mikistarchan
so lonely
the day's endless
how can i be happy?
when it's all so sad
chinese new year
is a day you get money and have fun
but why am i so sad?
because of that strike
he hit me with such force
i felt blood down coming down
am i doing anything wrong?
why is it so hard
to please parents
they keep on saying
the unmeaning words
i've been hearing
all along
but..
i just hear
the silent tears
that run down my face
each time
your style is unique;
Idk this is how i woulda wrote the last few lines (just to show my style i'm not at all criticizing or anything)
Only hearing
the unspoken tears
that courses down my cheek across my face
every time
but your style is easy to read tho
biggrin
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thanks for commenting! And no, it's not my life 