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 Posted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 11:18 pm
Part 1
It fells ever since I haven’t been talking to you my life has been a blur. What I hate the most is you use to be there and now, I have no clue were you are. I liked you; you liked me it seemed to be perfect, but…it is all my flat and I know that so why am I talking to you? There is no point in saying this or writhing this but…I do miss the things you say that made me feel happy for once.
Part 2
I miss the way you made me feel when I was sad, mad, or even glad. There was once this black hole were my heart was then you made me feel something. After you gave me that feeling you took it away. Even thou it sounds harsh I am thinking you. It took me a real long time to get over you but…now I am moving on and you are becoming a part of my past, but a good part. Thank you for every thing and I love you.
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Posted: Thu Jan 04, 2007 7:48 am
It is very lovely 3nodding biggrin
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Posted: Thu Jan 11, 2007 4:50 pm
I like it. the images were very nice. you need to break your writings down to stanzas. the paragraghs make it look sloppy. Also, you don't need to make it two parts. You can make it two stanzas of the same writing since the theme is the same as the first.
keep it up. you have good potential there if you keep at it
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Posted: Sat Jan 13, 2007 6:09 pm
thanks im glad you like it!
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