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 Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 8:19 pm
hate is all there is to love,
but love is all there is to hate.
shine down on me and i burn
supress the shine and i freeze.
load the gun, pull back the slide.
pull the trigger, watch me die.
i stagger back, i take a knee.
i hit the ground, you watch me bleed.
if i die before you wake,
i give my soul to you to take.
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Posted: Sun May 06, 2007 11:16 am
Short but to the point. I love it. Keep up the good work. ^_^
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 11:48 am
Corpse_Bride_131 Short but to the point. I love it. Keep up the good work. ^_^ i liked it too...... mrgreen good job
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 8:24 pm
its dark and is about death nice
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 9:17 pm
Good job. It's got a good flow, and it gives a good impression.
However, I've got one qualm...
The first 4 lines of the poem don't rhyme, and the rest don't... it kinda threw me off when I read it aloud to myself.
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 4:28 pm
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