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Posted: Fri Jan 05, 2007 4:43 pm

arrow I love it when people say
"Wow that's such and unusual endding"
or
"I would have never expected for it to end that way"!
I just plain love it...
And i thank you all for commenting on my poems!

His eye’s stared into mine, full of sorrow and hate
It turned my stomach, thinking ‘am I too late?’
But it’s not his look that made me uneasy
But it’s the fact that he was so close to me

My heart beat out of my chest
The room started to spin around my head
My stomach turned upside down
As my thoughts of him swirled around

His cold touch heated my face
Burning memories I couldn’t erase
I lost my thoughts as the space filled with only him
What was it going to take for me to win?

I know he loves her
That little fact I couldn’t ignore
Buts there’s something she should know…
There’s no way she loves him more

Though sure he hugged me, said he loved me
But is wasn’t really going to be
I found that out the painful way
By letting my heart think about tomorrow’s day

I would give anything to be near him again
I’d give anything the be with him now and then
To have him know how I truly felt
The way he made my heart melt

He had me on hold
‘I found someone I love’ he told
My heart ripping to pieces slowly
He said he loved me, I wish I had said ‘show me’

I stood by his side, and I always would
I glanced at the edge to see what I could
Then I jumped into the crying weather
Whispering ‘For Now And Forever’

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Posted: Tue Jan 09, 2007 11:15 pm

It's so sad when people you care about throw you away so carelessly. It's a good poem, and it flows really well. The only problem I have with it is the "to" in the second line should be "too", minor grammer, I do it all the time. smile Hope this situation really isn't happening to you.