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Loneliness/Curly [Of Mice and Men essay] C+C FOR A GRADE!

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Lyf Ling
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 9:55 pm


Rough draft with loads of things to edit in.

Curly seemed to be separate from the other men on the farm, even from his wife, causing him to be lonely. Loneliness is a feeling of being cut off, disconnected, and/or alienated from other people, so that it feels difficult or even impossible to have any form of meaningful human contact. No one ever wanted to spend unnecessary time with Curly, because he bullied everyone. Curly, a character in Of mice and Men, a novel by John Steinbeck, had differences caused him to have rows with the workers, and caused him to now make any real friends, and became lonely.

Curly separated himself from other men on the farm, because he didn’t allow himself to fit in. He was the bosses son, and therefore was placed on a higher pedestal than everyone else. Curly was partially responsible for this separation, because he wanted to show he was better. However, in doing this, he didn’t allow himself to make friends with the other men. He acted more important than the men, and never did any work, to improve his reputation as being of a higher class. It seemed like he was trying to show off his place.
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Curly’s wife used to find company in other people, sometimes showing her companions her dissatisfaction with Curly. Often, Curly would be looking for his wife, whom would be wondering around the farm. They never seemed to be together, and the men on the farm took that as Curly’s wife being flirtatious. She once told Lenny
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. Curly took it upon himself to bully bigger guys.
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[name] said. This characteristic shows his insecurities. Insecurities can often be accentuated when someone feels like they don’t have friends. The way Curly was treated most likely caused the way he treated others.

The loneliness Curly felt caused him to be bitter. His wife didn’t love him, the farm hands didn’t like him as a person either. Curly bullied bigger guys, never worked, and was cruel to others to try to show off. It appears that all of this anger and loneliness wasn’t necessary, and that Curly could’ve worked towards not having that attitude if he’d wanted to. [Clincher]
PostPosted: Mon Nov 20, 2006 2:57 am


So the main idea is Curly's loneliness causes his agression? Nice.

I remember, I had to rewrite "Of Mice and Men" which I did with pleasure, cause I thought it sucked. xD I completely did a one-eighty on the thing, adding characters, adding fantasy, not killing anyone... It was great. xD heart

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Lyf Ling
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 20, 2006 5:38 am


The book was too short to kill two main characters off, I think.

My teacher took off a load of points on this quickwrite she had us do imediatly after the book, because I talked about why having two characters die doesn't make it a good book or something. She said it was complaining.

Our essays have to be around one of the characters in the book and has to have either loneliness, friendship, sacrifice, or longing for home as a theme. All the other ones were too easy.
PostPosted: Mon Nov 20, 2006 3:49 pm


Okay, so like, I didn't write my essay until last night so I couldn't print it for my peer edit today. I brought it on my doggle thing though, and so I went over to print it out. But like.. it wouldn't open it, so this guy got it to open as a different file, which had only a small amount of garbled stuff, enough that I could edit it out. The other ones were alot worse. So then the printer won't work. Then the teaher's like, "Well save it, and print it out on my computer" So I did, and I went, and it wouldn't open it. It was annoying. And she had a shitty computer. So then like... I went back, and it wouldn't open again, without being filled with messed up things.

But I did get a grade for having it.

So like, critisism/edits are in neeed. <333

Lyf Ling
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Donatellothedog

PostPosted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 1:30 pm


I've never read the book, so sadly I can't really peer edit your work.
All I know is if its just the first post and that's it that looks reaaaaally short.
Although that's only because I have a thing for going into depth and doing 10 pages on shtuff.
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 23, 2006 3:30 pm


There must be a computations conspiracy against you. Shall we get the Cornflakes?

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Donatellothedog

PostPosted: Fri Nov 24, 2006 3:39 pm


>>
Possibly.
Unless of course I get some cheese and crackers first. 8D
PostPosted: Sun Nov 26, 2006 6:51 pm


She's making us do it through a structure. So I have to have a certain amount of sentances and a certain about of paragraphs.

My nefew had the same assignment when he was in my grade, so he edited it for me.

Lyf Ling
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