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Ello. Someone battle me. No min 10 bars max. No feeding, recyling or biting. No topic. Whoever accepts chooses who goes first.

Yupyup.

Too bad I didn't get on sooner.

I made my own right after, so it's all good. This one has too many rules for me anyway. Lol.

You Never heard-a-me, enemy's Ull Try To murder-me
But I Grill The Beef Just Like A burger-see
Put Dudes In surgery,nobody mukrin-me
Call Em E.r Coz Ya See This An emergency
I keep a level head, never blow it outta proportion/
so i finish it before it begins like a premature abortion/
the only think you given, is worthless spittens/
so give it up, nobody is feelin a thing you've written/
he thinks he can leave and come back and be the best, is he serious/
I aint even tryin, call this a tampon, becuz Lucky Lucifer is going through a bloody period/
your career is ********, I'm cuttin him, I think he needs bandages/
and if I say the Mac is near, I aint talkin Mcidees sandwiches/
I'm at the finish line, Lucifer still havant herd the word ready/
i'll paint this ***** world into black n white like Sin city/
and call em out tha blue instead of a Code like DiVinci/
and make he Marnier Jersey Red similar to Ken Griffery/
u spit 6 bars with 4 rhymes, guess its too complicated/
u know for a GROWN MAN u pretty uneducated/
you a wounded animal, still runnin' behind the pack/
magnetic, cause it's ONLY pain ya words attract/

my bad i got u mixed up but i freestyle non of that give me a week stuff

if u didnt understand why did u vote

Examples

You Never heard-a-me, enemy's Ull Try To murder-me
But I Grill The Beef Just Like A burger-see
(two lines didn't connect they just rhymed)

Put Dudes In surgery,nobody mukrin-me
Call Em E.r Coz Ya See This An emergency
(that was good)

I keep a level head, never blow it outta proportion/
so i finish it before it begins like a premature abortion/
(that bar made no sense at all)

the only think you given, is worthless spittens/
so give it up, nobody is feelin a thing you've written/
(spittens? ok bar didn't make sense just rhymed)

he thinks he can leave and come back and be the best, is he serious/
I aint even tryin, call this a tampon, becuz Lucky Lucifer is going through a bloody period/
(last line was hot first line was filler)

your career is ********>, I'm cuttin him, I think he needs bandages/
and if I say the Mac is near, I aint talkin Mcidees sandwiches/
(Hot bar but lines didn't connect with each other the first line negated the last one and first line was filler)

I'm at the finish line, Lucifer still havant herd the word ready/
i'll paint this ***** world into black n white like Sin city/
(the first line was filler didn't connect with last line though it was a hot line)

and call em out tha blue instead of a Code like DiVinci/
and make he Marnier Jersey Red similar to Ken Griffery/
(the davinci code has nothing to do with ken griffey or the color of a mariners jersey)

u spit 6 bars with 4 rhymes, guess its too complicated/
u know for a GROWN MAN u pretty uneducated/
(good)

you a wounded animal, still runnin' behind the pack/
magnetic, cause it's ONLY pain ya words attract/
(first and last line good they just didn't connect)

Yo spadez u good dog but you got to have consistency and do more than just rhyme words you got to make your bars connect too so they'll make more sense example:

Get out of this house cuz you rhyme like Dr.Suess/
This battle is a cat I put it in a hat and kick you out of your kibbutz/

see what im saying oh and you use too many fillers you got to find a way to get em out of there they take away from a verse i know cuz ive lost battles by using too many fillers

Another guy called 'killer' on a roleplaying website
Talk about your pulling status only ******** with a fleshlight*
(first line filler but hella funny! FLESHLIGHT! rofl )

Thought someone with no talent would accept, I guessed right
So please keep quiet and step away from the mic
(connected mediocre bar though)

Your unneeded in LG, my appendix serves more use
My expansive vocabulary, you stealing verbs from Dr. Seus
(didn't make sense but good bar)


I'll snap spades spine, force him in a fetal position
So scared of my rhymes that your teeth'll be itchin'
(ok bar didn't connect much)

Dig your grave, with a spade or a bulldozer maybe,
Kill a killer how ironic, Loc pushing up daisys
(connected hot bar)

Stand up to satan? Getting struck down seems likely
Go ahead b***h take the easy way out and bite me
(didn't connect but excellent finisher)

what i saw in this verse more consistency better spelling(wasn't hard to read) no decorations(to me which makes lines hotter than they appear) flow and connectivity he did good with the amount of bars he used and that first bar was just killer