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beachbeagle

PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2007 5:49 pm


As all chapters of my work are on fictionpress I thought I'd start a thread here and add the links to my stories in it. That way people can still inspire me, but I don't repost chapters.

Below is a list of my stories with the summaries I have on fictionpress and a link to the first chapter (if there are others you can get to them from that page).

My stories:
Ghosts of Memory:In a world where magic is illegal, ten teens with magic powers escape discovery. They, like all others, are erased from exsistance. And in this case, being no one means there is no one to turn, and nowhere to hide from the sinister evil that's after them.
link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2055281/1/

The Game Begins
For the nine teens playing this game... winning is truely a matter of life or death.
link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2209428/1/

Wings of Fate
Seven fairies take off on a quest and another is forced to make a difficult desision. The choices and actions of all eight will drastically effect the fate of the whole world of Lashasdas.
link: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2209427/1/

I have one other story, but none of it is as of yet written. It will be added when I have completed the first chapter.
PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2007 7:12 pm


You may want to work on your hook for the one where magic is illegal. I mean, the opening was all a bit blunt and left me with little to relish. I don’t want to here another synopsis of the story, i want something that throws me into the book and locks the gate behind me, then i want your story to attack me, ripping each and every one of my visual and emotional senses to threads.

When that’s all said and done you should then try to remind me that its only the beginning...and that the rest will be that and much much more.

of course i imediatly clicked on the site link when i got here so i could be talking out of my a** right now --_--

What i read was well written though.

NovaKing


beachbeagle

PostPosted: Thu Jan 04, 2007 5:46 pm


Hmmmm.... That helps, but to change the prologue (which I believe is what you're talking about) I need more of an idea of what needs changing. The basic idea of what goes on needs to somewhat stay the same, because Reza's time power is basically what saves everyone from that fate.... however what specifically happens and/or how it is written could be changed if I had a bit better idea of what parts you thought needed the changing.
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