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PostPosted: Sun Jan 21, 2007 1:38 pm


How are you suppost to repair what can’t be fixed?
I am sorry Chris for saying no, I am sorry for what I did!
How can you forgive her what for what she did?
I didn’t even cheat on you but yet she did.
My heart seems to be shattered but that doesn’t matter.
So for once in my life I do not win, for once in my life I break down and I get shattered.
It is the guy that this happens never me, so why did it happen?
Since I know what it feels like now I will break no more hearts.
But that still dose not help I don’t have you, you have not for gave me and we are not friends.
I could live with either one of those as long as we are cool, but I know it will never happen.
They say time heals everything, so why is my scar not going away?
PostPosted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 7:16 pm


Its good. Few spelling errors but understandable.
Some lines I couldnt quite comprehend though.
(Its good though)

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 24, 2007 8:38 pm


It's a good start. It definitely has feeling to it. Though the one sentence that tripped me up was: "But that still does not help I don’t have you, you have not for gave me" I think you're trying to say "you have not forgiven me". Just a bit of grammer. sweatdrop I tend towards that myself...
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