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No One Would Care

If I ran away,
no one would care
she thought to herself.
No, no one would care,
a voice replied.
If i was kidnapped,
no one would look for me,
she whispered to herself
tears brimming in her eyes.
No, no one would look for you,
a voice replied.
If i was murdered,
no one would try to avenge my death
she said to herself
crying softly.
No, no one would avenge your death,
a voice replied.
If i committed suicide,
no one would care.
No, no one would care
a voice replied.
As she ran to the edge
preparing to jump
a hand grabbed her.
No, if you ran away,
I would search for you until i died.
If you were kidnapped,
i would kill the kidnappers.
If you were murdered,
i would avenge your death.
If you committed suicide,
i would blame myself.
I care,
so don't jump.
11/18/05

(~note, i dont know what imspired me to write this)

Comments please
[and Lazi will be very nice to people who help her find her spelling mistakes]

My version=

The last sentence:
"As she ran to the edge
preparing to jump "

mine:

and jump she did,
right over the very edge
plummetting to her death.
no hand came forth,
no god-sent angel
stopped her from her descent.
she died that day,
one life lost;
never to see the
light of day again.
not even her supposed
guardian angel
batted an eye on the lost soul.
she was gone, gone.
never to return.
one life lost,
among the oceans of deaths.
what did it matter, no
why should they care?
people she knew,
ones that were close.
they held but pity,
but never comfort.
what should they see?
for they had their own loved ones,
ones that cared, who'd hold onto them
lest they wanted to jump.
and so the girl died, her lost soul wanders
among those of the living;
one foot in death, and one in life.

Don't ask me what the last part means, don't criticize me cuz i didn't exactly intend it to be a masterpiece. Just get the basic idea.

thankies ^>^

and saiiki, wow, that was AMAZING
PU

Very nice you guys. Kiwi likies~ :3