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Rough Poetry
  that I write in study hall, lol. XP
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Miss Boston

PostPosted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 2:01 pm


Mirror
I stand here
in front of you.
My scar different from yours,
my thoughts,
my dreams,
my goals
All different from you.
You came from that world,
the one over there
in some strange time zone.
I started to ponder what your life is like.
Is it better than mine?
Is it happier than mine?
Is it easier than mine?
Your unrelenting stare disturbs me
in such a way that I cannot possibly explain.
In my head
are violent thoughts
that all conspire to your ultimate demise.
Though, you've not wronged me,
for it is I that have wronged you.
I return staring harder
then my vision of you blurs.
I curl my fist as my rage and my violence streams down my face.
The angry grip of my hand tightens into a rock-shaped ball of wrath.
There's a moment that passes
before I release the hatred onto you.
A million pieces of the mirror
flicker and fly
with some slivers deeply penetrating my once soft flesh.
But you're gone, gone forever
and I am your destroyer.
PostPosted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 4:16 am


I love the idea of the poem and the thoughts in it but there are some places where it doesn't really flow and sounds more like a story or journal entry than a poem. <3

(but yea, it's a rough one xD well done!)

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PostPosted: Sun Dec 06, 2009 1:49 am


This has some great potential with a tiny bit of tweaking and cleaning up. I like how expressive and deep the meaning behind your poem is! Keep up the good work =D
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