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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 1:01 am
*name to be decided* 14 August
My eyes aren’t gentle blue, like all the other women I see around me; my hair isn’t princess gold. It doesn’t twist itself into graceful ringlets. A mane of dark tangles and half-formed curls chases its way down my back. Neither is my skin fair, it’s as dark as though I’ve spent my whole life outdoors. But they still say I fetched a hefty price, for a gypsy. My mother told me I was beautiful, I spit on her. I was sold as we moved camp through these lands, this cursed place. The wind is forever howling, and everything is so gray, always! Nothing holds beauty here, even the girls with their sparkling smiles and slender figures. They seem gray, too. Have I finally been sent to hell, as they say? Are all of my kind doomed to this prison, or have they something worse? Oh, that I could run away! My master is a tall man with strange orange hair. I find it as easy to gape at as he does me. I am not poor now, no. But nothing I own is mine. Jewels and fine clothes are placed in my hands after every time he comes to see me. He calls me “Wild Rose” even though that’s not my name. He forbids me to say my real one. He shudders when I do. He has a wife, a fat golden thing. She’s not far past her youth. I have never spoken to her. I am not sure she knows of my existence, but Master is careful to keep us far apart. I wonder, sometimes, that if I were plump and old, that if he’d cease to desire me, too, and he’d let me go. There’s no chance of that, though. My meals are brought to me in my chamber. I am not permitted to eat with the “civilised” folk. It is barely enough to live on, calculated, I suppose, to keep me slender. Sometimes I can’t eat. The food here tastes dull as everything else. Master insists it’s the finest the great kitchen can come out with. That softens my heart to it none, it’s still awful. I am confined to my chambers, though sometimes they let me outside to walk the length of the park. Someone, some maid or servant always escorts me. They hold a parasol over my head, I suppose to keep my skin from getting darker. Sometimes, I wish lightning from the sky would strike me dead as I walk. I fear I am going mad.
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 1:04 am
As you've already seen, this little work of mine is told by perspective- The perspective of the character being examined, in the form of a sort of diary-entry. The story isn't long, it's not even finished. The first character, and our unwitting herione doesn't really have a name at the moment. The story's set in old England. I'll check up on whatever year I schlepped in my pre-write. More details will follow, but a brief sketch will do for now. Assuming it meets with any approval whatsoever. sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 1:05 am
MARITA, under-housemaid. 18 August
I ne’er seen anything like her afore. The girl, the gipsy. I went in to straighten the room once, and there she was, staring at me, all hungry-like. She’s huge eyes, and they’re very dark, like moonless nights on the moors. I’ve heard you could see hell through a gypsy’s eyes, and after this one, I should believe it. She didn’t move or speak. Master told me to address her as “Miss.” I don’t see any reason for it. A gypsy like her is beneath even the scullery maid. At least the scullery maid acts something like a human being. I heard her singing once yesterday. It was awful.
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 1:06 am
MASTER 23 August
She is beautiful! My manservant came galloping back from the blacksmith’s on his freshly shod horse, babbling about some girl singing on the roadside for coins. His talk excited many. Gypsies! The carnival had found its way to us. Naturally, it being a curiosity, I gathered a party and went gallivanting off, but it was a pathetic sight. A carnival of four far too thin people, and one half-starved horse. The old woman looked as though she were dead walking. None of the others looked better. It seemed as though their troupe had left them behind. The old one told fortunes, and indeed there was a girl singing. She was slender and dark-skinned. Her voice was fair, but it had a certain melancholy quality that left me haunted for days afterwards. I expressed my interest to the old man sitting near their meager fire. And two days later, she became a member of my household. She is content, I’ll wager, She could wish for nothing more than I could give her, and if she could... Well, I doubt the notion would enter her head.
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 11:41 am
O.o
Voxxxie, wtf mate?
This is de-PRESS-ing.
Never seen this before, whatever happened to the Vox book?
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 5:10 pm
KirbyVictorious O.o Voxxxie, wtf mate? This is de-PRESS-ing. Never seen this before, whatever happened to the Vox book? xd Yep! For the first few er, chapters ( sweatdrop I say that term lightly) anways, then gets lighter, gets darker, and ends. And that's on temporary hold. heart Wasn't good enough to go on with, it needs a SERIOUS editing.
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 7:09 pm
I'd say the poor child needs some love *sigh*
Buuuut...I'm watching too much Eureka Seven, which by the way gets REALLY good! And Eureka thinks machines are like children, it's rubbing off.
Why does everything end darkly with you? Can't you have a happy ending like...once?
*looks who's talking*
ohhhh....maybe this isn't my area to criticize, since I AM the writer of Lacausta, the darkest faerie tale unknown to mankind...
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 11:09 pm
KirbyVictorious I'd say the poor child needs some love *sigh* Buuuut...I'm watching too much Eureka Seven, which by the way gets REALLY good! And Eureka thinks machines are like children, it's rubbing off. Why does everything end darkly with you? Can't you have a happy ending like...once? *looks who's talking* ohhhh....maybe this isn't my area to criticize, since I AM the writer of Lacausta, the darkest faerie tale unknown to mankind... xd Because I can't write happy things without going into some serious satire. If I made the-book-that-is-yet-without-a-title becauseof those dicey little copyright issues would end like... "And so the happy little elves led contented oblivious lives while our herione and hero continued their friendship, though they moped and whinged for hours because they couldn't make out. ...And all the bad people died. The End." I don't believe in happy endings. They're just unfinished stories.
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Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2006 12:31 pm
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Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2006 12:43 pm
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Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2006 4:28 pm
Yup. I can't multitask, so all I could think of was... rofl
Aaaaaand...I just awkwarditized this whole conversation didn't I?
Muffins.
So there.
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Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2006 6:26 pm
Cinnamon muffins, my specialty. heart
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Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2006 8:41 pm
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Posted: Sun Jan 07, 2007 10:41 pm
xd We made a bowlful. I think the batter was better, though.
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Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2007 4:31 pm
I still have those muffins!
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O.O
Better eat em, huh? sweatdrop
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