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Ryuka Navali Vice Captain
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 Posted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 11:13 pm
Rules:
~ No posting in this thread unless it's your test.
~ Limited to 4 posts. You can use less.
~ You have 2 weeks to finish your rp
~ Must use the battle field type assigned to you
~ You create a monster of your choice
~ Have fun!
1~Ice- Pretty simple with this one. The floor becomes solid ice. There are random chunks of ice protruding from the floor. And of course, you have little to no traction.
2~Desert- Pretty much nothing but massive sand dunes. You sink down into the sand, which slows you down a LOT. If the wind blows, the sand gets kicked up, which obscures vision.
3~Open Field- A plain grassy field with nothing on it.
4~Ocean- A mini ocean about 40 feet deep. There are five floating platforms for battlers to stand on. The plat forms bob around and it's really hard to keep your balence on them.
5~Dense Forest- The arena is packed from wall to wall with dense, tropical trees. As in any tropical jungle, there are lots of vines and other such things to get tangled up in.
6~Land of Fire- Parts of the arena floor sink away, leaving behind pits of lava. Also, pillars of fire erupt from the floor periodicly
7~Concrete- A plain concrete floor.
8~The Abyss- Near complete darkness engulfs the arena. Dark energy is abundant in this field.
9~The Sanctuary- Opposite of the Abyss. Light energy fills the arena. Its very bright!
10~No floor- The floor drops away leaving a pit filled with spikes. There are levitating platforms at varrying heights, going all the way to the top of the arena. It's hard to jump from platform to platform, and trust me, you don't want to fall.
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Ryuka Navali generated a random number between
1 and 10 ...
3!
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Posted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 11:15 pm
3~Open Field- A plain grassy field with nothing on it.
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Ryuka Navali Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jan 23, 2007 5:41 pm
Lyana walked in and felt the blowing of the wind on her back. She was wearing her sandals; but they were so worn she could feel the soft cool grass under her feet. She suddenly felt the corners of her lips rising up, a smile? She walked around the grassy field happily. She hadn't felt so at peace with herself for a long long time. Sitting down she crossed her legs; careful that her skirt covered her properly. She waved her hand humming a tune she knew from somewhere...and started to read the cards that appeared before her. Strange...not quite what she expected to see for the fortune of a test. Beware of the Skies, judgment, and a card that represents danger of; or loss of life. A feeling of fear filled her stomach as she saw a shadow pass over her. She froze in place feeling stiff.
She looked up and saw nothing; but knew with a sickening clarity that something WAS there. She took a breath and waved her hands, "Reveal my foe" she mumbled watching her tarot cards float out from her case and lining up in front of her. Her eyes rushed over the cards; A beast of flight; truth and a blood lust. The shadow rushed over her again; this time however; talons grabbed onto her; digging into her back and lifting her high into the air.
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Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 7:36 pm
Lyana wanted to scream badly; but nothing came out of her mouth. Her lips and throat were dry as she thrashed about trying to break free. She was panicing; the pressure on her shoulders were threatening to trap her in a nightmare. One of screaming; and hands all over. A nightmare filled with pain, rape and memories she'd like to forget. This method that she was using, if you could call it that, was doing her no good. She closed her eyes and called up a tarot card to her hand. Perfect. Just the card I wanted to see; chaos. A card that will knock the bird out of the sky and make it into a roast.
The problem was Lyana couldn't be in it's grasp when she called on that spell. That meant breaking out of it's death grip. She looked up at the creature, it looked like an eagle with the body of a lion. It's a griffin! Lyana drew from her deck a few black cards. She closed her eyes and charged them with her energy and threw them forward; landing them right in the creatures face.
The cards sent out black bolts of energy onto the creature; making it let out sickening screams and releasing Lyana; letting her fall towards the ground.
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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 7:15 pm
As Lyana fell she drew out a card of wind. Calling on the magic soundlessly the wind twisted and wrapped around her like a hurricane; setting her softly on the ground. As she landed she tossed her hand to the right and grabbed chaos. The Griffin, now recovered from the shock looked down on Lyana, seeing a weak and defenseless prey. This however was untrue. As the Griffin swept down towards her she threw the card forward and extended her palm; aiming the spell at the bird.
Fire rushed out from the card along with a husky smoke, jagged rocks, and flew out towards the bird in what looked like the shape of a dragon. It’s blazing body; and magma like talons and teeth rushed towards the beast. The Griffin wasn’t quite done yet however. For with a strong flap of it’s wings a powerful blast of air hit the spell and knocked it back.
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Posted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 11:35 am
Lyana smiled; she had expected that. She waved her hand once more and twisted the flames around; calling them towards the beast. "Do not underestamate me creature!" She said, her voice shaking. This time I will not lose. Never again will I loose...she thought to herself as calmly as possible. However she was filled with fear. So she began to run, she couldn't help it.
The beast dew closer and closer to her, and the spell raced up behind it. She was afraid to stop, afraid that if she did it would happen all over again. This time she was strong. This time she didn't need to out run it. Then; sliding in the grass she turned around gracfully tossed herself towards the creature; but she was faster than it, forcing the griffin to stop and turn around; allowing the fiery draconic caotic spell crash right into it's face. The flames twisted all around it ripping and tearing the flesh. Flames so hot that no matter how much flesh was ripped off the creature; it failed to bleed.
The griffin let out horrifying screams of pain as chaos ravaged it. Lyana then turned around and drawing out another card chucked it strait at the flaming mass and cut it in half in a burst of light. A stunning and frightening silence followed as it fell to the ground as ashes and the card returned to her deck.
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Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 3:50 pm
Length and Pacing: The length of each post was relatively the same, however i would have liked to see some more challenge to it. It seemed to move rather quickly.
General Grammer rules: 15 mistakes was all I really caught. It's a significant improvement from your last test! Still, make sure you double check some of those easier words that are catchable. smile
Personality: Right from the start I was captivated by your character. I love the part where she makes sure that her skirt covers her properly lol. The fighting style was amazing. I loved how it was different from other people's. Only thing I would say is that the thoughts kinda confused me. I had no idea what had happened before.
Use of Enviroment: It's hard to find something to do with a grassy field and I'm glad you took it beyond the field. The use of the sky was brilliant. I'm just curious if there were clouds or anything like that. Make sure to add that in!
Details: These were ok. I didn't feel like I was there. Details add the best effects, so make sure there are plenty to go around, just not so much that a person wants to kill their brain. lol
Overall: I would give you a C+ or 69 credits
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 3:39 pm
Length and Pacing: It seemed rather short to me, (I'm a stickler for longer posts), but they all were more or less then same, and that's apparently good with exams in this guild! It did move a bit too quickly for my liking though.
General Grammar rules: I caught a few errors, but pretty good other than that.
Personality: Good personality. I got somewhat lost at times, but I think that was moreso due to the pacing rather than a lack of good detail and such.
Use of Environment: There didn't seem to be much use of environment in this, but I'm not going to fault you for it, since it is an empty plain. Like Jess said, though, add a bit more detail to the area around your character.
Details: Definitely add more detail - this is really the only area I see you lacking in, in my opinion. Flesh out the description of the monster, of the area, and of things that play an important role.
I give you 67 credits, or a C+.
(Yuki dies of shame at how late he is at grading. Oops.)
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Ketsueki Yuki Vice Captain
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