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-RandomRadRainbows- Vice Captain
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 Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 8:20 pm
K so this is my oh so pathetic poem that i have not titled and that seems slightly longish...and pathetic sweatdrop but ya, lemme know whatcha think xp
Always, she waits for that time of day,
When she no longer wonders what fate befalls him,
When she no longer hungers for him to say “hey”,
When that seemingly never-ending impatience would cease, that feeling that could tear her limb from limb,
When she’ll finally know how his day went,
If he’s happy, or if he’s upset,
If he’s unhappy, she’ll remind him of the times that they’ve spent,
And about the last times they met,
And together they’d dream of memories to come,
For they were only 100% happy in each other’s arms,
As proof, she can never stop talking about him, not even to her mom,
When they’re together, all negative things in the world are gone, they’re protected from all harm,
Abruptly, she awakes from her long day dreams,
And thinks to herself “Not much longer now.”
But in her heart she screams:
“You’re kidding right? Class takes too long, I can’t wait, I don’t know how!”
But finally she gets home, and eagerly makes the call,
After saying their hello’s, he says: “I’ve got some good news………”
Making frequent happy sounds, she struggles not to fall,
She hears him smile, and from her heart, she clearly states: “I love you”,
He returns those precious three words, oh so honestly,
They know they’ll always be together,
Since their hearts beat in harmony,
Through the good and the bad, no matter what, FOREVER,
He breaks the silence and says: “Baby, I gotta go…”
They routinely say their goodbyes, and soon head off to bed,
And even though sleep sped things up, the time still went so slow,
All night she dreamt of tomorrow, and all the happy tears that she’d shed,
When she awoke, she laid in her blanket comfortably,
Listening to a clock ticking,
At that very moment, he listened to the same noise impatiently,
And in their minds they pondered: “I wonder what they’re thinking”
She races to the phone as it rang,
How long she had waited for that familiar call,
When she heard he was on his way she could’ve sang,
And after they hung up she danced through her hall,
The car ride seemed to take an eternity,
And several sighs escaped his mouth,
Already he’d waited too long, he thought: “This isn’t fair to me”
Each day he spent without her cause his emotions to go south,
She made sure that she was well prepared for his arrival,
Then waited outside for the first sight of the van,
Soon enough he was in the drive, and he let out an excited call,
“I’m home!” he cried gladly, and to him she ran,
At last, they were where they belonged,
And for moments the world disappeared, it was just the two of them
One Boy, one girl, one love.
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 7:29 am
Its beautiful...
This kind of reminds me of my dearest friend and I... I miss her already sad (she went to Italy for spring break)
When people write, type, or listen to the same song, They usually express their feelings, like you are right now.
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 3:00 pm
Wow, it's long, but powerful!
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 10:32 pm
Wolf Spirit29 Its beautiful...
This kind of reminds me of my dearest friend and I... I miss her already sad (she went to Italy for spring break)
When people write, type, or listen to the same song, They usually express their feelings, like you are right now. awee, well thank you, and sorry about your friend being away, soon enough she'll be back though 3nodding
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-RandomRadRainbows- Vice Captain
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-RandomRadRainbows- Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 10:35 pm
Semok Wow, it's long, but powerful! ya i know...i suck at summing things up xp
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 12:21 pm
katev_92 Semok Wow, it's long, but powerful! ya i know...i suck at summing things up xp
You should believe in yourself, have confidence in yourself. You'll become better at this. All is needed is just practice 3nodding
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-RandomRadRainbows- Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 6:03 pm
awee thanks xd i suppose that's true, but i don't know, maybe i should just stick to things where it's okay to go completely detailed on things
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Posted: Mon May 21, 2007 8:10 pm
the length of the poem doesn't mean anything. there are a lot of really long poems out there. it doesn't mean that your bad at summing things up...just that the topic had a lot to it. i once wrote a poem that was fifty-two stanzas long. and i asked the people that read it if they liked it and they said that they did and that there wasn't anything that should have been taken out.
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-RandomRadRainbows- Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue May 22, 2007 12:32 pm
okay, thanks smile that's encouraging smile
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