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 Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2007 7:10 pm
Let me go,let me die!
If you wont let me do that then let me cry,because i just wanna say goodbye
lets me dream of dead butterflies,because it seems that they have the purfect
lives.....
let me cry away all through the night because i wanna take a journey to death
without light.Let me cut myself without a person to blame these scars are
something that will always remain with this horrible pain!So let me go,let me
cry,let me fake a great life,let me convince everyone that i have a nice life with no
pain,so let me stay here left in the dark with pain and nothing else to gain but pain and shame......
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Posted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 6:45 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 23, 2007 6:22 pm
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Posted: Fri Mar 23, 2007 7:00 pm
It's not poetry. It's a personal, soliloqual lamentation, with no rhetorical devices, and no rhythm or meter.
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Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2007 2:23 pm
Isel It's not poetry. It's a personal, soliloqual lamentation, with no rhetorical devices, and no rhythm or meter. so i really suck at trying to write poetry thats all i really wanted to know
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Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2007 3:27 pm
Emo Girlgamer Isel It's not poetry. It's a personal, soliloqual lamentation, with no rhetorical devices, and no rhythm or meter. so i really suck at trying to write poetry thats all i really wanted to know
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Posted: Fri Mar 30, 2007 11:05 pm
ok makes me wonder why i won a poem contest wit this
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 11:37 am
Because Isel has high standerds for others. I thought that it was good better then some of the stuff in this guild.
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 12:15 pm
Truth be told...
1.] It gets confusing with how it's broken up. Perhaps if you put them into stanzas it would be easier to understand and please attempt to write with correct spelling. Makes it even better.
2.] Eh..The flow of it is...kind of...odd. Got me somewhat confused, but it's okay for a beginner I suppose.
3.] Break it up, Make it neater, organize it
:] Otherwise...I suppose it's a decent poem.
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 1:15 pm
DaisukeOrDark Because Isel has high standerds for others. I thought that it was good better then some of the stuff in this guild. thnxs...
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 1:16 pm
Hikaru Akumu Truth be told...
1.] It gets confusing with how it's broken up. Perhaps if you put them into stanzas it would be easier to understand and please attempt to write with correct spelling. Makes it even better.
2.] Eh..The flow of it is...kind of...odd. Got me somewhat confused, but it's okay for a beginner I suppose.
3.] Break it up, Make it neater, organize it
:] Otherwise...I suppose it's a decent poem. k thnxs for the tips
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Posted: Sun Apr 01, 2007 3:13 am
Just strikes me as more of the same, nothing new, unique or interesting to say in the slightest. -_-
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 8:11 pm
Yeah, its ok but a little VERY confusing to read.
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 8:29 pm
Emo Girlgamer ok makes me wonder why i won a poem contest wit this
It's a world of false hope when you submit something to a poem contest.
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 9:41 pm
Isel Emo Girlgamer ok makes me wonder why i won a poem contest wit this
It's a world of false hope when you submit something to a poem contest.Like talent shows and job fairs.
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