Wow
beggining notes:
1. Imagery was used very wisely in this story. There was not to much and not to little perfect. If you have to much you throw of the readers -to little and you throw off the readers.
2. I loved the hidden meaning to center line.
Quote:
But as soon as that light becomes intolerable, it’s already passed me. In that moment, who knows where the centerline is? You can’t really see it, but it’s there somewhere.
This actually gives the stroy a very unique polt. Very good.
3. I really admire your perspective on life in the first and second paragraph's.
Quote:
The city’s glossy streets reflect hundreds of lights into a conglomeration of swirled colors that do nothing but make my already troubled driving worse. Headlights streak toward me going from infinitely long and dim to excruciatingly bright and close. But as soon as that light becomes intolerable, it’s already passed me. In that moment, who knows where the centerline is? You can’t really see it, but it’s there somewhere.
I suppose
driving is much like the path of life.
It’s the over-used cliché of our existence. We begin our journey, stopping where we like and must, but that which happens along the way is unknown just as our destination is never really final. The path is dictated by forces unseen, like the streets being wet from a downpour the weathermen couldn’t predict or the sun being warm enough for a detour to the park. Whatever the reason, we’re all going to have to make a turn whether it’s where we want to go or not.
But it’s those turns we don’t want to take that help us grow. We just have to realize this and carry on.
Ending notes:
1.
crying It was a very sad but very good ending.
2.OMG I AM crying!
3. I like it how you said
Quote:
You were my life. And now I have to find that center line and continue on.
That was so powerful. It makes you cry!
4. I really love this!
additional notes:
I believe this story was a great story it made me tear up I never ever tear up OMG! It was a great story it had great meaning.
Please keep writing...
I love this story and I wonder what you will come up with next.
Pm me if you need something or to show me something you have written.
I give this story two thumbs up for creativity, imagery and a very good ending.
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