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 Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 8:23 pm
i've already posted this on fanfiction, but i wrote it sort of as an attempt to get the characters IN character. This is what annoys me most about fanfics... when ppl have a decent idea but it falls apart bcuz its not the main character loving another, its two original characters with some already-used-and-loved names slapped on them. i am guilty of this as well. hence, my experiment thing. this is what i guess would be called a one-shot. it could occur anywhere in the story after the trip to volterra. i chose la tua cantante as the subject bcuz when the italian kid in my class pronounced it for me, it sounded so pretty and it was in my head for the longest time... please rate 1 - 10 with 10 in character and 1 out of character! thanks!!! here it is!
The green of the forest behind my house contrasted well with the cold and the rain. Underneath my feet the leafy green undergrowth simultaneously muffled my footfalls and hid roots and other potential disasters. I didn't trip: my first clue that I was dreaming. I could see someone in the forest ahead of me. It looked like Jacob, so I went forward to say hello. As I got closer I could see that it wasn't Jacob at all, but Edward in front of me. How I could have confused the two was beyond me at this point, but I was already running toward him. With one fluid movement, the figure turned to face me. Aro's translucent face peered down at me through dark, red-ringed eyes.
I opened my mouth to scream, but stopped. Partly because of the cold hand pressed gently across my lips, and partly because I knew that had been a nightmare and that now I was awake. Edward looked down at me as Aro had in my dream, and I saw his eyes were brighter than I'd ever seen them.
"You went hunting?," I asked in a quiet voice. My voice was low for reasons other than the fact that Charlie slept a few yards away. His face was so perfect, I felt that nothing should interfere with it. His eyes were so bright they lit up the room, or made everything else seem much darker by comparison, I couldn't really tell I was so tired.
"I had to," he answered, barely bothering to lower his voice. Charlie's snores continued however. "Nightmare?" he asked understanding the wild look my eyes must have had as they first opened.
"Did I talk in my sleep again," I wondered in a whisper.
"Of course," he smiled my favorite smile. "But you know it's just a nightmare. I'm here" he breathed velvetly into my ear.
"I'm glad," I answered, slipping back to sleep. It was hard to believe in the red-eyed dream Aro when I looked into those golden eyes.
I was falling back to sleep before I knew it. I rolled over and pressed myself against his frozen body. The places where I touched the blankets and touched him contrasted nicely. Warm then cold. I clutched at him incoherently and felt him roll me over gently and settle down on top of the covers behind me, his arm draped over my side and his lips against my ear.
After a moment, I realized he was no longer humming my lullaby to me, but singing softly. His velvet words ran together and I couldn't tell if he were singing in Italian, English, or some language known only to the vampires. I sighed softly and drifted more and more.
Then, suddenly, I was awake again. "Edward, I'm not very creative," I said a little stupidly.
"Are you going somewhere with this, darling?" He asked me. At the sound of his beautiful voice I almost forgot what I was saying.
I pressed on, "But you are!"
"When?" he asked. He was almost sarcastic, but in a perfect sort of way.
"You wrote my lullaby! It's the most beautiful thing I've ever heard, and not just because you wrote it or because it was for me. Mike could have written it for Jessica and it would still be the most beautiful thing I've ever heard!"
To my surprise, the sound coming from Edward was laughter. I had expected modesty, maybe. There had been a possibility of playful arrogance (maybe even real arrogance), but I hadn't expected him to laugh at my perception of beauty. "Hey!" I said, rolling over to face him, "Why are you laughing?"
"Bella, I'm flattered that you think me capable of such beauty. However, you are the artist."
Now I was truly confused, and the late hour wasn't helping matters. My confusion must have shown in my face, because Edward started to explain.
"Bella, since the day I met you, the sounds of 'your lullaby' have played in my head. I didn't really write it, I simply wrote it down."
"I don't understand," I said truthfully. Sleep had once again gained ahold of me, even at this crucial moment.
Edward sighed. "Remember how we talked of your blood being special to me? It smells special to me. Vampire senses are different from human ones, more... tangible. The smell of your blood is so very real to me. I can almost hear it calling for me. Even that almost imaginary call has a special sound to me. At some point on one of those nights while I sat awake in my room thinking of you, I wrote this sound as closely as I could to fit onto the primitive keys of a piano. It really didn't help. This was on one of those nights before I decided to give up avoiding you. I tried not to think about how, even then, you were asleep without me. Strangely enough, the keys sound almost nothing like the song in my head. I could never convey to you the beauty of that song. Since the piano song sounded as it did, and I wrote it down while thinking of you asleep, I decided to call it a lullaby. So you see, I had almost no part in the writing of it. It truly is your lullaby. The Volturi described it much more clearly than they know when they called you my singer."
I fought back tears. Even now, it surprised me to hear Edward speak of how important I was to him. He was more important to me than life itself, but he was beautiful and perfect. I was plain and it was hard to comprehend that I would matter that much.
Edward leaned over and kissed me, and I knew for the millionth time that I would never become used to Edward's kisses. He leaned down to put his face close to my ear. I could almost imagine the idea of putting a smell to song. Edward himself smelled more beautiful than any lullaby could convey. I think I actually fainted a little from proximity and overwhelming smell.
I heard Aro's words and saw his pale paper face and red eyes, but the sleep had me and I couldn't even shudder. The words he had spoken then washed over me, almost as real as Edward's voice in my ear.
La tua cantante.
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 3:28 pm
Wow. This is absolutely wonderful. I love your writing style and how true you stayed to the characters. What annoys me more than anything is how fan-fiction writers tend to get out of character and put developed characters into situations that would be totally unrealistic - or the characters say something that would be totally unrealistic to what they would actually say. You truly stayed in character. I loved the part where you said that Edward didn't feel like he was writing Bella's lullaby at all - just simply putting in on paper. I could totally see him doing that. n_n If you are interested in fan-fiction, I'm writing one myself: Gravity. Hope you enjoy, if you so choose to read it. Takes place after the end of New Moon - just to pass the time until Eclipse comes out. ^^
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 6:54 pm
+Doesn't look very appetizing
This is one of the best! You stayed to character very nicely! And your writing style! Absolutely wonderful.
Well, it's no irritable grizzly+
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 7:29 pm
mmm this is so romantic.... it's very, very good. heart
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 8:47 pm
thanks so much everyone! i know what you mean about going out of character. i find myself doing it very often, but i did my best on this and it was about staying in character.
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 10:13 pm
btw kinara, i read your story... awesome job. can't wait for an update!
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2007 7:53 pm
Wow thats. . .so great!
I loved it.
Its actually what the characters would say and do; I hate when people make up crap that the characters would never do.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 9:27 pm
hey... glad you like it. i struggle with making my characters do what they normally would. this is my only twilight fanfic. If i could think of another cool situation i'd probably try it again. To me, it is much easier to do a fanfic from characters in a book than from a movie. In a movie you don't really get into the ppl's heads like you do in books. having said that, this is the only time i've written a fanfic from a book. my others are on tv shows and movies. and they are MUCH more out of character. they are more wishful thinking on my part than actual looks into the lives of characters i know and love.... but i've turned this into a rant on my part about fanfiction so....
BELLA AND EDWARD FOREVER!
just to keep on topic!
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 10:20 pm
This fan fiction is really really good! Post more asap!
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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 3:35 pm
OMFS...! Okay...I'm bad at showing emotions but I'll do my best. That was BRILLIANT. The way you captured the personality and actual character of Stephenie Meyer's characters was.... unbelievable. I love it. I agree---keep writing! heart
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 6:59 am
i'm glad everyone likes it!! this was actually a one-shot and i won't continue it, but i'll post another couple one-shots later when i'm on my own computer. i'm at school at the moment, so i don't have time!!
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 9:47 am
yes please post more!!! that was wonderful writing!!!!!
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 8:46 pm
well, i wrote this forever ago. and since then, i haven't been able to think of any more. But, suddenly, three were clambering around in my head to be written. I don't know if they are as good as the first, but I enjoyed writing them. Two were funny, and one was serious. I don't have time tonight to devote myself to making sure the serious one is good enough. That kind of editing does require concentration and my bed is calling. So here are the funny ones. Hope you enjoy them. and i hope they don't fall short of your expectations. as always:
REVIEWS ROCK!!
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 8:51 pm
A day late, but anyway! I can't really imagine Bella joking about this stuff with Charlie. Maybe Renee... But I thought it was a cute idea that demanded to be written so I put my best foot forward and tried it out. Tell me what you think!! April Fool's Day
I lingered in the bathroom a few minutes longer than it took me to brush my hair, which is what I'd told them I was doing. Before heading back downstairs, I stopped by my room to grab the key prop, then walked as swiftly as I could without alerting Edward. I knew he'd be able to tell if I was in a hurry, but I was afraid I'd spent too much time composing my face.
I returned to the living room where Edward and Charlie were watching baseball on TV. Edward wasn't really watching, I could tell by the way he turned his head before I'd reached the creaky floor boards. I smiled in response to his heart-stopping flash of white teeth, then took my place on the floor in front of the TV.
"Could you shift a little to the left, Bells?" I think you've picked the only place where you block the scores." I smiled but not too much, knowing that now both their attention was on me.
"Oh! Sorry, Dad," I said, shifting to where my toes, stretched out behind me, just reached Edward's feet. I flipped the pages of my book as if I were looking for something.
"What's that you're reading?" Edward probably only asked because I'd moved it to where he couldn't see it. Predictably curious creatures, vampires.
Flipping the book over to the front, I made a big show of checking the title. As if i didn't know exactly what it said. "One thousand and one baby names for young mothers," I quoted, instantly feeling the tenseness in the room.
"W- Why?" spluttered Charlie. I'll admit, this reaction was expected.
"Well, I saw it in the grocery store today, and thought it might be useful around October," I told them brightly. I couldn't take my eyes from the book or they'd see the laugh I could barely hold back.
"You! Are! Not! Pregnant!" this time it was Edward who -- as gracfully as possible-- spluttered. "It's not possible!" I could hear him turning to Charlie, so I turned around laughing.
"April Fools!" I cried.
My laughing stopped when I saw their faces. Scratch that from my list of brilliant practical jokes.
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 8:55 pm
haha. this is dedicated to Michelle because of her love for Inu Yasha. and to my Uncle Josh who once introduced himself as Edward, is bigger than Emmet, and insists that vampyre is spelled with a Y. If you are reading this, I love you both!! it's really not about inu yasha... it's also fairly pointless in retrospect. I Y and Inu Yasha
I turned the TV off after Inu Yasha. Back in Phoenix, I'd never had much interest in Japanese cartoons. However, not long ago I'd watched an episode of this one and fallen in love with it.
Call me crazy, but maybe it had been the human girl riding on the back of the almost-demon that she obviously loved as he ran through the forest. Anyway, it had really gotten to me, and I hadn't missed an episode since.
Edward had suffered through them with me. He'd probably suffer through a volcanic eruption if I asked him... then again maybe not. Because then I'd be in danger, and a very selfish part of me smiled to know how much he worried about me.
That part of me smiled because my boyfriend was godlike in his beauty. Smiled because my boyfriend would risk any and everything to keep me safe. Heck, a part of me smiled because my boyfriend was a vamp--
"Edward?" I asked, suddenly curious. "How do you spell vampire?"
Edward's face took on the oddest expression. "What do you mean 'How do you spell it'?"
"With an 'I' or with a 'Y'?" I clarified.
"Oh!" he seemed surprised. "Why does it matter?"
"I don't know. I just like to know how to spell things," I told him.
"Why? Are you going to write it down somewhere?"
"No."
"Then why do you need to know?"
"I just like to spell things in my mind as I think them."
Edward laughed then, perfect bells bouncing around my living room. For once, Charlie knew Edward was here, but he'd gone to bed early, asked us not to wake him, then reminded Edward to leave at 11:00 because 'he'd know if he didn't'. I'd done my best to keep from laughing then, but Edward had been serious as he'd said 'yes, sir'. The clock on the wall said 11:07 so his laugh was quieter than it might've been.
"Bella, you are so absurd!" he told me.
"I've been told," I said dryly.
"So?" I prompted after a moment.
"Well, to be honest, I've never had any reason to wonder about it... I don't really know."
"Then, can I spell it V-A-M-P-Y-R-E?" I pleaded.
"I don't see why not," he started, clearly not understanding the importance of the situation.
"Yes!" I interjected, "'Y' is so much cooler than 'I'! I kissed him goodnight, then turned to climb the stairs, knowing he'd be in the bedroom before I was.
Before reaching the second step, I heard him mutter something that sounded suspiciously like: 'Maybe that's why she's so impossible to read'.
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