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The Last Dance

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Reikuken

PostPosted: Fri Nov 24, 2006 7:48 pm


Dancing and twirling and humming
She glides across the ballroom floor
All alone, and in her mind
She feels her partner's hands
As she dances so solemnly
She dances so perfectly
So happily

Skipping and leaping and twisting
She falls into the rhythm
Of music unheard by her unseen audience
Her feet so delicately lead her body
As she dances so solemnly
She dances so perfectly
So sadly

Turning and spinning and stepping
She moves with a grace so beautiful
It amazes those who see
She dances a maze of steps so complicated
And she dances so solemnly
She dances so perfectly
So wisely

Living and breathing and dying
All at once she lives in everything
She knows she'll forget these steps the next day
But she'll never forget her dance partner's face
As she dances so solemnly
She dances so perfectly
And she dances her last dance
 
PostPosted: Sat Jan 17, 2009 11:00 am


It's beautiful! I don't often gush over poems, as I like to give constructive criticism, but this poem doesn't need any. I love the imagery of the solemn dancer, and the emotion is so wonderfully portrayed. It's as if the words themselves are dancing to their own unheard music. Wonderful. I give you a resounding five stars out of five.

Basil-tofu

Hygienic Gekko


Reikuken

PostPosted: Sat May 09, 2009 3:58 am



<3
Thank you.
It's one of my favorites that I've written <333
PostPosted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 5:11 pm


thats really awesome. have you ever been published? you definetely should mrgreen oh yeah  

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