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Gashes to Ashes, She is Falling Down.

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Dark and Twisty.
  ... Very much so.
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Tak-Jak
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 6:56 pm


The little girl sits with her numb legs
Pulled up around her frail body, hugging them to her chest
Humming a song, a melody, long forgotten, the words changed

ring around the rosie
pockets full of posies
gashes to ashes
i'm falling down...


Hallucinating and dizzy
She vomits on the cold stone floor, her breath dank
Black and blue bruises stain her pale skin
Chalky with youth and eye sockets cold
She's never stopped falling

And the shadows violate her shameful existence
Stealing her identity while at the same time
Abandoning her and her hurt; revealing her truth

Paws scuttle past her body huddled in the corner
Barefooted; she traces her heart in the dirt
Hoping someone will come to claim it for themselves
Because she has no use for the extra weight of the organ
Loss is too familiar to her

Her voice stands out in the silence
Clear but hushed lyrics
She curtsies to the invisible crowd of glowing eyes
And begins once more, for finality

ring around the rosie
pockets full of posies
gashes to ashes
can't catch me now...
PostPosted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 3:54 pm


*whistled in horrified fascination*

I know the feeling.

O.o

KirbyVictorious


grotesquekreeple

PostPosted: Tue Mar 20, 2007 1:41 pm


I remember singing a similar tune but i never thought to write a poem with/about it, nice job.
PostPosted: Tue Mar 20, 2007 4:19 pm


This would be part of the long hidden dark ages of Tak-Jak.

Thanks for actually commenting tis nice to read 3nodding

Tak-Jak
Vice Captain


grotesquekreeple

PostPosted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 7:51 am


Tak-Jak
This would be part of the long hidden dark ages of Tak-Jak.

Thanks for actually commenting tis nice to read 3nodding
My pleasure. fyi my dark ages have merely just begun you'll see more of me now that my computer works decently.
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