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Drakansa

Sexy Wife

PostPosted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 10:10 pm


Kiss kiss, love
Goodnight and sweet dreams.
The world is hurt, the world is pain,
And nothing will ever be the same,
But, just kiss my lips again
And don't tell me what it means

Kiss kiss, darling
Pull the covers round you tight
Turmoil and destruction reign
Everyone has gone insane
But just kiss me once again
And make it seem all right
PostPosted: Mon Jan 08, 2007 7:31 pm


I like the flow, but the beat seems a little wonky to me. Other than that, its good.

Mitra


the_weird_1

PostPosted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 10:41 pm


Mitra
I like the flow, but the beat seems a little wonky to me. Other than that, its good.


By 'wonky' I think it means that you may have forgotten your comma's in the second verse. But I like the simple message - very true. Any more poetry?
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