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 Posted: Fri Feb 02, 2007 12:24 am
Dreams were meant to be broken
And I've ruined quite a few
It seems that I was was wrong agian
When I dreamt of loving you
It seems that you want naught to do
With me and all my foolish dreams
You look at me and see right through
Just a toy to you, it seems
South of Heaven and still falling
There's no salvation there for me
The Devil has his claws locked in
A heart that wishes to be free
The weak shall inherit nothing
No matter what the old books say
Because the truth about our world
Is the fact that crime does pay
If there's something you want, take it
Don't leave your life in the hands of fate
Life is a journey of hurt and joy
And if you don't hang on, you'll be too late
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Posted: Fri Feb 02, 2007 2:07 pm
Wow, awesome poem!! I like it a lot 3nodding The rhymes are quite original. As well as the theme 3nodding I particularly like the line, "The Devil has his claws locked in / A heart that wishes to be free." ^^; The rhythm in the first verse was really good too, though it varied a bit afterwards.
But overall, 'tis a great poem!
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