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 Posted: Mon Jan 01, 2007 3:24 pm
I was really bored in class one day when I did this. It's pretty bad, the title is actually a chapter name *grabs library copy of Twilight and flips to table on content* Wow chapter 2. I took sentences from the part where Edward and Bella first talk in science..I think and if you want I believe it's on page 47 or 48. Please criticize as you want if bad or good.
Open Book
He sat across from me
A smile, from his flawless lips
Coal black eyes stared with a strange light
His bronze hair wet from the snow
I could only smily stupidly at him
When he held my hands a cold feeling passed through them
I tried to look away but only to be unsuccessful
Paranoia swept over me as small talk ensued
So much intrest he took in my dull conversation
About my life story
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Class bells rang
I pull my head up from the textbook
Will I ever see him?
The ending makes no sense I know neutral
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Posted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 11:22 am
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Anachronism p a r a d o x
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Previously Kagome_Kitsune
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Posted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 12:57 pm
Nooo! The end makes a lot of sense... wow 'tis pretty XD You should read it to the class, and then probably the guys will fall for you right there. xd
I live in a world of fantasy gonk
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Posted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 8:16 pm
Kagome_Kitsune Nooo! The end makes a lot of sense... wow 'tis pretty XD You should read it to the class, and then probably the guys will fall for you right there. xd
I live in a world of fantasy gonk It does make sense yay! Guys really don't like me except for creepy nerds stare
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Posted: Thu Jan 04, 2007 9:51 pm
Hey it's pretty good!
Who cares if the end doesn't seem to fit, as long as you know what it means that's all that acctually counts, ya know?
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Posted: Fri Jan 05, 2007 10:36 pm
Marble skin, topaz eyes
To onyx black, how I despise
my mind as he walks in the room
my heart lifts sickenglingly,and the gloom
washes away, despite my hate
for loving him, within a day
I dream of him, mind like a toy,
I'm rapidly falling for this boy,
Edward.
By me, just now.
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Posted: Sat Jan 06, 2007 3:16 pm
Cute_honor_student666 Marble skin, topaz eyes
To onyx black, how I despise
my mind as he walks in the room
my heart lifts sickenglingly,and the gloom
washes away, despite my hate
for loving him, within a day
I dream of him, mind like a toy,
I'm rapidly falling for this boy,
Edward.
By me, just now. Wow. o.O Awesome.
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Posted: Tue Jan 09, 2007 1:14 pm
Cute_honor_student666 Marble skin, topaz eyes
To onyx black, how I despise
my mind as he walks in the room
my heart lifts sickenglingly,and the gloom
washes away, despite my hate
for loving him, within a day
I dream of him, mind like a toy,
I'm rapidly falling for this boy,
Edward.
By me, just now.
heart
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