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 Posted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 10:10 pm
Kiss kiss, love
Goodnight and sweet dreams.
The world is hurt, the world is pain,
And nothing will ever be the same,
But, just kiss my lips again
And don't tell me what it means
Kiss kiss, darling
Pull the covers round you tight
Turmoil and destruction reign
Everyone has gone insane
But just kiss me once again
And make it seem all right
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Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2007 7:31 pm
I like the flow, but the beat seems a little wonky to me. Other than that, its good.
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Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 10:41 pm
Mitra I like the flow, but the beat seems a little wonky to me. Other than that, its good. By 'wonky' I think it means that you may have forgotten your comma's in the second verse. But I like the simple message - very true. Any more poetry?
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