is breakable but it would take a lot of strength breaking the power of mother earth's tightly packed rocks.

Sea of Hope: A complete water field with a only 2 islands. Its.. water... not much to say about this : / . Its rather deep, like 20 feet deep.

Abyss:: A complete Dark Aura battlefield. No obstacles but there is a hazy purple mist that lingers around the field. Mainly for those who use dark magic can summon up powerful spells here.

Alchemist Paradise (Junkyard):: A giant Junkyard with many objects Alchemists can use to transfer them into weapons or anything their heart desire ^^; Plenty of hiding spaces here. There are a few conveyor belts about here that are working O_o.

Pearly Gates: The pearly gates is just the Abyss but vice versa. It has a huge Spirit energy floating about for magic and Light users to use to summon Their spells. Very cloudy like here ^^.

Pearly Gates: The pearly gates is just the Abyss but vice versa. It has a huge Spirit energy floating about for magic and Light users to use to summon Their spells. Very cloudy like here ^^.

Monster: You control the monster, along with your partner. You make it's movements, and what powers it has, what it looks like/size, and so on.

"O-Okay! I-I'll work on defense, Van! Be careful out there!" Biting her lip in concentration, Victoria took her side bag stuffed tightly with a menagerie of art supplied and scooped out a pair of markers and her drawing pad. The white luminescent fog of the Pearly Gates area made it difficult to make out the two figures of Van and the monster. Taking a deep breath, Victoria reached mentally outward to the swirling streams of spirit energy moving amongst the clouds. Spinning it like thread into her being, she channeled it out carefully into her hands as she began to draw a series of protective circles.

Victoria's eyes began to glow a white-hot blue, like a pair of stars in space as she drew, the circles and runes becoming more elaborate and complicated. As she drew, lines of blue spell energy began to write themselves in the space about her and Van, forming a protective barrier.

The creature gave a clicking shriek, stabbing it's pencher mouth at Van as it rushed him. But as it was about to come into contact with his face, it suddenly seemed to slam into an invisible wall. Reeling back, it skittered and tried to attack with it's spiny clawed legs, spider-like in it's movements. The shield seemed to be holding it's own, flashing with blue sparks every time the creature hit it, but with every blow Victoria grunted with effort to hold it. The shields were begining to lose their strength...

"The shield isn't going to last much longer! Use this chance to get a better position! We need to distract it and aim for its weak points, Van!"

The monster reared and twisted it's sunken eyes to her, giving another clicking shriek. Suddenly it's pincers opened and out exploded a stream of black steaming goo, which splattered across the surface of Victoria's shield. Giving a small shriek, Victoria leaped back a couple of clumsy steps, as her metaphysical shield began to unravel with the acidic spit.
"A-AH! W-What is this?!"

The creature was hissing and bucking, running full out in a crazed rage. It headed for Victoria, whose mythical shield at disappeared. "A-ah! Stay back!" She dodged to one side, but one of it's many legs caught her in the stomach as it roared by, knocking the wind from her lungs and sending her back head over heels a few feet. The sketch pad slid across the floor on the other side of the monster's path, and her markers scattered into the fog. Eyes wide, and gasping for breath, Victoria tried to painfully crawl away as she tried to force air back in her lungs. It hurt!

Seeing one of Van's daggers near her hand, Victoria picked it up as the monster gave a lurching halted, dropping its frontal weight in an effort to throw Van off of it. Holding the dagger tightly, Victoria tried to hunt through the luminescent fog for her art supplies. She couldn't see them anymore!

"Ah! Van! My sketch pad!" She held the blade awkwardly, not experienced with such a tool at all. She could...draw on herself with this...but...something like that was used as a. err, last resort.

Finally able to take a few gasping breaths, she got to her feet, her skirts in disarray, and headed for where the monster was bucking about. Hunching over, she sidestepped legs and pincers taht came clickingly close as she tried to find her things. She gave a yelp and threw herself out of the way as the segment legs tried to stomp her like a group of horses hooves.

Victoria stood to the side of the monster, spattered in its blood, wide-eyed as she watched Van lay there brokenly. The monster shrieking in blind pain and trying to hunt him out. Her hand clenched around the dagger as the corner of her eye spazmed.

Van....Van was hurt...because she was too weak, Van had gotten hurt...was he dying? Was it all her fault...again? One stab he had said...the armor was freed from it's brain...she could see the pulsating tissue welling with black blood.

Eye twitching, Victoria's head hung down. Her entire body tightened, as a deep set rage rose like a black wave within her, coating her mind in flames. Lifting her head, her fists bringing up the dagger, Victoria's eyes began to bleed dark blue fire as she let out a roar of fury. The monster turned to her, hesitating over Van, as she kept screaming. Spittle flying from her mouth, and long black hair whipping about her head in a sudden gust of wind, Victoria blindly stared it down. Something in the quiet shy artist had snapped...something that usually lurked beneath the surface since her brother's death.

"YoUr NoT aLlOwEd To HuRt My FrIeNdS!!!" Bringing up the knife, unable to setttle for a simple stab to the creature's head, she sliced the palm of her hand and slapped the bleeding gash onto the white marble floor. Smearing it across the surface she began to draw a crude shape, not even bothering with a circle of protection. It has to pay....has to Pay...this is my fault, I shouldn't have screwed up...I'm always ruining things!!

When it was done, the design glowed with the amount of her own personal energy that she had poured uncaringly into it. Ethereal flames licked up ghostly from the design, as she raised her red coated fist high into the air.

"SuMmon: BlAdE oF tHe BlAcK HoRsEmAn!!" She threw her hand down, pulling and channeling the clouds of energy billowing about her and flinging them down into the large bloody mural at her feet. She had only tried this once before...and had paid for it dearly. But with her anger and self-hate fueling her, Victoria suddenly felt invincable.

A high pitched keening issued from her drawing, and suddenly it shivered. From out of the white ground, a massive black armored horse and a giant-sized rider leapt up and slammed back to the ground in a clattering of hooves. It towered above Victoria, eye-level with the massive monster.

"KiLl It My KnIgHt!!" She growled between clenched teeth, standing there in her blood stained skirts. The Horseman gave a nod, its pitch black armor jingling and solidly real as it lifted a butcher knife-shaped sword that was bigger than the horse itself. Whistling through the air, the knight brought it down on the monster's head a crash, splitting it in two. The monster's legs twitched as it fell in two pieces, its insides spilling out across the floor. The knight saluted Victoria, before breaking away into a fine black shimmering cloud of particles and blowing away.

There...it was done with...they could get help now, and Van could be--

Victoria's thoughts went black as her eyes rolled up in their sockets, all of her energy leaving her in an instant as the mystical balance of the costly summon took its due. Like a marionette with its strings cut, the artist passed out and hit the ground in a heap.

Length and Pacing: GOOD! I thought the pacing was pretty good, I didn't really feel like you were flying through things.

General Grammar rules: I think I did see a few spelling mistakes, but nothing major.

Personality: Sorry Sage, but I think Pyro's character totally came in first when It came to personality. Like Summoner said, Van was just in fight/battle mode, while Pyro's character was just a little more active with the personality.

Use of Environment: With an arena such as this I guess it was hard to do, but at least you took the cloudy, fogginess and mixed it in with what was happening.

Details: Pretty good, it flowed fairly easily. I did have to re-read a thing or two because I got confused, but nothing major.

Sage_Nashae's final score: 8/10

LadyPrincePyro's final score: 8.5/10